Broken

Broken My rag doll had no arms I on the streets, no home a rainy cold day an old man, a stranger hugged me no legs on the streets, discarded he fed me broken bones, penniless shared his little heart with me somehow we survived I have two children now they adore him grandpa

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Paul Callus

Date: 10/31/2023 4:24:00 PM

I love this, Aurore; a poem which touches the heart. In life I have learned that one must never throw in the towel; somehow we'll cope and survive. ~ Regards, my friend // paul

Aurore Severo
Date: 11/1/2023 12:39:00 AM

Thank you so much Paul

Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 10/23/2023 4:46:00 AM

Ah, tear drop fell xo

Deb M

Date: 9/17/2023 12:20:00 AM

Aurore this made me emotional….so very moving and so very beautiful! I love the line “shared his little heart with me” such sweetness in that line! Deb x

Aurore Severo
Date: 10/21/2023 12:43:00 AM

Thank you :) :) :)

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 9/3/2023 5:35:00 AM

This is quirky and impactful. You told a lifetime in a few seconds. Well done.

Aurore Severo
Date: 9/16/2023 6:30:00 PM

Thank you Richard, I tried my best.

I Am Anaya

Date: 8/31/2023 2:36:00 PM

There is a beat or maybe offbeat to your unique poetry, bohemian natured perhaps. The words stunning to feel your life, Aurore. Sad but true, all for a greater reason. Enjoyed your experience, ~Anaya

Aurore Severo
Date: 9/16/2023 6:30:00 PM

Thank you very much :)

Ink Empress

Date: 8/28/2023 12:57:00 PM

This is such a moving write. The way you’ve written this and how it flows so seamlessly with excellent storytelling truly touched my heart. Love this. And a kind hand and gesture could do wonders, such beautiful stories need to be read and told more often. Soul warming really

Aurore Severo
Date: 9/16/2023 6:31:00 PM

You are very kind, thank very much. :)

Bill Baker

Date: 8/27/2023 2:50:00 PM

Your imagery and straight-forward approach is engaging and goes straight to the heart of the reader. The journey is painful, but your close brings a joy to my heart. Thanks for sharing the good side of humanity in a world filled with evil deeds. Smiles ~ Blessings Bill

Bill Baker
Date: 10/21/2023 1:20:00 AM

Just visit when you can, Aurore, it was nice to hear your voice through your poetry. Hugs, Bill

Aurore Severo
Date: 9/16/2023 6:32:00 PM

Thank you Bill, I wish I had more time to be here, and post and read more lovely poetry here.

Vijay Pandit

Date: 8/27/2023 12:19:00 PM

A powerful emotion envelopes the reader--for every line conveys the pain of being without basics of life. I like the ending that conveys--one can overcome it all and step into a better tomorrow. So well done!

Aurore Severo
Date: 9/16/2023 6:32:00 PM

Thank you :) :)

Jerry Brotherton

Date: 8/27/2023 11:23:00 AM

Your words run me through a gauntlet of emotions. I shed tears for the hardship and struggle but want to stand up and cheer for the last two lines. A powerful poem.

Aurore Severo
Date: 9/16/2023 6:33:00 PM

Thanks so much Jerry :)

Sotto Poet

Date: 8/27/2023 7:05:00 AM

Your poem is a profound masterpiece that captivates my senses. Although I have only delved into this particular piece, its essence emanates an unparalleled depth, leaving an indelible impression upon my soul. Your words possess a remarkable ability to transport me to a world of profound emotions and experiences, urging me to eagerly anticipate your future creations. Thanks for your comment on my page

Aurore Severo
Date: 9/16/2023 6:29:00 PM

Thank you, you are too kind.

Charlotte Puddifoot

Date: 8/27/2023 4:51:00 AM

i've only read this one, but immediately it shows me a unique, intense and impactful writer - keep writing and posting!

Aurore Severo
Date: 9/16/2023 6:29:00 PM

Thank you so much Charlotte, I really appreciate the encouragement. :)

Jan Allison

Date: 8/27/2023 4:43:00 AM

such a touching piece, you brought tears to my eyes Aurore. hugs jan x

Aurore Severo
Date: 9/16/2023 6:28:00 PM

Many thanks for kind words Jan :)

Sara Kendrick

Date: 8/27/2023 1:59:00 AM

Sad story you have told in poetic form. We as the average person has no idea of how many people suffer like this in a country that has so much to offer. Thanks for sharing this one with us and your visit to my page. Sara

Aurore Severo
Date: 9/16/2023 6:28:00 PM

Thank you Sara for such kind words.

Regina Mcintosh

Date: 8/27/2023 1:06:00 AM

So sweet. God bless you. Love, Gina

Aurore Severo
Date: 9/16/2023 6:27:00 PM

Thank you so much.