Breathless

An innocent look that never dies comes to me with bedroom eyes With a touch of flame I can't explain, It makes me crave again and again Words, like chocolate, my sweet addiction My heart cries out for endless affection Passion burning, such deep desire I melt in this heat as flames grow higher Hot emotion now ablaze smokey haze erotic craze Dry lips, breathless screams rising from these endless dreams

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Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 8/11/2010 11:57:00 AM

A joy to read an oldie by one of my favorite poets Alana. Love, Carol

Jay Loveless

Date: 2/22/2010 10:59:00 AM

Your words are passion written at best, they arise the moon from her mountian resting bed, the stars they sing as your words ring true, beautiful, as are you. xoxo Rain. p.s. youve been added to my fav poets. truly amazing work.

The Melody Sings

Date: 2/22/2010 10:47:00 AM

Wow! Perfection at it's highest moments Mwah. Perfect!

Niall Greene

Date: 2/22/2010 10:32:00 AM

very good. nice work alana

Inkstain Thepoet

Date: 11/13/2009 10:56:00 PM

Sultry!!! I like it (LOL)!!!

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 7/21/2009 5:16:00 AM

Scorching hot Alana. I miss your poetry here at the Soup. Hope you will return soon. Love, Carol

L'Nass Shango

Date: 3/19/2009 6:52:00 AM

This feels so real that I begin to blush like a virgin voyeurist. A visually compelling poem.

Donna Golden

Date: 1/30/2009 2:36:00 PM

Alana, I thoroughly enjoyed this passionate piece. Extremely provacative and raw. Love it. Donna G.

Jeffrey Lee

Date: 1/22/2009 8:45:00 PM

I really like its flow and how passionate it is and keeps you want to read more!

Lisa Mook

Date: 1/22/2009 5:39:00 PM

Great job Alana. I definitly like the style. Always Lisa

Vince Suzadail Jr.

Date: 1/18/2009 10:47:00 AM

Steaming! Excellent as expected. Even leave Jerry Lee "Breathless" (You might be a little young to understand that. Jerry Lee Lewis had a song "Breathless in 58. God Bless. Vince

Robin L. Gass

Date: 1/17/2009 1:15:00 PM

Excellent write! The passion in this piece is very well expressed. Well said! Love, Robin

Michael Jordan

Date: 1/17/2009 11:30:00 AM

Alana this poem is just amazing - Very well written and just the right amount of sultrinesses - God Bless, MJ

Laurie Ginn

Date: 1/17/2009 9:47:00 AM

Lannie,,,wow so many creative phrases...beautiful. Laurie

John Loving Iii

Date: 1/16/2009 4:15:00 PM

oh girl you did it for me. another piece of candy in my dreams and chocolate in my heart, this piece is truly art. John H. Loving III

Date: 1/16/2009 11:59:00 AM

Interesting piece--any mention of chocolate is sure to capture the attention of many. I like the interaction of the first and last lines. Thank you for sharing your thoughts with us and for your kind words regarding my poem. Keep on writing! Have a nice day. Karen

Keith Bickerstaffe

Date: 1/16/2009 9:24:00 AM

Passionate! ...strong emotions so well expressed... BRAVO Alana! Best wishes, Keith

Serenity D'Nae Montgomery

Date: 1/16/2009 9:11:00 AM

Great poem.. I got lost in your words! :) Love always, Serenity

Steve Voorhees

Date: 1/16/2009 9:11:00 AM

I had to stand up...shake myself off...and come back to read reading this one again....Very hot. Nice write! Much love, Steve

Michael Degenhardt

Date: 1/16/2009 5:24:00 AM

Ooh la la, the words in this steamed my glasses LOL Love the natural flow and the imagery, well, that's perfect! Excellent write. Michael

Sharon Winter

Date: 1/16/2009 4:50:00 AM

Deep seated passion within these words. Well expressed and wow. : ) Love, Shar

Christopher Higgins

Date: 1/16/2009 4:47:00 AM

Pure fire screaming in this piece. Tasteful passion exploding in words. Loved it!