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Cement Walls

He looked at me. I saw him through the slats. His eyes brighter than the moon, Smile as pink as a rose. From that moment I knew.

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Daver Austin

Date: 5/16/2015 9:34:00 AM

This is much like tanka. The "slats" is interesting as a metaphor - don't know whether you meant it that way. The last line is interesting in this regard. I like it just as a romantic piece. Congrats on the selection. daver

Skat A

Date: 5/10/2015 10:48:00 AM

Alexis :) Congratulations on having your poem featured this Mothers Day. SKAT love

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 5/4/2015 3:21:00 PM

Hi Alexis, A nice warm WELCOME to poetry soup. I hope you have fun with this wonderful community. You'll find many friendly poets who are ready to support and give positive feedback. I will enjoy following you and your poetry when you are ready :) We are Lucky To Have you. Enjoy 2015, with New Poet Friends @-> LINDA <-@

Skat A

Date: 5/4/2015 2:54:00 PM

Alexis, Stopping by with a nice, sweet Welcome to Poetry Soup. I will get much delight in reading and in time become familiar with your verse. As for now, I will greet you with the same smile others passed when I first joined the soup. Wishing you and your poetry the best. I hope you get to meet all the nice poets around here STARTING with me- SKAT :-) Please drop a hello and tell me a little about yourself if you wish. I would like to be your newest poetry soup "FRIEND" Hugs* SKAT