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This is a small part of story that I am working on to be published in my book of 12 stories. She resumed in trekking; still searching for a way out When something caught her eye which appeared to be a route. Confidence grabbed the reigns in her chest, filling it with air; Her breathing and her heartbeat tripled for she was almost there. But as the path ended so did her mirage of nirvana. It led her to a basin filled with red-bellied piranha, Caiman alligators, and electric eels Imagination was the one in her head turning the wheels Sending pulses down her spine which reeked of fear Forcing confidence to be evicted through each crying tear. But her cries for help could not be heard For the jungle’s trees kidnapped every word The sun squinted his eyes through the trees in the west “A bridge!” she gasped. She began to feel blessed Sarah had to move quick; a race against the clock. Night plus blood equals animals on the stalk Please rate =))

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Date: 2/15/2016 2:16:00 PM
nice to read this one again. LINDA
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Date: 11/18/2015 9:11:00 PM
Kristina, I really enjoyed this poem thanks for sharing **SKAT**
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Date: 9/21/2012 5:59:00 PM
Whoa! Spectacular imagery :)
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Date: 8/23/2011 3:03:00 PM
Congratulations on your poetry being featured this week Kristina. Love, Carol
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Date: 5/19/2011 8:36:00 PM
I filled out the poem you put in for heavy scrutiny Ha:) Hope it helps. ~JSLambert
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Date: 4/27/2011 3:33:00 PM
k.R.S., yes I love your confidence... and the key to a soon to be heart pounding book... its a brilliant idea.. and poem for your book... enjoyed..p.d.
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Date: 4/27/2011 5:11:00 AM
Wonderful use of imagery Kristina loved this...thanks for the comment on my poem and certainly you have my permission and I am honoured to be your first fav. Love Janette
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Date: 4/14/2011 12:15:00 PM
Interesting write kristina.Enjoyed--kashinath
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Date: 4/13/2011 12:47:00 AM
Great imagery. A very creative piece. Keep it up.
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Date: 4/12/2011 8:13:00 PM
a very creative piece of wonderful poetry
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Date: 4/12/2011 5:59:00 AM
Oops sorry - that stired it up a bit, I quite agree you have the correct word, I was meerly observing that in some places the natural pronunciation of route doesn't rhyme with 'out' it rhymes with 'boot'. As mentioned before I enjoyed reading this poem - lots of potential - ttfn :)
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Date: 4/9/2011 12:54:00 AM
Thank you for your compliments! It means so much=0) As for "route and out" concerns....Honestly I was always taught that the word was like a heteronym...a word that is spelled the same, but two different pronunciations OR two different meanings like......Bass fish/Bass drums...or Polish worker/Polish the floor..hmmmm...but I could be wrong and if so my editor will make me change it...or I could change it before???=0) I don't want my work to cause confusion in that way. Thank you again!
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Date: 4/7/2011 11:59:00 PM
Hey, there, it sounds like it is about to get very exciting. You will have to do the next episodes!!
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Date: 4/7/2011 8:32:00 AM
Appears to be quite an interesting write. You have weaved good words to give a colorful and mystic touch to your story. Great potentials are hidden in your writing but without knowing the aim and objective of your story it is very difficult to rate it properly. Thank you for your kind comments on my Poem My Prayer on Xmas day. Love and best wishes...Ravindra.... Kristina Reid-Hansen
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Date: 4/7/2011 7:25:00 AM
Very interesting, makes me want to know what is going to happen next, very nice. You commented on one of my poems, do you see me, and asked what I was talking about. It is about faith and God and asks if he exists. Just to answer your question. Good job, ~Chris
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Date: 4/7/2011 5:57:00 AM
The tale in prose would be much more interesting. I think root and route are two different words. Root we use a root of the tree in Botany and or in linguistic a root of the verb but route is a direction of a way. I think you are right in using route and out as rhymes. Sorry but I disagree with Nick.
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Date: 4/7/2011 5:50:00 AM
Huge amount of potential here. I really enjoyed this. Screenplay potential perhaps?
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Date: 4/7/2011 4:27:00 AM
A pleasant read, looks like the story should be interesting too, note to the worldly, out and route don't rhyme in the uk, we always pronounce route like a tree root
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