Blue Ice

a freak accident hit by frozen leaking waste now six feet under ------------------------------- Contest: Everyone Poops Sponsor: Roy Jerden

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Cherl Dunn

Date: 10/7/2015 6:38:00 PM

Dear Paul Interesting poem here my friend, what a contrast to the February poem that I just read, again interesting, and wow what an image you've left behind lol, anyway thanks for the review of my mummy poem, I wanted to give it the old movie flare of the past, those were the best to me, cheri

Paul Callus
Date: 10/8/2015 3:02:00 PM

Hi Cherl! My senryu was an attempt at tackling this unusual topic from a totally different point of view. As you might have guessed by now, it did not go down well with the sponsor:) Thank you for reading. // paul

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 8/5/2015 8:12:00 AM

..... somewhere it must drop :) - Good luck in contest, Paul - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Paul Callus
Date: 8/6/2015 4:39:00 PM

Perhaps I should start wearing a safety helmet when I go out!:) Thank you for stopping by Anne Lise. Hugs // paul

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

Date: 8/5/2015 1:42:00 AM

Paul, again again you knocked me down with these lines!!! Hugs and hugs!!! near and nearer.. =')~~~Olive Eloisa

Paul Callus
Date: 8/6/2015 5:00:00 PM

Glad it's only the lines that knocked you down Olive_eloi, and not the 'blue ice':) Many hugs to you too:)) // paul

John Fleming

Date: 8/4/2015 1:09:00 PM

Hhmmm...Macabre to say the least. I guess it gives a whole new twist to that immortal legend: "Shit happens". Lol. My very best regards, Paul. :) john

Paul Callus
Date: 8/6/2015 5:03:00 PM

Yes, macabre it can be, John! Like your immortal legend comment:) Thank you for reading; all the best. // paul

Constance La France

Date: 8/4/2015 1:08:00 PM

Paul, good one for the contest, such an odd theme, my entry is called Budgie Pete Goes and thanks for visiting my poem, destiny

Paul Callus
Date: 8/6/2015 4:42:00 PM

I found your budgie poem one of the cutest in this contest, Constance. It is never to late, even for a bird, to learn! Thank you for reading mine. // paul

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/4/2015 8:40:00 AM

OH MY, that would be a horrible thing to have happen to someone!!

Paul Callus
Date: 8/4/2015 8:47:00 AM

It sure would be, Andrea!:) ...but it has happened in real life! There was a film that was based on 'blue ice', called "Six feet under", thus the 3rd line of this senryu. ~~~~ paul

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 8/4/2015 12:21:00 AM

Exquisite one Paul! U hv handled this so gracefully, Gl in contest!

Paul Callus
Date: 8/4/2015 8:44:00 AM

Thank you for your graceful comments, Upma:) Tried to present something different from most of the other entries. Hope the judge catches on! ~ All the best. // paul

Jan Allison

Date: 8/3/2015 5:46:00 PM

I'd sure poop myself if that fell on me Paul - love your take on the theme - good luck:-) hugs jan xx7

Paul Callus
Date: 8/4/2015 8:39:00 AM

Thank you Jan. Got to know of this 'blue ice' by accident when researching on real blue ice. I often wondered where plane sewers led to:) Hugs // paul