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Box Car Blues

At night the guitar cries its song.
Together, aimless souls do roam.
Riding rails, nights are cold and long.
At night the guitar cries its song.
No place they truly now belong,
box car to box car, is now home.
At night the guitar cries its song.
Together, aimless souls do roam.

©Donna Jones

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  1. Date: 1/16/2015 2:25:00 PM
    Just wanted to stop by and say hi. I must say Donna you have a wonderful way with words in your poetry. I always enjoy reading your work so much. Hope all is well and have a peaceful weekend!

  1. Date: 2/23/2014 9:04:00 AM
    I seem to keep being drawn back to this one. Good morning Donna.

    Jones Avatar Donna Jones
    Date: 2/24/2014 10:41:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thank you so much Richard.....maybe I'll work on another one of this was fun...have a great week...
  1. Date: 11/8/2013 12:40:00 PM
    I enjoyed reading this one again.

  1. Date: 9/15/2013 7:35:00 AM
    Good morning, I don't know enough to comment on the form but I do love the topic and image you created with this piece. Your grandpa would be honored.

  1. Date: 9/9/2013 8:24:00 PM
    Hi Donna; Your poem is good. I have to confess that I don't know much about all these types of poetry. This is why I only write free Verse, Acrostic, or Narrative. I got to know some people that worked for the rail road and also lived like that. Those must have been very hard times. Thanks for sharing..... Lucilla

  1. Date: 9/9/2013 12:34:00 PM
    I have no idea about this form, but the poem is awesome. Loved much always, bl

  1. Date: 9/6/2013 8:38:00 PM
    Boxcar Blues sure your grandpa knew the blues

  1. Date: 9/3/2013 11:14:00 AM
    donna!... for a first try , this is awesome... what a soulful air you created here with glimpses of redolent memories... much enjoyed!..:) huggs .. soupmal!

  1. Date: 9/3/2013 9:04:00 AM
    Many kudos to you on this 1st attempt. It's not easy, but you did this form very well. This was a tremendous story about your grandfather.

  1. Date: 9/3/2013 2:52:00 AM

  1. Date: 9/3/2013 12:06:00 AM
    Thanks for the nice comment, Donna. I've been enjoying reading your poems! This is a nice tribute to your grandfather! Sounds like a nice song, too! Molly

  1. Date: 9/2/2013 8:20:00 PM
    I like this poem Donna, there's a lot of heart and caboose passion in it, your grandad would be proud xxx

  1. Date: 9/2/2013 5:55:00 PM
    A wonderful first try Donna, thanks for sharing the poem.. xox~ Linda

  1. Date: 9/2/2013 3:32:00 PM
    I think that you got it correct..I always have to look up a form and see how to do them before I write one..Thanks for stopping by my work Ballerina...Sara

  1. Date: 9/2/2013 3:15:00 PM
    I love the guitar, I love the blues, and I love your wondrous poem. it takes me back to Woody Guthrie, my American hero, along with Bob Dylan. Beautiful words, Donna, thanks for sharing...Peter

  1. Date: 9/2/2013 3:03:00 PM
    ALWAYS...proud of you! :) A triolet...I've never tried one. You've inspired me. Lovely, piece, full of meaning...We need to be grateful for what we have....Also, the difficult times lend themselves to beauty! Love you!

  1. Date: 9/2/2013 12:51:00 PM
    Great piece Donna. My dad used to ride the rails when he was a kid..he kind of raised himself..couldn't imagine it these days. Great how you used the guitar throughout. BG

    Jones Avatar Donna Jones
    Date: 9/2/2013 2:50:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Hey Barbara. Grandpa used to sing old old songs about those days...kind of woody Guthrie kind of songs...but older I think...thanks for stopping...
  1. Date: 9/2/2013 12:27:00 PM
    Incredible! This first attempt is better than my best attempt Donna! You have done very well with this form my friend, very well! This form can be a lot of fun to do, but can also be quite frustrating at times as well (you probably already noticed that)! I'd listen to what Andrea said, this looks GREAT, she is an expert at these Triolets, she's written a ton of them! I really enjoyed reading this enlightening poem this afternoon! It's amazing that you grandfather lived in a boxcar! Great Work!!

    Jones Avatar Donna Jones
    Date: 9/2/2013 2:53:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thanks so much much appreciated! forms are fun to try!
  1. Date: 9/2/2013 10:06:00 AM
    - Agree with Jack .... whatever they call this form ... Why make it difficult when you do it so beautifully .... finally a new poem Donna!! - a little sad blues... - Love it ! - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

    Jones Avatar Donna Jones
    Date: 9/2/2013 2:54:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    You make me smile....:-)
  1. Date: 9/2/2013 9:15:00 AM
    It can be sung with guitar, this poem

    Jones Avatar Donna Jones
    Date: 9/2/2013 2:54:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Oh thank you..