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Blade So Blue

Friend, you may view me as piteous for my form is quite hideous Bloodstained hands I cannot clean even though I'm fastidious I accidently killed the queen This deed beyond my conception I promised my queen protection My sword I swung it in the dark towards a ghostly reflection It struck my Queen leaving its mark There she lay upon the threshold Although young I then felt so old Dismal in spirit for I loved her true I beg you to be swift and bold Take my life with a blade of blue

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Vladislav Raven

Date: 11/16/2018 9:37:00 AM

Hi Richard, this is a beautiful, classical write. I love the way your words so easily draw me into the piece. An amazing write Richard, deep and classical. A Fave. Have a wonderful Friday. Your friend always....Mike.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/29/2017 6:47:00 PM

It's very nice seeing you work in a form like quintain, Richard. I enjoyed this very much. It seems Shakesperian to me. I am not too "into" his plays but I feel like this might be based on one of them!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/29/2017 6:46:00 PM

Yes, Richard, it is strange to come upon remarks of those who have passed on. That girl named Cheryl or Cheri who died a year or two ago, Linda Sweetheart, Daver. I have known others who passed on from other websites where I read their poems. It's surreal to see their old comments and realize they have gone on to the great beyond. Let me read your poem now.

Susan Ashley

Date: 10/28/2017 10:13:00 PM

A great write Richard with a regretful end. I love you title and your reference to blade of blue.., your last line is awesome! Enjoyed!!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/29/2017 8:47:00 AM

Thanks Susan.

Eileen Manassian

Date: 10/23/2017 4:18:00 PM

Richard...please get your muse back! I've so busy this semester with 5 courses to teach. I've just gotten back from my trip to Dubai and I'm trying to catch up. I read this poem again and it is so good. Please, pinch your muse and get her going. Would working on a collab help?

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/24/2017 5:58:00 PM

Thanks Eileen, my last drought was 7 years but then I wrote the largest volume of work of my life.

Ralph Sergi

Date: 10/23/2017 3:09:00 PM

Forgive me, Richard, I meant bold knight (lol)

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/24/2017 5:57:00 PM

Old Knight might be more accurate *lol*

Ralph Sergi

Date: 10/23/2017 3:06:00 PM

A ribald and classic poem. told with the valor of a knight. My compliments, Richard.

Joanna Daniel

Date: 10/23/2017 6:51:00 AM

Great deep poetry, Richard, I'm sure I would never have got the layered meaning if I had not read your explanation, awesome:)

Darlene De Beaulieu

Date: 10/22/2017 6:08:00 PM

It is very gallant.I lkie this poem. Have a nice evening my friend.

Darlene De Beaulieu
Date: 10/26/2017 1:21:00 PM

I like this poem.

Darlene De Beaulieu
Date: 10/22/2017 6:09:00 PM

I lkie this poem.

Red Fiery

Date: 10/22/2017 1:42:00 PM

You write so exceptionally well . Whether it's a free verse or just anything, you excel ! I will stop by again to read more from you . I have missed reading your poems ..hugs ~red~

James Inman

Date: 10/21/2017 10:04:00 AM

I must admit your references alluded my simple mind until I read your comment. After, it became quite clear and I found your poem, though a bit sad, quite delightful.

Freddie Robinson Jr.

Date: 10/12/2017 9:23:00 PM

Excellent rendering of a grisly event, Richard. Your poetic breadth is resplendently shown. Another mighty fine piece of prose. Heart glow poetry. Love and joy always.

Afolabi Muideen

Date: 10/10/2017 1:00:00 AM

The poem is beautiful composed. The q words, the lines, the rhyme and it flow, are a true depiction of beauty. Brilliant!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/12/2017 8:22:00 AM

Thanks Afolabi.

Eileen Manassian

Date: 10/8/2017 1:27:00 PM

Enjoy the wedding! Make wonderful memories. I'm so happy for you. Congrats, dear. May it be a blessed union for your son. Hugs....PS, Love to your Mom!

Eileen Manassian

Date: 10/8/2017 2:41:00 AM

Great write, Richard. I think with William and Kate set to take on the Monarchy next, the people will still be enthralled by royalty. However, this is a great piece to show others who are dissatisfied with royalty. What a splendid write.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/8/2017 8:33:00 AM

I do think they will revitalize the Monachy. Those who are living in poverty probably are not huge fans of the Royals.

Becca Teagan

Date: 10/6/2017 10:56:00 PM

wow this is deep, I like the metaphor of blue blood. amazing, Rick, hope you and your family are well

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/8/2017 8:31:00 AM

Hi Becca, my family is all here in Kelowna for our son's wedding. We are enjoying the time together and the wedding itself is happening today. Thanks for asking.;0)

Ralph Sergi

Date: 10/5/2017 5:40:00 PM

A great metaphoric depiction on the so called blue bloods. As time goes on society dictates change A lot of my Canadian friends say they are British Subjects and (which they are) but too me most Canadians are live and let live. To me they are just Canadians.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/5/2017 5:45:00 PM

The monachy is weaved into our fabric and govt. I'm not so sure though if we are loyal subjects. For the most part we give it little thought.

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 10/5/2017 12:30:00 PM

Silent One asked about my metaphor. Here is my explanation. His guilt overwhelmed him and he wished to join her in death. Blue blade referring to blue blood and the death of the monarchy. It symbolizes a way of life in Britain which is being slowly cut away. The Reflection is the dissatisfaction with self and self loathing which results in the attack.