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But She Loved Another

It was a massive imposing dark castle, A stronghold safe from invasions; Fortified with a deep moat and stone rampart, On the battements guards watched. And in the dappled light of the chapel, A lone girl with long raven hair wept; She had been betrothed since her birth, But she loved another. Her family had come here for refuge, And she had spent her life within; She could hear her mother calling from the keep, Running through the courtyard her hair was flying; And in her hurry she ran right into his strong arms, And suddenly he was kissing her. And I kissed her deeply because I had to, I had to understand the taste of her breath; All her beautiful words haunt me to this day, God's Angel of Mercy singing for me. Unlike Odysseus' sirens with evil intent, Her words healed my troubled heart; Her eyes mended this broken man, Oh her gracious touch. Her relentless desire, it conquered me, Never before had she acted this way; It is as if she had suddenly become possessed, These castle walls were her complete reality. And I knew her blood belonged in this fortress, Now only her name echoes in my soul. ______________________________ August 5, 2015 Poetry/Narrative/But She Loved Another Copyright Protected, ID 15-697-718-0 All Rights Reserved. Written under Pseudonym with Eric Brodie For the contest, Partner Up, sponsor, Shadow Hamilton First Place

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Date: 9/9/2015 1:10:00 AM
Wonderful collab Broken and Eric! Congrats on superb win!
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Date: 9/8/2015 12:00:00 PM
Many congrats Broken wings and Eric:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 9/8/2015 11:32:00 AM
What a wonderful collaboration Eric and Broken Wings congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 9/8/2015 10:11:00 AM
congrats a great pen Connie and Eric hugs
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Date: 9/8/2015 8:46:00 AM
wow... Broken,, Congratulations on your - Partner up - contest win. **SKAT**
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Date: 9/7/2015 11:21:00 PM
BW, this is a beautiful callab. You Eric did an amazing job! Congratulations on your well deserved win:-) Alexis
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Date: 9/7/2015 9:12:00 PM
Wonderful poem, B.W. & Eric. Congratulations on your win! Hugs Eve
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Date: 8/7/2015 10:48:00 PM
it sounds perfect....glad I could be a part of this...;)
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Constance La France
Date: 8/7/2015 10:52:00 PM
And thank you Eric, it has been an honor writing with you, we created a beautiful poem together and I am very proud of it
Date: 8/7/2015 3:46:00 PM
Reads like a winner..Very alluring write..It captured my attention and held it..Thanks..SK
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Date: 8/7/2015 11:05:00 AM
Very interesting and so charming!
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Date: 8/7/2015 7:22:00 AM
Beautiful pen BW. Good luck to you and EB in the contest!!! All the best.
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Date: 8/6/2015 11:20:00 AM
ohh, looking forward to the ending of this enthralling piece, constance!.. enjoyed much; huggs
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