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Castle On a Hill

There was a castle on a hill It only took hours to build Buckets and buckets of sand Two pairs of children's hands A vacant high spot on the beach Just out of the low tides reach Two kids, plastic shovels and pails Construct a castle minus hammers and nails The ground floor must be the driest As water seeps down from the highest A little shovelful here and there Customized architectural repairs A spectacular four story sight The envy of Frank Lloyd Wright Onlookers and passers by Give congratulatory high fives There's not much time to gloat Changing tide is filling the moat Once the water spills over the side The sand will swim out with the tide an original poem by Daniel Turner

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Date: 6/9/2016 6:22:00 PM
Beautiful Poem DT, Congratulations.....
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Date: 5/1/2016 5:56:00 PM
Daniel,, Congratulations on your castle on a hill win... love Linda
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Date: 5/1/2016 3:58:00 AM
Good poem would never of thought about sand castles well done xxx
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Date: 4/30/2016 2:31:00 PM
Its been a while I visited.. I have also not been online for a while due to my work but I am back now and this piece is just the perfect start I need to come back home to my wonderful poetrysoup. This is amazing, beautiful and a high seven! Well done friend
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Date: 4/27/2016 1:58:00 PM
Loved your approach on a castle on a hill. Well done, Danny.
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Date: 4/27/2016 12:57:00 PM
Congrats on your great win with this beautiful poem my lovely friend. Loved always, bl
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Date: 4/27/2016 12:56:00 PM
DT, many congrats on your placement in the contest! :)-luloo
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Date: 4/27/2016 12:56:00 PM
Daniel, congratulations on your placement in the 'castles' contest. Love your imagery. We built many sandcastles of the years with little ones. Sandra
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Date: 4/27/2016 12:39:00 PM
Congratulations Daniel on the placement of the contest.
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Date: 4/24/2016 5:30:00 PM
Good one.
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Date: 4/20/2016 3:43:00 PM
Beautiful write. Just witnessed this in Florida last week. Freezing cold when I left! Enjoyed your creativity and imagery.
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Date: 4/20/2016 3:12:00 PM
This is a poem of vision on many levels-the building of it, the admiration of the work and the reality of a changing tide! The mind's eye sees this!
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Date: 4/20/2016 1:10:00 PM
anything designed by innocent, creative hands is an architectural wonder.. and so is this work. well done, daniel..huggs
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Date: 4/20/2016 12:56:00 PM
- A lovely poem, Daniel - Many castles as masterpieces in sand - Good luck in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 4/20/2016 12:03:00 PM
Very nice! Good luck! Glad you're up to writing!
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Date: 4/20/2016 10:39:00 AM
Terrific story DT my friend. I really enjoyed it.
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Date: 4/20/2016 9:54:00 AM
good take on the theme good luck
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Date: 4/20/2016 9:52:00 AM
I'm glad to see that your pain is not obstructing your creativeness. This is a good one, Danny.
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Date: 4/20/2016 9:31:00 AM
DT...love this..very well written...:)-luloo
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Date: 4/20/2016 9:09:00 AM
I miss kids' days of summer my dear friend. Thanks for the bring back Daniel
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