Building Sand Castles: A Waltmarie Poetic Form

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Poetic Form: Verse/Waltmarie
Inspired: 2024 January 31

Verse/Waltmarie Poetic Form:
10 lines
Odd lines: Longer, non-syllabic, unrhymed
Even lines: Shorter, two-syllables (Expound/expose the odd line)
*Even lines create a mini-version

Image: N/A

The Pacific inky bluish ocean ashore splashed quite clear traipsing through surging surf across the sandy beach soleless a hot noonday sun pours o'er an early-made sand castle crumbling two conch shells lying about is now being held to ears New Wave a large beach towel wraps two necking near a car lot planning

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Vijay Pandit

Date: 2/1/2024 5:36:00 AM

Your poem brings to fore progressively beautiful images--and takes the reader to the scene:--The Pacific inky bluish ocean ashore splashed--a hot noonday sun pours o'er an early-made sand castle--splendid!

Hilo Poet
Date: 2/1/2024 6:05:00 AM

Your spotlights, Vijay, accentuates your thought filled good natured qualities, my friend, Aloha, William

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 2/1/2024 4:42:00 AM

outstanding!! both in structure and imagery....loved it...enjoy your day, Sara

Hilo Poet
Date: 2/1/2024 6:02:00 AM

Thanks, Sara, always appreciate reading your encouraging words, Aloha, William

Karen Jones

Date: 2/1/2024 2:21:00 AM

Ah this is like a red reverie of sandy beach thoughts. I enjoyed reading and could really hear the waves in the shell. Good job

Hilo Poet
Date: 2/1/2024 5:58:00 AM

A wealth of shared goodness, Karen, always welcoming, Aloha, William