Broken

Sink your poisoned dragonfly wings in my chiffon atoms of smothered skin, As I lay supine, along dusk's apathetic horizons, husky and hoaxed, For, I'm a kin of blood-moon, gnawing at ivory moonstones and ocean's fins, As a broken carmine harp, that blooms kohl-orchids from chartreuse stems, smoked, If my fangs pierce through sun-sequined dawns, am I not grim reaper's broken ballerina? As a wistful wildflower, I float in harbours of helium, weeping acidic dews, Inhaling watercolor volcano's lifeless heartbeats, akin a frosted firebird, Carving legends of medusa, on lilith's marble-canvas and mahogany adieus, Rising as a seascape-myth on glossy shorelines, ebbing in onyx spirals, savoured, If pine leaves strangle the trinkets of my throat, am I not a broken snowflake's last breath? "I'm an orphan of poised Mars, swirling in solstitial meadows, Of shipwrecked sonatas, saturating in igloo-hues of coiled shadows..."

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Constance La France

Date: 9/11/2023 12:18:00 AM

Hiya, congratulations on your win in my contest, Constance

Susan Ashley

Date: 9/7/2023 10:44:00 AM

Dear Hiya, I'm enchanted by the swirl of dramatic imagery and striking metaphors, a heady blend of beauty and bewitchment that whirls my heart's imagination in magical and mystical ways. The depth and breadth of emotion is revealed with potent poetic artistry. "am I not grim reaper's broken ballerina?" -wow! Simple stunning! Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 8/27/2023 9:44:00 AM

Congratulations on your win. A creative/powerful ~ write/story. I enjoyed reading it. Have a great day with your wonderful win.............

Christuraj Alex

Date: 8/26/2023 10:00:00 PM

You have a beautifully flowery word power. Congratulations!

Sotto Poet

Date: 8/26/2023 11:17:00 AM

Back with hearty congratulations on your contest win with this lovely poem, Hiya.

Lady Labyrinth

Date: 8/25/2023 4:21:00 PM

Exquisite. Another language entirely. Your beautiful translation reminds me of George Sterling. It reminds me of this, which you may like.

Lady Labyrinth
Date: 8/25/2023 4:22:00 PM

https://theotherpages.org/poems/part2/sterling02.html

Bill Baker

Date: 8/25/2023 3:56:00 PM

Your imagery and descriptions are eloquent, and the depth and variety of your knowledge is intriguing, my friend. Good luck in the contest. A poet friend in Texas, Bill

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 8/25/2023 12:33:00 PM

- Hiya,every word chosen carefully...your use of metaphors is impressive (at a high level) ...a great quote too :) - Best wishes in the contest :) - hugs

Tom Woody

Date: 8/25/2023 10:39:00 AM

"Am I not the grim reaper's broken ballerina?" Ha! I'll bet that line has never been used before. As an orphan of Mars, I offer you my heartiest congrats on this superlative poem

Charity Johnson

Date: 8/25/2023 10:33:00 AM

Nice poem :)

Aysha Nuwas

Date: 8/25/2023 12:46:00 AM

As I wrote on the same title had to read here, and I loved this! :)

Valsa George

Date: 8/24/2023 8:48:00 PM

Hiya, as a poet you are one of a kind and your poetry is off the beaten track. Each time, I read your poems you make me look up the dictionary with one word or the other. "If my fangs pierce through sun-sequined dawns, am I not grim reaper's broken ballerina? " What depth of meaning it embodies ! Run your Marathon race to the point of victory !

Hiya Sharma
Date: 8/27/2023 12:44:00 AM

Awwn, you're so sweet and kind my dear poetess, I'm deeply grateful for your heartwarming words and magical appreciation, truly. This feedback means so much to me, especially coming from you~ Thank you so much!!! :)

Gershon Wolf

Date: 8/24/2023 7:24:00 PM

I am going to refrain from launching an attack with my poisoned wings against your chiffon atoms -- mostly so that you live to write another day, and I can read your poems and marvel over the imagery. Keep 'em coming. Thanks, Gershon

Hiya Sharma
Date: 8/27/2023 12:34:00 AM

Oh wow, thank you so much for your brilliant words of appreciation, means a lot, definitely. I'm grateful for your kind visit, thank you for reading and supporting! :)

Charlotte Puddifoot

Date: 8/24/2023 1:30:00 PM

there's so much i love about this - great word combinations and imagery, with not a cliche in sight! i particularly love the pine leaves line, and 'sun-sequined'..you're a very talented writer; it's a joy to read your work :)

Hiya Sharma
Date: 8/27/2023 12:32:00 AM

Awh, this means so much to me, I'm wholeheartedly grateful for your kind visit, thank you so much for reading! Your beautiful words of appreciation have warmed my heart :)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/24/2023 11:06:00 AM

gosh, so much imagery made me feel like I was reading free verse, but I could pick up a few of the rhymes too. Beautiful.

Hiya Sharma
Date: 8/27/2023 12:31:00 AM

Thank you so much for your gorgeous and kind words dear, I'm deeply grateful, thank you so much for visiting and reading :)

Jay Narain

Date: 8/24/2023 10:45:00 AM

Intellectual high level poem. Goes beyond my linguistic skills.

Hiya Sharma
Date: 8/26/2023 6:11:00 AM

Awh, such beautiful words, I'm deeply humbled and honoured, means so much to me, thank you so much for your wonderful support, always :)

Sotto Poet

Date: 8/24/2023 9:37:00 AM

Hiya, your writing is incredibly well-crafted. Each word seems to be meticulously chosen, creating intricate designs that showcase your poetic intellect. The imagery you evoke is so vivid that it truly brings your words to life. Most importantly, your unique way of using language creates a chemistry that is utterly captivating.

Hiya Sharma
Date: 8/26/2023 6:08:00 AM

Wow, thank you so much for your highly honouring compliments and in-depth analysis of my poems always, receiving such beautiful support from a brilliant poet like yourself, this truly means the world. I'm humbled and so glad that you enjoyed reading this poem, very grateful :)

Vijay Pandit

Date: 8/24/2023 5:40:00 AM

Words building designs with brushstrokes of poetic intellect. Excellent as ever, Hiya.

Hiya Sharma
Date: 8/26/2023 5:42:00 AM

Wow, thank you so much for your beautifully poetic and artistic compliment, I'm so grateful, thank you for visiting and reading, this means so much to me :)

Speaks Volumes

Date: 8/23/2023 11:03:00 PM

Your descriptive passages amaze me. My eyes seek the tangible images, beyond your words. I have a full sensation of the reality of breakage. Well created Hyya...

Hiya Sharma
Date: 8/26/2023 5:41:00 AM

Thank you so much for your beautiful and precious words, dear. I'm so glad that you enjoyed reading this and felt its depth, truly means a lot! I'm very grateful :)

I Am Anaya

Date: 8/23/2023 10:06:00 PM

A sense of realities darkness , you show us. I fear for them , for you, in any form you choose to be, Hiya. Great imagery and above all your own chemistry with words comes alive. Love, I Am Anaya

I Am Anaya
Date: 8/27/2023 9:21:00 AM

Indeed! Congratulations on your win!

Hiya Sharma
Date: 8/26/2023 5:40:00 AM

Awh, thank you so much dear Anaya, I truly appreciate your kind words of heartfelt warmth. This was, certainty a deep and emotional write for me, but poetry is definitely cathartic.. I'm glad that you loved reading this :) Hiya-