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Behind, left in dust, of the old gravel road is a faint trace of Marlboro and a soft summer wind Skies burn orange and amber, and a blazing red sun, that is filtered by a windshield, that's never been groomed A radio station, has more static than tunes and the song of the work day are tires, worn thin The sun's going down, where the road never ends There's a bend near the hill, where a windmill spins slow and where dozens of blackbirds create ebb and flow They dapple the rain clouds, like bats out of hell then will perch pole to pole, plucking heartstrings, as well Headin' home there are doves, that will bend every limb, sittin' high in the cottonwoods, while cocking their heads... Where a hawk circles low over fields, leveled plain waiting for thunder to bring home the rain She waits by the door, beneath light from the porch It halos her hair, like a torch that she's carried from the day they were married, in a little white church that has baptized a newborn, asleep in the crib He drives an old pickup, with a paycheck so slim He has sweat on his brow, and grit on his chin He is bringing home flowers, his heart and his grin There is smoke in the horizon, from a fire within... Not far, there is heaven where all reason begins ______________________________________________ "Sing Me A Country Song" Contest: Resubmitted for Skat's Contest: Premiere Contest: #9 Written : 10/12/13 ____________________________________________________________

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Date: 4/16/2019 3:37:00 AM
so lovely poem
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Date: 9/9/2016 9:10:00 AM
I lovely story told Carrie, congrats on your placement! :)-luloo
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Date: 9/8/2016 6:49:00 PM
This is very vivid. I can see and smell, and hear the whole thing. Nicely written, this has a very soothing, sort of nostalgic mood for me, and was a pleasure to read. Congrats on your win. -G
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Date: 9/8/2016 12:33:00 PM
Carrie, Congratulations on your win in SKAT'S "Premiere Contest number 9" It was my pleasure judging this one for my sister. Stop by and enjoy your win on Skat's Blog "BLACKBIRDS." with lots of love LINDA (For: SKAT)
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Date: 7/10/2015 1:46:00 AM
CARRIE, CONGRATS ON YOUR ANY POEM WIN..... ALWAYS & FOREVER ~~LINDA~~
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Date: 7/7/2015 3:53:00 PM
Carrie, thank you for supporting "my ANY POEM contest #7." Have a nice day. Love **SKAT**
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Carrie Richards
Date: 7/7/2015 5:09:00 PM
Thank you Skat for the HM, and for all your kind comments ! :)
Date: 8/8/2014 11:22:00 PM
Exquisite verse Carrie, congratulations! "They dapple the rain clouds, like bats out of hell " - loved this line!
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Date: 8/8/2014 8:32:00 PM
I just LOVE this. I bet I must have seen it before too since it is an oldie and I bet it won in other contests!! BIG congrats, Carrie. wEll deserved. I remember doing this theme myself last year but in a rhyming poem. Can't even think of its name now, but it was not as good as this one.
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Date: 8/7/2014 7:58:00 PM
Carrie, absolutely lovely reading...should be read aloud. Congratulations.
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Date: 8/7/2014 7:20:00 PM
What a beautiful picture you have drawn. Takes me back to wonder days. Love, Joyce
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Date: 8/7/2014 5:01:00 PM
Great descriptive show that takes us back in time, Carrie! A worthy winner. Congratulations! and a 7 rating to go with it. // paul
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Date: 8/7/2014 6:45:00 AM
Wow, now that is deep... Carrie... enjoyed..linda
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Date: 8/7/2014 6:30:00 AM
I had a feeling this one was yours, carrie, it's a unique hybrid of free verse/rhyme/lyric, as so many of your poems are - they need to invent a new form especially for you! beautiful descriptions, but slightly unsettling at the same time - I like that ending trailing off into nothingness, leaving questions in the reader's mind...(perhaps consider changing 'in the horizon' to 'on'?) congrats on your win in my contest! :)
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Date: 2/4/2014 1:41:00 PM
Conhratulations Carrie on the great winning spot with this love filled write..'
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Date: 2/3/2014 2:28:00 PM
Congratulations on the win, Carrie!!! :0)
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Date: 2/3/2014 9:45:00 AM
Wow this is so deeply beautiful and poignant...Congratulations on the win!!!
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Date: 2/2/2014 9:20:00 AM
Stunning! You expressed this so well, you are an artist. Congratulations.
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Date: 2/2/2014 3:44:00 AM
Worth winning piece.................... congratulations Carrie.
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Date: 2/1/2014 6:18:00 PM
Very nice descriptions. I love the heartfelt happy ending. Congrats, Carrie!
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Date: 2/1/2014 6:08:00 AM
Thanks for entering my contest and congrats on your fine win, Carrie
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Date: 2/1/2014 5:56:00 AM
A universal poem in a universal theme. Pickups, doves, Marlboros, slim paychecks. That tugs my heartstrings! Well deserved win. Cheers, Roy
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Date: 10/30/2013 12:24:00 PM
Carrie, , enjoyed your GROOVE IT win............. ~LOVE SKAT~
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Date: 10/28/2013 10:09:00 PM
Carrie. My words cannot properly convey how much I truly love your words...the picture you've painted...brings back memories of my childhood and people I've known growing up in the rural areas of lower Michigan where the crows fill the sky with their wings and their voices. Much love and respect ~CTB
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Date: 10/28/2013 6:30:00 PM
This is a beautifully written poem, Carrie. The imagery is so vivid, that I could see the entire picture, as I was reading this. Excellent work, Carrie! Congratulations on your well deserved win!...Thank you very much for the great comments. I am so happy that you enjoyed my poem! :)
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Date: 10/28/2013 5:24:00 PM
Now look here Carrie, I KNOW you love classical, opera, movie scores, broadway music, etc. but COUNTRY too? I should have known...Once again you have me speechless - Tim
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Tim Ryerson
Date: 10/28/2013 5:27:00 PM
This kinda reminds me of '18 Wheels and a Dozen Roses' by Kathy Mattea (One of my favorites)
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