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I actually wrote this Haibun a couple years ago, but it didn't have an ending ... so now I've finally completed it :) A true story about by first backpacking trip in Cascade, Idaho ...

 

Unfortunately the character limit wouldn't let me post it all in one go ...

 

Please, read Part Two as well to get a conclusion to the story ...

It's been four years since I've seen so much as an insignificant mountain creek. I've been overburdened with comfort, now frantic with nature withdrawals and having to settle for photos found on Google Images: emerald pine trees, blue jays on limbs, moonlight cutting through forests, lakes the color of Windexed glass. It's much like drinking water that's been doused with Crystal Light; you feel yourself becoming hydrated, when in reality it's only satiating your thirst temporarily. So you can imagine my joy when my best friend called me up to break the news: "Monica, Brandon, Joel and I are gonna go backpacking. Care to join?" the finality of a cell hitting the floor - shoe tying Like a bunch of sardines packed in a can on wheels, we headed out to beautiful Cascade: the place where the Idahoan mountains aren't just paintings from afar, but close enough to taste. We weave our way through the spiderweb of dirt trails, as we each take turns changing songs on Joel's iPod. It's my go and I'm searching through the John Denver list, mourning the fact that there's over a hundred songs by him, and not one of them is Colorado Rocky Mountain High (the one song I could say fit my feelings to a tee). The menagerie of everyone's taste in music made for an interesting trip no doubt - even if Jonathan picked the worst possible jams simply for annoyances sake. My first peculiar observation: Humans have been making calendars for thousands of years - the first being more akin to cave drawings and stone tablets than paper - but as long as all that has been going on, the mountains don't care that August is expected to be sultry or that November is expected to be chilly. Because June was taking her first baby steps with a stubborn December mindset - a meandering way to say it was cold enough to freeze your nads off. The five foot mounds of snow made it all the more comical the fact I was wearing plaid shorts. Mother Nature wasn't going to be kind, I could tell. like turtles struggling to stand - our packs full of crockery It was breezy at first. We would practically glide down the mountain side, using our backpacks as a counter balance. The snowy counterpart to kangaroos, we were. The glistening flakes were thick enough to snowboard down - granted I never touched a snowboard, let alone ridden one. But after seeing this it gives me ideas ... Monica smiled for the camera as I fumbled for my iPhone, a smile that didn't even require the forcible Say Cheese! nonsense. It wasn't waiting for the camera flash, but the other way around. Now you might be calling that rather pathetic, but I brought my iPhone along simply for the function of capturing memories. Angry Birds just don't compare to the real ones, sweet with lilting songs. My second peculiar observation: Google Images is an absolute horrid plagiarist; some beauty just can't be encapsulated despite all our advances in high-def technology. The downward slope finally leveled out a bit, if only for a few minutes. Truth be told, the path never stopped declining - some routes were simply more apparent than others. Our group of five walked single file through the trees, all basing our faith that Joel (a person who has been to the site once when the trail WASN'T covered in snow) would lead us in the right direction. And here's another interesting fact: this was no official trail, but a hike through the purest of adventures, unpredictable and unreliable. crushing pine needles with un-gloved fingers - rivers beneath the snow The first time my whole leg collapsed into the fragile surface of the snow made me realize just how far above the dirt I was walking. I'd ask Brandon for assistance with a beet red blush on my cheeks - I blamed it on my fair skin falling victim to the sunny day. From then on out I tiptoed with exaggerated caution, my heavy pack helping me just as much as it was hindering me, for even a foot drop had to be taken with a grain of salt. Everyone had to adjust to the added weight (except for Monica, with her light load of a sleeping bag and nothing else). I'd very ungracefully glide through twigs and pesky low branches, oblivious to my bare legs. In all honesty the cold didn't get to me, just the scratches of neighboring trees is where my concerns lied. At anytime I could have stopped the whole gang, beaming: "Wait a spell and let me put on some pants for crying out loud!" Of course that never happened. My clothes were in the bottom of my pack, and I was nowhere near desperate enough to monkey around with that sorry mess. slick slates slanting down the cliff edge - helping hands Joel, with his redneck stubble, beams up at me: "Every hiking trip needs a little bit of adventure, don't rush it by any means!" That's the last thing on my mind - the first is whether or not that rock I'm about to put my weight on is as stable as she looks. It's a very roundabout route, and as questionable as it is, it's safer by a long shot than the first path we took - call it a 103 degree wall. NOTE: Continued in Part 2 ...

