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Choreography By the Unconscious

Series of daydreams blind me, reality seems dull and bland. When awake I'm still fatigued, It's time to take a stand. Reality is all work, striving to provide. Elaborate dreams of success, projecting deep inside your mind. In your dreams you can be successful, doing what you do everyday. You can make an infinite income, and have everything your way. The average human being in reality, makes a decent wage. Still, most struggle to survive, trapped in life's invisible cage. No limitations in the fantasy realm, your mind sets the stage. Choreography by the unconscious, horizons spread a distant gauge: ***I own a little cottage on fifty acres of land. Fields of vegetation and a lake made by man. ***A beautiful model bride to exemplify true love. Another on the side I just picked her up last month. ***A private corporate jet with my own attending crew. To do with at my discretion, "Sir, what can I get you" ***An over-sized garage with every car my brain produces. This is definitely a mirage, oh how my brain seduces.. Jared Pickett 12/21/05 Asavvy1

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Date: 1/22/2010 5:05:00 AM
The tirle pulled me in and the verse kept me in captivity! Awesome write! You have huge dreams , they will come true!
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Date: 12/6/2009 1:11:00 PM
Wow! I think this is your best ever, Jared, and that's saying a lot! The dreamscape chorography set by the mind's stage is a brilliant concept to express the freedom we feel in dreams. Some people have lucid dreams in which they know they are dreaming. A counselor once asked what I do when having a lucid dream and I did not hesitate to answer, "Fly." It's the same type of freedom you describe in this brilliant poem! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 12/3/2009 11:11:00 AM
Fabulous imagery conveyed here with a smooth rhythm and flow! Great job! Thanks so much for sharing~Mary
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Date: 11/28/2009 12:08:00 PM
funny, keep dreaming!
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Date: 11/28/2009 6:53:00 AM
much fun! Jared! great imagination! Jimbo
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Date: 11/27/2009 7:32:00 AM
Yes! How wonderful the fantasy realm. I use it constantly. All the things I aint I turn into marvel. Love, daver
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Date: 11/27/2009 2:23:00 AM
Well Written by inspiratio'
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Date: 11/26/2009 5:51:00 PM
Oh ... This Is Definitely Going Into My Fav's ... Mr. Pickett ... This Thought of Yours Is A Great Focal-Point In All Humans ... 'cause who doesn't dream - (if they don't, boy, they don't know what they're missing! - smile) ... Chat You later my friend ... MoonBee
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Date: 11/26/2009 3:44:00 PM
Kool poem Jared, i would love to see in your mind, you write some splendid pieces >> James
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Date: 11/26/2009 2:09:00 PM
This one is wonderful, Jared. Imagination leads to reality... eventually. (maybe) It is good to imagine and to live with mental enjoyment. Wise words are in this poem. Nice write. Dane Ann
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Date: 11/26/2009 7:34:00 AM
Cleverly named and presented , Jared ....
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Date: 11/26/2009 5:35:00 AM
OK so I made it to Pittsburgh in one piece but u must check your Soup Mail in a few .. now my brother was wonderful enough to let me use his fired up computer to stay in touch with my Soup Family during this holiday weekend.. now thats "brotherly love"... u know Philly... liberty bell... city of brotherly love... got me, right? check Soup Mail in a few minutes.. blessings .. luv.. "Sweetie"
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Date: 11/25/2009 11:53:00 PM
Very imaginative writing Jared.Rgds Brian & thanks for your welcome comments & kind words today.
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Date: 11/25/2009 10:51:00 PM
i love the little cottage on fifty acres of land and the lake made by man's hands ,Jared!yet you seem to want much more than that, a bride and another on the side,harem:)..you made me laugh,im enjoying this write..a private jet,i would love that to go around the world;)..regarding the cars..i can see them there,the collection..lovely dream indeed,yet lets tnk God we afford to dream..sweet write Jared,one of my fav poets indeed--Charma
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Date: 11/25/2009 1:59:00 PM
And so it can do that. The frustrations in life arrive when we want and day dream and never achieve any of the day dreams. Love the humor here. Keep the creative pen flowing. Sara
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Date: 11/25/2009 1:57:00 PM
So much truth in your words. A touch of humor for a lighthearted approach. Still much for the reader to ponder about. Thank you for sharing your thoughts with us and for dropping by to comment on my poem. Happy Thanksgiving! Karen
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Date: 11/25/2009 12:29:00 PM
Hi Jared, thanks for your comment on my Haiku, I struggle with these. This poem of yours is awesome, I am a dreamer, so I can really relate to your tale. Good writing. I have a new contest started called, Anything Goes, should be fun to see what kinds of poetry I receive.
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Date: 11/25/2009 5:42:00 AM
Wow ... tapped into another realm with this one, Asavvy 1, and I so enjoyed.. off to my errands today... \ Soup Mail 4 U ... "Sweetie"
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Date: 11/24/2009 10:29:00 PM
This is a great funny poem...enjoyed reading...Marty
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Date: 11/24/2009 8:49:00 PM
Your brains has some great seductions, nice work as always and yes, I have seen Funny Farm, you cracked me up...Raul
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