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Breakfast of Good-Bye

Breakfast of Good-bye fine remnants softly linger along the edges - reminiscence, soft ruffling of a curtain tickled by a warm summer breeze, cold scent of passion’s pillow pressed into the face of yesterday, lost shoe recovered from act one flamboyant curtain call, damp towel draped across a chair auburn strands entwined, dripping heart shape foggy shower door, wine glass blessed her gentle passing kiss, music faintly loitering amid fading dream, note that begged forgiveness for the moment stolen, fine wine, soggy pasta breakfast of good-bye. 7/10/2015

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Scott Thirtyseven

Date: 7/24/2016 8:03:00 AM

Found this on the home page, what a pleasure.

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 7/22/2015 2:52:00 AM

Awesome write n win John! Big congrats!

Lycia Harding

Date: 7/22/2015 1:53:00 AM

That is so sad and so lovely. Congrats on your win, John. xoxo

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 7/20/2015 1:51:00 PM

Wow John! No contest...this truly belongs at the top! You would make a great novelest. I love the way you have set the scene which draws emotion from the reader. This is superb and going into my favorites! A great choice from Charlotte.7

John Lawless
Date: 7/20/2015 2:01:00 PM

Thank you Connie for the high praise and high marks.

Kp Nunez

Date: 7/20/2015 8:50:00 AM

This surely deserves the top win, John. For all the reasons Charlotte already mentioned. Congrats! Kim

John Lawless
Date: 7/20/2015 2:00:00 PM

Thanks Kim, always nice to hear from you.

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

Date: 7/20/2015 7:59:00 AM

John, the title is eye catching and the yours lines wow me again!! the imagery is heavy pulling!! CONGRATULATIONS!~Olive Eloisa

John Lawless
Date: 7/20/2015 1:59:00 PM

sort of the Cinderella syndrome - after the ball is over..Thanks for stopping by to comment

Julia Ward

Date: 7/20/2015 6:50:00 AM

Your poem displays a gradual, evocative build-up to the final sad scene... Congratulations for all the imagery, John!

John Lawless
Date: 7/20/2015 1:57:00 PM

Thanks Julia, the climax/anti climax phases of passion.

Paul Callus

Date: 7/20/2015 3:31:00 AM

Love your suggestive imagery and style of writing, John! Indeed, a worthy top winner! #7 Congratulations! // paul

John Lawless
Date: 7/20/2015 5:08:00 AM

Alway nice to hear from you Paul, thanks for stopping by to read and comment and for the high mark

Viv Wigley

Date: 7/19/2015 8:17:00 PM

This is an absolute belter of a poem, John, must have been a memorable night. A worthy win, and a fave. Score- eleventy-four out of seven. Regards, Viv

John Lawless
Date: 7/20/2015 5:08:00 AM

Easy Viv, scores like that could put poetry soup into the UPDATE MODE.

Skat A

Date: 7/19/2015 6:09:00 PM

Hello, John, I love this.. glad to see it on the top... SKAT

John Lawless
Date: 7/20/2015 5:07:00 AM

Thanks SKAT glad you enjoyed it.

Carrie Richards

Date: 7/19/2015 6:05:00 PM

So softly sensual, and takes us to this morning afterglow! Lovely win, and well deserved !! Congratulations, John!

John Lawless
Date: 7/20/2015 5:06:00 AM

Carrie, I love the word afterglow as used to describe this write. There is a "passion" residue in the morning around the room, the house and the glow of the lovers.

Eve Roper

Date: 7/19/2015 3:53:00 PM

John, wonderfuL write congratulations on your win hugs Eve

John Lawless
Date: 7/20/2015 5:05:00 AM

thanks Eve, I had some fun writing this.

Charlotte Puddifoot

Date: 7/19/2015 2:41:00 PM

this one impressed me from the first time I read it; it's contemporary, subtle and understated, and very evocative - congrats on your 1st place win in my contest!

John Lawless
Date: 7/20/2015 5:04:00 AM

Thank you Charlotte for the simplicity of an "open poetry" contest as it allowed the muse free reign of subject and presentation.

Jan Allison

Date: 7/19/2015 2:35:00 PM

Dropping back with my congratulations John:-) Hugs Jan xx

John Lawless
Date: 7/20/2015 5:01:00 AM

always appreciated Jan

Jaycee Cervenka

Date: 7/11/2015 11:31:00 AM

Great description to convey a heated night of passion, as evidenced by the signs of its aftermath. Hope this does well.

John Lawless
Date: 7/11/2015 11:54:00 AM

Thanks for stopping by to read and comment and don't tell Ian I snuck in a non-footle....

Jan Allison

Date: 7/11/2015 11:14:00 AM

what amazing imagery John - good luck in the contest - i wasn't going to post my poem until tomorrow but it is filling so fast i will do it today:-) Hugs Jan xx

John Lawless
Date: 7/11/2015 11:20:00 AM

I know Jan, I was surprised at how quickly it was filling also. It seems the summer heat has the muse warmed up and ready to write.