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Date: 6/10/2016 6:13:00 AM
Nature withdrawals...heh I'm feeling that now!! Loving this so so much!!! Always, Laura
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Timothy Hicks
Date: 6/20/2016 11:08:00 PM
Thanks so so much!! :D
Date: 5/29/2016 5:17:00 PM
sorry it took me so long to get back here. Yesterday I thought I'd caught up with comments and then today I noticed at least SEVEN including yours that I had completely forgotten to reply to the other day!
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Date: 5/31/2016 11:50:00 AM
No worries, my friend ... I understand that it's difficult to keep up on, at times!
Date: 5/29/2016 5:15:00 PM
Tim, you are incredible with narrations. So descriptive! My only suggestion is to be consistent with very tense. if you ever wanted to publish this, revise it by deciding whether to be in present tense or in past. Mostly you are in past, but sometimes you go back to present. Your haiku are pretty awesome. I had a few that were favorites because they really measured up for me as TRUE KU!!!
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Timothy Hicks
Date: 5/31/2016 11:49:00 AM
So pleased you liked my like narration, Andrea .... and yes, you are very correct about the tenses ... still something I need to fix in the future!
Date: 5/27/2016 8:44:00 PM
Timothy. I really want to read this two parter. But always I am rushed for time. I PROMISE tomorrow I will read both!!!
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Timothy Hicks
Date: 5/28/2016 10:57:00 AM
It's all good in the hood, my friend. You're a very dedicated Souper, so no worries.
Date: 5/21/2016 5:17:00 AM
Ya got me hooked off to part two.
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Timothy Hicks
Date: 5/24/2016 12:05:00 PM
Thanks Rick!
Date: 5/20/2016 4:19:00 PM
Hey! This is one hell of a long haibun...but I'm not grumbling...I'm enjoying:) After all I'm experiencing this from the comfort of my swivel-chair and not tricky downward slopes! ~~ On to pt 2......
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Timothy Hicks
Date: 5/24/2016 12:00:00 PM
That way you get most of the benefits with very little downfalls ... lol. Thanks for trekking your way through ... because it's based off real experiences is mostly the reason why it's so long.
Date: 5/19/2016 1:51:00 AM
I really loved the second haiku like turtles what fantastic imagery...on to read the second part. Connie
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Timothy Hicks
Date: 5/24/2016 11:27:00 AM
Thanks Connie. Pleased, you liked it so :)
Date: 5/18/2016 6:24:00 PM
With this write I went on a "Cascade Adventure" and do look forward to reading how the rest of this adventure finishes! I really enjoyed this!
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Timothy Hicks
Date: 5/24/2016 11:23:00 AM
Thank you very much, Walter T! I have posted the second one up, so as to not leave people hanging ;)
Date: 5/18/2016 3:33:00 PM
Hey, Timmy, I didn't realize you were such a rusticator! I was also when much younger, of course. I've been in the Rockies, the Appalachians, and the Alps (French and Swiss). Interesting read. As for the "Bicycle", it's based on not one for several agonizing youthful experiences, but the damages wasn't permanent – I don't speak with a falsetto. / M
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Timothy Hicks
Date: 5/24/2016 11:16:00 AM
That's good to hear! Thanks for stopping by ... I hope you also read the second part, as the story reached more of a conclusion.
Date: 5/18/2016 2:54:00 PM
enjoying . . .
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Timothy Hicks
Date: 5/24/2016 10:45:00 AM
Smiling :)

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