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Candlelit Fantasy

No words can describe what you do to me
You inject in me some sort of venom-like sweetness
Mind and body erase
Making room for feeling and admiration
On my side of thought, you merely despise me
You leave me in melancholy wonder
Melting me like a candle, I become so low
And burn all the more!
Because this wax in me is lathered in your substance
Sometimes I wonder if you are made of venom at all
Sometimes I bring myself to believe. . .
That you are sweet. . .
And you want me to enjoy it
Why I suffer so profusely I cannot tell
Why I allow myself to believe 
That I may love you
Only toughens my doubt of a shell
Perhaps I never loved you
Or perhaps I do more and more everyday
And the shell grows all the more fragile
I am low as can be in this room
This dreary, candlelit fantasy involving you
I age in a young body
Trapped in ancient pain
Wrapped in insipid, typical emotion
Bludgeoned with irrefutable doubt
Your very few words burn me
Melting me into nothing. . .
But when I am finally blown out
I have no choice but to harden

Sometimes I return tall
Other times I remain small
I wonder which one you prefer

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  1. Date: 12/17/2013 8:34:00 AM
    Laura......this is so....intense and layered with meaning........Sometimes....we are hurt and yet......that hurt makes us feel matter. I felt this piece to my core. WOW! Amazing!

  1. Date: 9/28/2013 8:44:00 PM
    Love is strange as the old song has it. You offer a fine picture of the pain and sorrow of love here! Peace & Love Matthew Anish

  1. Date: 9/7/2013 4:31:00 PM
    This is a superb write very deeply felt ....twists and turns of the venom, sweetness, wondering and trying to make sense of conflicting done :)

  1. Date: 9/7/2013 9:09:00 AM
    All the flames and smoke and wax, both hard and soft are wonderful. I suppose you were taught that a candle has three forms of wax--the solid, the liquid and the gas. The vaporized paraffin is what burns. I actually like putting paper towels in the wax and letting it all burn in a conflagration. I could have been a pyro. Anyway, you have so much emotion it must be difficult to contain. You are blessed with feeling and thank you so much for sharing it with us. I love it all.

  1. Date: 9/3/2013 10:35:00 AM
    wow! Laura, I almost want to join the imagery. I think I like the soft side of you... :-)... lol.. hugs.. from PD

  1. Date: 9/2/2013 12:55:00 AM
    I love this one Laura... Wonder can be so perplexing sometimes. :o)