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Blacker Than Black Rain

BEGINNING… xxxxxxxxxxx gray moon eating black, sparrows flush red coughing rain slums of streets decay CONTINUING… xxxxxxxxxxx drenched women bleeding broken spills of spines, alms… alms devil torrent tears ENDING… xxxxxxxxxxx spikes of bones splattered drowned by screeching sounds silenced… rain begets mud tombs xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx (( for SKAT's "Dark Rain" Contest" --Haiku ))

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Cherl Dunn

Date: 11/16/2013 4:36:00 PM

This write is a sad but a black under tone of the future as some people might see it. but i see aot in these lines yet to be said. i hope it is a very different future for mankind. cheri

Anne Rutherford

Date: 6/29/2013 12:13:00 PM

Alfred Hitchcock could do no better with a dark Haiku Nette. Congrats on your well deserved win. Anne

Pace Ink-U-Script

Date: 8/6/2012 4:24:00 AM

I've haven't come across a Haiku so deeply written like this...I see that this is also a winner...Congrats!!! :)

Sara Kendrick

Date: 2/6/2011 4:28:00 PM

Congratulations on your win..Sara

Robert Pettit

Date: 2/4/2011 11:05:00 PM

Congratulations on your win with this very fine trio of haiku poems. They just may be too darkly descriptive for my taste.

Kory Calhoun

Date: 1/24/2011 6:07:00 AM

Hi Nette - Wow! A chilling haiku. Congratulations on your WIN in the "Dark Rain" contest. Best wishes, KC

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 1/20/2011 2:41:00 PM

awful imagery my sweetie and very free verse like strong! short verse. Congrad's on your win Light & Love

Caryl Muzzey

Date: 1/18/2011 1:12:00 PM

Very nice Haiku Nette. Congratulations on your win with this wonderful write. Caryl

Harry Horsman

Date: 1/17/2011 11:35:00 PM

these are so profound, Nette, excellent read. Harry

Tahera Mannan

Date: 1/17/2011 7:49:00 PM

Many warm congratulations for this super win Nette. A terrific job with these smashing haikus.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/17/2011 7:18:00 PM

Heavy, Nette!! And GOOD!!! A 7!! Luv, Andrea

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 1/17/2011 2:16:00 PM

Congratulations on the well deserved win in the contest, nette

James Fraser

Date: 1/17/2011 12:06:00 PM

Reads like lost souls who have experienced natures rains, leading to the wrath of her mudslides. Many congrats on your win Nette....:)

Audrey Haick

Date: 1/17/2011 11:04:00 AM

Congratulations on your wonderful win in the contest, Nette!! Love, Annalise

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 1/17/2011 5:42:00 AM

Congrats Nette my friend on another stunning win in the Dark Rain contest with this vibrant entry full of imagery luv.. enjoy another top tenner today for your great poetry ...

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 1/17/2011 5:34:00 AM

Congratulations for your win in the "Dark Rain" contest Nette, sponsored by S K A T*. Love, Carol

Michael J. Falotico

Date: 1/17/2011 3:59:00 AM

This is such a good array of Haiku's... well deserved win!!!

Wilma Neels

Date: 1/17/2011 3:42:00 AM

Nette, congratulations on your win in Irma's contest :) Wilma

Kash Poet

Date: 1/17/2011 2:39:00 AM

Continuing-Continuing-Never ending.......Your WIN!!!--wonderful !Congrats!

Joyce Johnson

Date: 1/16/2011 9:42:00 PM

Very black indeed nette. congratulations on your win. Love, Joyce

Skat A

Date: 1/16/2011 9:26:00 PM

Congratulations, Nette !thank you so much for your Haiku. I had fun reading every dark rain entry~luv~SKAT

T.A. Skyles-Theoklapoet

Date: 1/16/2011 1:47:00 PM

Oh such a terrific haiku.Thanks for your very kind comment.~LUV~Teresa

Sara Kendrick

Date: 1/15/2011 3:38:00 PM

Interesting work..Your presence at my work was uplifting..Sara

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 1/15/2011 2:19:00 PM

Whoa Nette... this is awesome luv.. great imagination and thought went into these sets for the contest.. great energy to each of them...luv luv luv.. them all..good luck my dear friend..with luv..

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/15/2011 1:42:00 PM

hey, yours is dark like mine. VERY dark. It's really good, Nette. Sure to score high! Luv, Andrea