Bubble

I'm trapped in a bubble A fantasy world I created I'm afraid it's nothing but trouble An illusion I can't escape I'm trapped in a bubble A prisoner of some sort I'm numb I can't feel anything anymore I feel it deep in my gut Like vines wrapping themselves around me Twisting and pulling my insides It's devouring me I can't feel anything anymore Not even sadness I'm an empty shell A walking zombie The numbness won't go away It won't leave me I think I'm getting used to its company It nests in my brain Killing me softly Its hunger is too strong for me to tame Too strong for me to control I can't feel anything anymore No one can help me It's too late for that

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Richard Lamoureux

Date: 12/7/2017 8:39:00 AM

Thanks for reading my Dark Lover poem.

Darlene De Beaulieu

Date: 12/5/2017 8:03:00 PM

Hello Anonymous, all I can say is .......... It is never too late for help. Have a nice evening my friend.

Laurice S.
Date: 12/6/2017 4:18:00 PM

True, it is never too late <3 Thank you

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 12/1/2017 9:29:00 AM

I wrote a piece call “Dark Lover” that deals with depression. Unfortunately mental illness still has a stigma. As a result people try to deal with it on their own. People don’t feel comfortable talking about it. That’s where the poet comes in. We can tackle issues head on and connect people emotionally to an issue.

Laurice S.
Date: 12/5/2017 4:47:00 AM

I loved it and I also related to it so much <3

Richard D Seal

Date: 11/30/2017 2:23:00 PM

Hello Anon, Often when a reader reads a poem where the writer uses I this, I that, the reader associates the content as being the writer, try writing this in the third party. She’s trapped in a bubble/A fantasy world self created/Afraid it’s nothing but trouble/Trapped in that bubble. Some great lines in this, the last line is perfect, real impact to end the poem. Take care, Richard

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/1/2017 9:35:00 AM

Good advice Richard. Anony, the benefit of writing in third person is that you can explore more deeply from an anonymous perspective. You can then take tangents and view from any perspective you wish. It does offer a different kind of freedom to your writing.

Laurice S.
Date: 12/1/2017 7:21:00 AM

Thank you! I wrote this more for myself at first, as a way to describe feelings that I couldn't <3

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 11/30/2017 8:47:00 AM

You have expressed depression eloquently. I hope this is from imagination and not something you are currently dealing with.

Laurice S.
Date: 12/1/2017 7:19:00 AM

Thank you <3 I think everyone deals with thoughts like these at some point in their lives but you get through it with the help of good friends and family :)