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He should desire a verse of lost day past while time enough was free to have enough, When pace and life led more to mean but fast as Simon said to simply breathe a puff. To love and be less reckless with his heart, Speak not of sin nor breach of true love’s spring, Complete the bond not pressed akin to part as forced to split amoebas’ kiss must sting. He must observe his one true Master plot, His growth less err forgone fulfills defense, An age to find a soulmate’s breath he sought, Their fit from Simon’s game of simple sense. The dream of love begins with one shared breath, The test of love whilst joined hearts beat ‘til death. ......................... Form: Shakespearean (English) Sonnet Contest: English Sonnet 3 Sponsor: Eve Roper Written: 06/15/2016 Results: 1st Place .........................

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Date: 9/13/2016 5:18:00 PM
Your English Sonnet was awesome, creative and unique..Congratulations on your placement..Sara
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Jesse Day
Date: 9/13/2016 11:04:00 PM
Thank you, Sara!
Date: 9/12/2016 8:04:00 AM
Oh, that final couplet - a magnificent end to the game. Beautifully written...loved the reference to the "amoebas' split".
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Jesse Day
Date: 9/13/2016 9:08:00 AM
Thanks, John
Date: 9/10/2016 9:14:00 PM
A lovely sonnet -- but, I couldn't define the word, amoebas. I'm assuming no relation to the single-celled animal? Congrats on your win. ;-)
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Jesse Day
Date: 9/11/2016 1:33:00 AM
Thanks for your comments - In response to you query - I compared the ending of a relationship to that of a single cell dividing.
Date: 9/10/2016 6:53:00 PM
Jesse, congrats on your top placement :)-luloo
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Jesse Day
Date: 9/11/2016 1:34:00 AM
Thank you!
Date: 9/10/2016 6:41:00 PM
Jesse, congratulations on your 1st place win beautiful written . Hugs Eve
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Jesse Day
Date: 9/11/2016 1:35:00 AM
Thank you!
Date: 6/25/2016 8:18:00 AM
Jesse, I love Sonnets, and yours very beautiful and romantic, and well-written with perfect rhyme and meter! 7 Hugs, Sandra
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Jesse Day
Date: 6/25/2016 10:51:00 AM
Thank you Sandra - quite a challenge to find perfect words with the right meter to fit 10 syllables - rhythmically for 14 lines. I bet this was in Shakespeare's every passing thought. Thanks for reading and your supportive comments! Jesse
Date: 6/19/2016 10:28:00 AM
This is incredibly beautiful Jesse. Beyond romantic...cosmic! 7 ; ) A fave!
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Jesse Day
Date: 6/20/2016 6:03:00 AM
Thank you for reading and your generous comments! Looking forward to reading some of your work. - Jesse
Date: 6/15/2016 3:56:00 PM
- I'm not so good with rhyming in English, but this was great - a lovely poem, Jesse :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Jesse Day
Date: 6/15/2016 5:07:00 PM
Thank you, Anne-Lise. Happy you enjoyed it.

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