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Candle Watch Minichu

The wick aflame on dust whirls About the trying brilliance of the room— Eyes burned eyes on hidden places, firesome Throughout the glass rocked in wax— A kisses' shadow casts glow on the phantasm; For this christening's blow on the last Briefest whim Cracked whispers Shaken The wick aflame on dust whirls; A kisses' shadow casts glow on the phantasm, Shaken.

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Anonomus Scorpio

Date: 4/28/2024 9:37:00 AM

Minichu :) I swear you could sneeze the word and something beautiful would be left lol. This is a warm Sunday morning read Paige.... Thank you I need this today! A.S.

Triny Xiang

Date: 4/16/2024 11:45:00 PM

You cast a beautiful firelight shimmering shadow. Great imagery. May I ask the nature of Minichu?

Paige Hind
Date: 4/16/2024 11:49:00 PM

Sure.. aba first stanza cdc second ddd third and then repeat first line in the first stanza, second line in the second stanza, and then the third line in the third stanza and combine them in your final fourth stanza... hope that helps, i love these

Ink Empress

Date: 4/10/2024 3:59:00 AM

Brilliant diction and metaphors through, woven in such a creative manner always dear paige. I love so many lines in this especially “ Throughout the glass rocked in wax— A kisses' shadow casts glow on the phantasm; For this christening's blow on the last“ how deep and soulful! Pleasure always reading your unique word weavings! Sending you light always

Panagiota Romios

Date: 4/9/2024 7:27:00 PM

Great Job, PaigeM Thank you for visitng my sitetoday, Candlelover… Pangie xx

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 4/9/2024 4:35:00 PM

watching candles is mesmerizing, and you captured it beautifully. I especially liked 'the wick aflame on dust whirls.' Fabulous and accurate image. Well done, Paige. Have a great evening, Sara