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Castle Contest

Im in a crystal castle the diamondesque walls retreats my hassles A picture dances on the mantle Looking upon a throne of depth and desire glassy walls reflect the fire im dwelling in a kingdom of flames Face painted by ranks and shame how did I obtain such a smiled at fame could it be the bloodline of my name? From the land in which I came? This place is such a scary shape secret passages secret messages high ceilings silk drapes. I elate around the ball room I create the beautiful faces bloom but I must go and go home to my doom for I cannot forever stay in this place and pester for I am not royalty at all.. but merely the jester. B. Maxine 1/25/14

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Date: 2/4/2014 7:18:00 PM
A fine piece, congrats.
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Date: 2/4/2014 11:39:00 AM
Congrats on your fine win.
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Date: 2/4/2014 6:16:00 AM
Enjoyed your write on castle and congrats on the win, Maxine
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Date: 2/4/2014 12:01:00 AM
I love the ending Maxine super poem congrats on placing ty for entering Shadow x smile hug
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Date: 2/2/2014 10:20:00 AM
I enjoyed it
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Date: 2/1/2014 8:10:00 PM
Good read
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Date: 1/29/2014 7:04:00 PM
You also have an extra "not" in your line that is third from the bottom. It is really not needed. It is between "cannot" and "forever". Still, this was an interesting write.
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Date: 1/29/2014 8:20:00 PM
Thank you.
Date: 1/29/2014 2:54:00 AM
Nice ending, A nice little twist. you've got two 'the's in line 5.
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Date: 1/29/2014 12:44:00 PM
Thank you very much!! I didnt notice it. :)
Date: 1/28/2014 7:41:00 PM
I didn't expect this ending. This was quite the ride. The faces around us and how we see them, compared to how they really are. Perception speaks volumes, for better or worse. Nice to meet you, Britney! Great job!
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Date: 1/29/2014 12:45:00 PM
Agreed ! Thanks for reading glad you enjoyed it. Nice to meet you as well :)
Date: 1/28/2014 6:31:00 PM
- Nice to read your great poem Britney. - oxox // Anne-Lise :)
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