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So I bow before you and lightly touch your arm Dear Sir, if I may? You look up to me and I visualize a smile behind the mask Just like my smile, the one you can see plastered on my face The one I can't get off And all the while I think that you can see The thumping in my chest Where my heart bursts out in fear or anticipation or hope I look down at you and lift you in my arms And bury my nose in the wealth of curls that smother my smile All the while carrying you there with your lips glued to my ear whispering You sound surprised Why me? There are so many here? But I want only you And then, at twelve, you lose your shoe While I carry you to your carriage But no fear, I will collect it Find you again And make you mine

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Phillip Garcia

Date: 10/24/2016 1:49:00 AM

Thank you for your lovely comments on my poems, Darren- Having had an opportunity now to dive into your wonderful contributions your praise means even more- I particularly enjoyed this piece, it's enigmatic in a straight forward kind of way which I dug. When i lived in Albuquerque the sheriff (a right wing cowboy) was named Darren White who always cut in line at Valero which pissed me off. You should change your screen name to "The Sheriff" for me and bring civility back to your name :)

Darren White
Date: 10/24/2016 3:20:00 AM

Ohh, THANK YOU!! You make me smile :D And now I am wondering how to get a nickname here on Poetrysoup? I see so many have one, but I can't seem to figure out how it works. If I finally do. I'll sheriff myself temporarily for you ;)

Jan Allison

Date: 10/17/2016 5:18:00 AM

You swept me off my feet with your beautiful romantic poem Darren:-) the ending brought a lump to my throat:-) hugs Jan xx

Darren White
Date: 10/17/2016 5:42:00 AM

Thanks Jan :)