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Bored In Manhattan, 1-3-16

We slept for five hours or we didn’t sleep at all but when we slept we fantasized of Times Square heart of the winter, center stage, real leather jackets housed extended arms. I took the underground train to your place and walked a mile to the gate--rehearsed my lines and climbed a mountain to the door, and you weren’t even there. I left my name in the thick fog that my breath created on your window for you to see where I land on cold, boring, winter nights tracking the snow from my side of town to yours where I shouldn’t have been so wearied and forlorn where I shouldn’t have loved so unbreakable and fervently in Manhattan--I should have been home.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2016




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Date: 3/26/2016 10:07:00 PM
Nyia Bentley, awesome to see this one again. LINDA
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Date: 1/7/2016 12:38:00 AM
Nyia, :) Congratulations!!! ~SKAT LOVE~
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Date: 1/6/2016 11:32:00 PM
Congrats on your win. LINDA
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Date: 1/6/2016 3:03:00 PM
I enjoyed the drama in your poem... Just one thing - please change Time Square to Times Square. The last three lines are SO good making me want to re-read the rest. Well done for your fifth place win.
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Nyia Bentley
Date: 1/9/2016 12:26:00 AM
Thank you for the feedback, I have edited the change that you suggested. Enjoyed this competition. Excited to read your work and supply feedback. Stay great
Date: 1/4/2016 10:57:00 PM
Nyia, WELCOME to poetry soup. I hope you have fun with this wonderful community. You'll find many friendly poets who are ready to support and give positive feedback. I will enjoy following you and your poetry :) We are Lucky To Have you. Enjoy Poetry Soup:) Your New Poet Friend @-> LINDA <-@
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Nyia Bentley
Date: 1/9/2016 12:24:00 AM
Thank you, Linda. Excited to see your work. Stay positive, stay great.
Date: 1/3/2016 9:28:00 PM
PS, Nyia, Welcome to Poetry Soup. It will be a delight to read and become familiar with your poems in the future. As for now, I will greet you with the same smile others passed when I first joined the soup. Wishing you and your poetry the best. I hope you get to meet all the nice poets around here STARTING with me- SKAT :-) Please drop a hello and tell me a little about yourself if you wish. I would like to be your newest poetry soup "FRIEND" Hugs* SKAT
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Nyia Bentley
Date: 1/9/2016 12:21:00 AM
Skat, thank you for you comment, congratulations, and positivity. I hope to continue seeing feedback from you, as I will do the same.
Date: 1/3/2016 7:22:00 PM
I know how you feel. Great first poem. Skat
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