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When the night claims you like a wayward leaf of old and it takes you to the caves where anything turns gold you don't ask any questions and you don't dare breathe you just follow her, like a light weight tumbled weed Down the passages of dark, down the staircase of rune every step a little deeper than the crevices of moon you can almost taste the air, on your tonguing clepe you can down the stars of heaven in one single leap Taking you by the waist it shall dance you through the elixir of happiness when your feeling down n' blue you just thank the Lord for the magic of this gift all you need is skin n' eyes to cross her lowly rift When night claims you like a wayward leaf of old and takes you to her caves, all etched with gold don't ask her any questions just go ahead breathe no, don't ask her anything at all, just breathe, yes breathe... * * * * * * Deep breaths I took when she stepped into my world a goddess she became when in my arms she twirled. At entry to her cave she beckoned with promising eyes. I would've followed her until the stars fell from the skies. We heard celestial music playing, a lover's waltz the tune I held her in my arms and we danced around the moon Back down into her cave, we romped into a golden maze Her scent of wild magnolia set the fire in my heart ablaze. We paused for a moment as she placed a finger to my lips. Passion aroused, my hands slowly dropped down to her hips. She batted her silken lashes and danced deeper into her cave. Teasing little minx, turned and raised her hand in alluring wave. Not a dream is my goddess, who still sleeps within my arms enticed me into her cave with soft music and sensual charms. I will linger here beside her until we take our last breath. In our cave where all is gold, we'll stay even after death. yes, we breathe... we breathe as one * * * * * * * * * December 29th 2015 Collaboration Contest Sponsor: Mystic Rose

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Date: 1/31/2016 11:59:00 AM
Beautifully written!
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Lin Lane
Date: 1/31/2016 3:31:00 PM
Thanks so much, Lisanne.
Date: 1/28/2016 12:34:00 PM
A wonderful write Lin with Mystic Rose. Congratulations on this fantastic first place win.....Sharon
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Lin Lane
Date: 1/28/2016 2:46:00 PM
Thank you very much, Sharon.
Date: 1/27/2016 10:52:00 AM
Been away but temporarily back want to congratulate you Lin. On all your wins! I'm sorry for not entering your contest I was away training for work.
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Lin Lane
Date: 1/28/2016 2:44:00 PM
Thank you for letting me know that, Michael. I appreciate that you told me and hope your training went well.
Date: 1/27/2016 8:19:00 AM
A great collaboration! Congratulations on your wonderful win Lin!! :) -HANS
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Lin Lane
Date: 1/28/2016 2:42:00 PM
Thanks...MR's verses made it easy to get in the right frame of mind.
Date: 1/26/2016 11:12:00 PM
Lin,,, congratulations on your collaboration with mystic rose. Luv Skat
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Date: 1/26/2016 10:04:00 PM
Great add on, Lin, the rhythm, flow is wonderful :-) Congratulations on your win!
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Lin Lane
Date: 1/28/2016 2:41:00 PM
Thanks, sweety..;)
Date: 1/26/2016 8:18:00 PM
Wonderful write, Lin! Deeply set in the cave where only lovers can breathe. Kudos on your win.
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Lin Lane
Date: 1/28/2016 2:40:00 PM
Thanks so much, Dan.
Date: 1/26/2016 8:06:00 PM
Congrats on a top placement, Lin! Very enjoyable and enchanting poem.
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Lin Lane
Date: 1/28/2016 2:39:00 PM
Thank you, David.
Date: 1/26/2016 7:36:00 PM
I love how you did this, Lin! Beautiful, and congratulations on your top win! Hugs, Sandra
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Lin Lane
Date: 1/28/2016 2:38:00 PM
thank you so much, Sandra.
Date: 1/2/2016 6:48:00 AM
Wow. Seems I've missed so many gems that you have cast forth lately my friend. This collaboration is magnificent from start to finish!! Congrats on you and Mystic writing one truly superlative entry in that contest. Surely will place very , very high IMHO. A7
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Lin Lane
Date: 1/2/2016 7:17:00 AM
Mystic set the stage for this one...Thank you for liking it so well, Robert.
Date: 1/1/2016 7:24:00 PM
Beautiful Lin...just amazing and good luck in the contest..*smiles* -luloo
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Lin Lane
Date: 1/1/2016 7:26:00 PM
Thanks a bunch, Luloo. Vienna set the scene...easy to follow her lead.
Date: 12/31/2015 10:01:00 AM
Great write Lin..I especially liked the 2nd stanza...best wishes
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Lin Lane
Date: 12/31/2015 10:05:00 AM
Thank you very much, Joseph...so glad you like our collaboration.
Date: 12/31/2015 3:53:00 AM
wow...outstanding, you did well...best of luck for the contest
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Lin Lane
Date: 12/31/2015 5:12:00 AM
Thanks for such a nice compliment. It's appreciated.

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