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Broken Beauty

struck asunder by the blow broken pieces into one glisten, sparkle gold will flow beauty's what it has become

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Richard Lamoureux

Date: 1/18/2014 9:11:00 AM

Congratulations on your win. Short and sweet!

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 1/17/2014 9:02:00 PM

Great write and imagery, congrats on the fine win, Stephen

Roy Jerden

Date: 1/17/2014 7:30:00 PM

Short, but defines the concept well in physical terms, although it doesn't touch on the concept as an extended metaphor. Still, I thought it deserved a placement due to the fine imagery. Glad to see you got some help with it. Congratulations on the placement.

Robert Pettit

Date: 1/11/2014 5:25:00 PM

Nice write, but it needs some correction in the first line: The word "sunder" is normally a verb in the English language, but you are improperly treating it as if it were a noun. For correction, replace "to sunder" with "asunder" (an adverb).

Stephen Honor
Date: 1/11/2014 5:53:00 PM

Corrected, thank you!!

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 1/11/2014 5:19:00 PM

- Really well written, Quatrain poem Stephen ! - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Stephen Honor
Date: 1/11/2014 7:57:00 PM

Thank you, honestly the 2nd poem I have ever wrote.