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Cinder Morn

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The clouds hanging low muffled the maple-covered mountain. Fog from the saturated earth weakly, wet the newborn breeze. Mist maintained the rainy connection between earth and eternity. A gray day lay upon the weary weakened eye of morning. Soon the breeze blossomed to wind wiping the cinders from the sun.

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Rhonda Johnson-Saunders

Date: 3/2/2012 10:17:00 PM

I'm not usually fond of a rainy morning but you have made it something special. Congrats on your win! Blessings, Rhonda

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 3/2/2012 9:08:00 PM

DEBBIE... CONGRATULATIONS ..ON YOUR WONDERFUL WIN~ Have yourself a very nice night ;-)*always..pd

Kim Merryman

Date: 2/29/2012 2:54:00 PM

Beautiful imagery, Debbie. Congrats on your 1st place win! Love, Kim

Sashi Prabhu

Date: 2/29/2012 3:15:00 AM

well sculpted imagery.... congrats on the win~sashi

Kash Poet

Date: 2/29/2012 12:57:00 AM

Very nice imagery here Debi.Congratulations on your win.

Ralph Taylor

Date: 2/28/2012 5:44:00 PM

Congrats, Deb. Outstanding, well written piece. Nice going. luv Ralph

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 2/28/2012 10:51:00 AM

Congratulations on your placement in Brian's "Short Verse" contest Debbie. Love, Carol

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 9/13/2011 9:11:00 PM

Congratulations on the win in the contest of John, Debbie

Nette Onclaud

Date: 9/12/2011 11:29:00 PM

like the cinder effect.. loads of smiling cheers to you for the amazing award!! :) huggs

Robert A. Dufresne

Date: 9/12/2011 9:01:00 PM

beautiful alliterative imagery in this one of yours Debbie. Great going and congratulations. certainly well deserved

Lori Lucas Mcclure

Date: 9/12/2011 6:08:00 PM

Congratulations on your amazing win!!---Lori

Sara Kendrick

Date: 9/12/2011 3:17:00 PM

Congrats on your great work being in the winners' circle..Sara

Kim Merryman

Date: 9/12/2011 12:13:00 PM

Congrats on your win, Debbie! Kim

Olusegun Arowolo

Date: 9/12/2011 11:13:00 AM

AWESOME!!!Congrats on your well deserved win,Debbie.Thanks for going through my poems.......YOU are the best...Love Olusegun..

Carrie Richards

Date: 9/12/2011 10:18:00 AM

Oh my.....(the most gorgeous poem of all those I've read here).... not forced alliteration...just flows with loveliness! :)

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 9/12/2011 8:32:00 AM

Congratulations on your top win In Moses' "Alliteration Poem Please" contest Debbie. Love, Carol

John Freeman

Date: 9/12/2011 6:31:00 AM

A Nice combination alliteration, Debbie. Congratulations on your first place. Agape, Moses

David Williams

Date: 9/12/2011 3:55:00 AM

Debbie congrats on your win..David

Joyce Johnson

Date: 9/12/2011 1:17:00 AM

Great Debbie. Congratulations on your first place win. Love, Joyce

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 9/12/2011 1:06:00 AM

Congrats Debbie on first place win with this great Alliteration poetry luv..

Caryl Ramsdale

Date: 9/12/2011 12:25:00 AM

A 1st place congratulations Debbie for your placement in John Freeman's Alliteration Poems Please contest. CR

Caryl Ramsdale

Date: 9/10/2011 3:36:00 PM

I really like this line..."A gray day lay upon the weary weakened eye of morning" CR

Debbie Guzzi
Date: 9/12/2011 8:55:00 AM

Thanks Caryl..what you feel is the PULL of internal rhyme..though the verse has no end rhyme and I believe it to be Free Verse..a wee smattering of internal rhyme was used for emphasis of the concluding thought..