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Sue just couldn’t keep her hands off the buffet food She’d elbow her way into the queue – it was very rude! Finger foods were her favourite, she’d stuff them into her face Sue’s body wobbled like a jelly and she looked a complete disgrace Her legs they were like tree trunks and she had trouble with her knees The scales groaned when she stood on them - the numbers didn’t please! Her hubby put his foot in it when asked ‘do I look good in this tight dress’ He said you look like a baby hippo, and if I’m really honest you look a mess! Shocked at his honest answer Sue agreed that she had let herself go She would go to Weight Watchers and try and put an end to this woe Her excuse was her slow metabolism, which made her put on weight But in her head she knew the truth - it was the piles of food upon her plate Now placed on a controlled diet she couldn’t eat steak and kidney pies Only healthy food now touched her tongue, weight soon fell off her thighs Sue also joined an exercise class and made some lovely mates They would discuss the calories on their smaller dinner plates The food Sue missed the most was a huge mound of fish and chips But the diet and exercise worked – Sue re-discovered her long lost hips! Sue punched her fists in the air when she reached her target weight She regained all her self-confidence and now she’s looking great! Contest Body Parts Sponsored by Viv Wigley 09~10~16 Body parts used hands, elbow, finger, face, legs, knees, foot, head, kidney, tongue, thighs, hips, fists.

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Date: 10/9/2016 8:45:00 PM
Congrats on your win, Jan. Your poem made me smile - as your poems usually do :) Agnes
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Date: 10/10/2016 2:25:00 AM
Thanks Agnes:-) hope you had a wonderful weekend:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 10/7/2016 4:11:00 PM
Congrats on your win.
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Date: 10/7/2016 4:37:00 PM
Thanks Janis:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 10/7/2016 9:13:00 AM
Congrats on your win Jan!
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Date: 10/7/2016 1:16:00 PM
Thanks Joseph:-) hugs jan xx
Date: 10/7/2016 8:30:00 AM
Love the way you used the body parts, Jan! Creative, funny and entertaining, as usual. Congrats on your fine placement! Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 10/7/2016 9:02:00 AM
Thanks Sandra - I will drop by to read all the winning poems when time permits:-) hugs jan xx
Date: 10/7/2016 7:57:00 AM
lol! very cute...congratulations on your placement :)-luloo
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Date: 10/7/2016 9:01:00 AM
Thanks LuLoo:-) hugs jan xx
Date: 10/7/2016 4:38:00 AM
Hehehehe. I love your sense of humor Jan, and the way the words in your lines generally protrude out, to express size matters.... Congrats for your WIN in the contest!!! ;-)
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Date: 10/7/2016 9:01:00 AM
Thanks Teddy I had great fun with this poem:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 10/7/2016 12:35:00 AM
Congrats, Jan, on a fun write, and thanks for having a crack at my contest. The girl done good! Keep your eyes peeled later in the day for my next one, it's a toughie, but I based it on you. Hmmmmm...... Viv x
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Date: 10/7/2016 1:59:00 AM
Oh Mr Viv I am intrigued at the contest now lol I hope I can rise to the challenge and write one for you and thanks for the high placement:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 9/13/2016 4:49:00 AM
I like this one....
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Date: 9/13/2016 5:27:00 AM
Thanks James:-) hugs jan xx
Date: 9/12/2016 11:25:00 AM
Some great couplets and perfect rhymes, Jan. Thankfully I'm not on a diet though I do watch carefully what I eat. This sounds like a winner in the contest. Thanks for the stop by. / M
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Date: 9/12/2016 1:46:00 PM
Thanks Maurice I have never been on a diet but I do try to be reasonably careful especially with hubby now being diabetic:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 9/12/2016 6:27:00 AM
Lovely, Jan, even the way the poem is built up joins :D
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Date: 9/12/2016 7:23:00 AM
Thanks Darren - I wanted to end it with her getting rid of 200 lb of ugly fat and getting divorced lol but hubby said leave it as it is lol:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 9/11/2016 8:28:00 PM
I knew you were going to come up with a wonderful humorous entry Jan. This is not only funny but clever. Brava! : ) 7
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Date: 9/12/2016 2:22:00 AM
Thanks Connie - I had to amend the original slightly as I had used alternative words for body parts and knowing what a great humour Mr Viv has I had to go for a fun write - but he's not judging the contest so that won't make a difference to the results lol:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 9/11/2016 1:01:00 PM
A pleasingly plump delight...Nicely done Jan...hugs
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Date: 9/11/2016 1:03:00 PM
Thanks Joseph - I hope the 6 words were not the maximum as I went a little OTT lol:-) hugs jan xx
Date: 9/11/2016 10:03:00 AM
Hi Jan, First of all I must say great picture. You pick the best pictures to go with your poems. This is a good entry for the contest. I have a feeling it will place well. Good job:-) Alexis
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Date: 9/11/2016 10:22:00 AM
Thanks for the lovely positive comment Alexis - have been away for a few days and not spent much time on soup:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 9/11/2016 5:38:00 AM
- Some LOVE BIG .... and even BIGGER .... and ELEPHANT BIG !!!:))) - Love it, Jan - Good luck in the contest - Happy Sunday :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 9/11/2016 7:08:00 AM
Your comment made me smile Anne Lise:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 9/11/2016 2:34:00 AM
Now, that's more like it Jan. Viv will really enjoy this. Good luck!!
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Date: 9/11/2016 5:17:00 AM
We can't use alternative words for body parts so I've got a few amendments to do Jean - don't want to make an arse of myself lol:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 9/11/2016 1:44:00 AM
Ha ha...I enjoyed... Great work...Good luck in the contest...
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Date: 9/11/2016 5:17:00 AM
Thanks Supraja:-) hugs Jan x
Date: 9/11/2016 12:17:00 AM
Lol! That was great!! ( :
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Date: 9/11/2016 5:17:00 AM
Thanks Chelcie:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 9/10/2016 7:25:00 PM
7 for your humour I totally laughed for ages at this, well done x
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Date: 9/11/2016 5:19:00 AM
Thanks Gail I have a couple of verses to amend now as Viv has clarified the rules:-) hugs Jan xx

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