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Alliteration poem

Contest Judged: 4/1/2018 3:16:00 PM
Sponsored by: Silent One |

AWARDED: SECOND PLACE

I stood upon a brine soaked bow Aboard a schooner lost at sea Where balls of hail tore through the sails And broke the masts of three When karma came to pay me back For all my dirty deeds When I laid upon a swan-like girl Of grace and purity I stole her mind..her heart and soul Her pride and dignity When I wrapped her in a web of lies Proclaiming love eternally As I sealed her fate and destiny With my host of wayward seeds That would one day bear a bastard child Bathed in humility For...when her eyes were closed in sleep I tiptoed out the door A blaggard with a heart of stone I left her lying there alone To face the morning after With echo's of my laughter Resounding through the rafters As she gazed upon my footprints On the floor Many more...I scored before Upon those many shores Virgins by the dozens And the broken town-hall whores But, nary a thought Crossed through my mind That one day I would find The wrath of God upon my brow When lightning...stuck me blind Written: March 28th, 2018 Author: Elaine Cecelia George

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Al Juman

Date: 8/16/2018 2:56:00 AM

Elaine this is a masterpiece

Elaine George
Date: 8/18/2018 7:09:00 AM

Thank you so much for your kind comments, Al...much appreciated. Elaine

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/4/2018 6:46:00 PM

What will your novel be called? I wish I could even START mine!

Elaine George
Date: 4/7/2018 3:02:00 AM

Hi, Andrea. Thanks for stopping by. The novel I am currently writing is entitled, 'Out of the Darkness.' Thanks for asking.

Eve Roper

Date: 4/3/2018 9:55:00 PM

Congratulations on your win, Elaine, excellent alliteration. Hugs Eve ~`*

Elaine George
Date: 4/7/2018 3:02:00 AM

Thanks for your comments, Eve. Elaine

Line Gauthier

Date: 4/3/2018 3:09:00 PM

Beautiful and powerful poem. I love the rhythm and imagery, Elaine. Congrats on a most deserving win.

Elaine George
Date: 4/7/2018 3:03:00 AM

Thank you, Line...for your kind comments...much appreciated. Elaine

Abdul Malik

Date: 4/3/2018 10:21:00 AM

A heart-rending and well-written story. Congrats. Enjoyed reading it.

Kai Michael Neumann

Date: 4/3/2018 3:35:00 AM

This is very well written. Congratulations on your win. Just one comment on the title: I guess that you mean 'blinded and not binded? Many wishes, Kai

Elaine George
Date: 4/3/2018 6:46:00 AM

Thank you so much, Kai, for your comments and for seeing what no one else saw...including me. I have corrected.

Judith S

Date: 4/2/2018 7:35:00 PM

This is like reading poetry of the great masters of yesteryear. So well written ... I bow to your talents. Congratulations on your win Elaine!! ~Judy

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 4/2/2018 5:56:00 PM

Wow! Very powerful poem, Lainie. Sometimes we fail to see the harm we cause others. Excellent reversal in the last line!

Elaine George
Date: 4/3/2018 6:47:00 AM

Hi, Carolyn, So nice to see you are still here at the soup. Thanks for your kind comments.

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 4/2/2018 8:30:00 AM

Excellent, Elaine! Loved it! Congrats!

Elaine George
Date: 4/3/2018 6:47:00 AM

Thanks Kim.

Probir Gupta

Date: 4/1/2018 9:04:00 PM

A profound poem with lively imagery, Elaine ... Congratulations on your nice win ...

Elaine George
Date: 4/3/2018 6:48:00 AM

Thank you for your kind comments, Probir.

Susan Ashley

Date: 4/1/2018 6:47:00 PM

Such an enthralling poem, Elaine. Told with vibrant imagery and emotions that ride the wonderful rhythm of your poetic lines. Congratulations on your excellent win! Warmest wishes..

Elaine George
Date: 4/3/2018 6:48:00 AM

Thank you for your kind comments, Susan.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/1/2018 4:44:00 PM

wow, what a guy!! What made you think to write in the character of this "blaggard"? I miss your writing and it's so good to see you at it again, Elaine. I see you are on the winners list. BIG congrats to you. And thanks for seeing my ppem the other day. Happy Easter.

Elaine George
Date: 4/1/2018 8:28:00 PM

Regarding the blaggard...I am a story teller at heart and being from the Atlantic Provinces of Canada I have heard many tales of the seamen who captained the Tall Ships...a time long since gone down in history.

Elaine George
Date: 4/1/2018 6:21:00 PM

Thank you, Andrea...its good to be back if only for a short time...I am still busy working on my novel, but sometimes need a break.

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 4/1/2018 3:23:00 PM

- The winners are named and it was great to see your poem on the winning list - Congratulations, Elaine :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Elaine George
Date: 4/1/2018 6:22:00 PM

Thank you so much for stopping by and for your comments. Much appreciated!

Silent One

Date: 4/1/2018 2:53:00 PM

A really deep reflective poem Elaine, I just felt it could have used a bit more alliteration for the contest.. Congratulations on your placement in the contest...

Elaine George
Date: 4/1/2018 6:20:00 PM

Thank you for the inspiration. I am working on a knew one about the Blue Nose Schooner (also known as: The Atlantic Queen) This schooner is a Canadian Icon and on the back of the Canadian dime. I will post it when completed...it will also fall into the genre of personification.

Charlie Smith

Date: 4/1/2018 10:41:00 AM

Terrific tale Elaine, well written with such a need to be told...

Elaine George
Date: 4/1/2018 6:23:00 PM

Thank you, Charlie...much appreciated.

Mark Peterson

Date: 3/31/2018 6:54:00 PM

What a hideous transmogrification the sexual act has become. How sacred and pure it ought to be and our focus centered only on the one we have chosen instead of a wandering mind thinking only of pleasures that await. I have just written a poem called Treasure that considers this topic about which you have written so eloquently. Excellent work.

Elaine George
Date: 4/1/2018 6:24:00 PM

Thank you for your comments, Mark. I will read your poem, 'Treasure'.