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I try to still my heart for fear it will thunder past the gates of mortal life and burst into paradise… I slow my ragged breath as I tremble in time my body in tune to this rhythmic rhyme immersed in the sublime Eyelids flutter…. struggling to open, to see… Yet I shut them tight knowing I might faint at the sight of the wanton delight in your eyes! No…. there's no reprieve…. Seared on the inner screen is that look that shattered my secure serenity into a million shards of desire and set them on fire the blaze now reaches higher licking at my very soul Combusting again and again Unchecked…. Untamed….. out of control….. Ahhhh…. I…still my heart I try to....b~r~e~a~t~h~e I writhe, and I seethe not wanting ever to be freed from this need the truth is born in my moan as I lose every thought except….for....this….one …what is soon to come... when the universe's fully undone ...will only come to be... because of the kind of man that you are to me Jade Celest

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Date: 9/3/2016 11:32:00 PM
Hard to beat that opening stanza, Eileen, it's edgy, beautiful, and in your face. It has YOU written all over it. Wonderful romantic poem!
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Date: 8/31/2016 7:26:00 PM
My dear Eileen, this is truly beautiful. "immersed in the sublime" passionate and scientific, absolutely Perfect. I'm combusting again and again.... You're truly for real..
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Date: 8/29/2016 2:42:00 PM
Your pen got me again - I love the rides it takes me on ... CayCay
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Date: 8/24/2016 2:55:00 PM
Ironically I read this one before I read your two timer poem.
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Date: 8/24/2016 8:42:00 AM
I had to read this one again! Amazing!!!!
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Date: 8/22/2016 10:15:00 AM
You have a beautiful sytle, dear lady, and this poem is a perfect example. Thank you so much for your kind words and your encouragement of late, but my leaving has always been inevitable, I've just been too stubborn. I'm sure I'll pop in now and again. Soup mail.
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 8/23/2016 11:01:00 AM
Becca....Soup isn't Soup without you. You've been here for a lonf time and your work is of a high caliber. We all think we will sometime make that eventual break, but....the love of poetry keeps us despite whatever circumstances may arise. I hope to see you again, dear. Hugs....I responded to Soup mail.
Date: 8/22/2016 8:48:00 AM
Ooh la la hot! I'm so glad to see you back and writing. The soup is not the same without you.
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 8/23/2016 11:02:00 AM
:) Thanks, Richard. Your encouragement and presence is always something that keeps me grounded here. Thanks ever so much. Hugs
Date: 8/22/2016 12:43:00 AM
What a Come Back I must say, a fervent beautiful poem filled with passionate energy sweet Eileen. Im not as often on ps myself lately, but am happy to see you here.
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 8/23/2016 11:03:00 AM
Thanks, Charmaine. I'm glad I was able to write again. It took some doing. I've become a little rusty, but at least I wrote something. Thanks for the visit. I've been very busy lately and will continue to be so in the coming month....I won't have much time on here. I'll post when I can. Hugs, dear one.
Date: 8/21/2016 9:50:00 PM
You have found your muse, I am amazed as usual! Lovely poem!
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 8/23/2016 11:04:00 AM
Thanks, Arthur. I hope you got my email. Good to have you visit. Always a pleasure, dear. Hugs
Date: 8/21/2016 1:03:00 PM
ohh, searing with longing lines fiery and soft, eileen... shades of wuthering heights.. huggs
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 8/23/2016 11:05:00 AM
Thanks, dear. I'm glad you liked this piece. A comparison to Wuthering Heights is delightful, for I've read the book. Hugs, dear.
Date: 8/21/2016 9:40:00 AM
Smokin'!! Very passionate write, Eileen. I enjoyed reading you today. Great to see you back posting again. Hope you are well. From the sound of this poem, you are doing great!
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 8/21/2016 12:48:00 PM
:) Smokin's good. :) Thanks Daniel. I'm glad you liked this piece. It feels good to be able to write again. My muse was being naughty and playing hookie....but here is my first poem in two months. Hugs
Date: 8/21/2016 6:49:00 AM
The heavenly heights of passion, most desirable and climaxing beyond control! It takes the perfect partner to tango thus! Hugs // paul
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 8/21/2016 12:50:00 PM
Yes, dear Paul. You have captured the essence of the poem. That sweet height is just amazing. I hope I captured it well. Good to have your visit. Hugs
Date: 8/21/2016 5:42:00 AM
- Dear Eileen, a deep and beautiful poem .... with strong yearnings :) - hugs and happy Sunday // Anne-Lise :)
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 8/21/2016 12:51:00 PM
Thanks, Sunshine....Yearnings are there to keep us alive. I appreciate the visit, dear one.

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