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Blackbirds

Carrie Richards Avatar Carrie Richards - Premium MemberPremium Member Send Soup Mail Go to Poets Blog Block poet from commenting on your poetry

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Blackbirds

Left behind, in the dust, of an old gravel road
is a faint trace of Marlboro and the twang of the wind
There is a sun going down, where the road never ends
leaving dust on the windshield, and smoke in the air
and the sound of the work day, thumping tires, worn thin

There's a bend in the road, where a windmill is crying
Where dozens of blackbirds,  will startle the eyes
They dapple the rain clouds, like bats out of hell
then will perch pole to pole, plucking heartstrings, as well

Headin' home where the doves fly, and bend every limb,
sittin' high in the cottonwoods, while cocking their heads...
Where a hawk circles low over fields, leveled plain
waiting for thunder to bring home the rain

She waits by the door, beneath light from the porch 
It halos her hair, like a torch that she's carried
from the day they were married, in a little white church
that has baptized a newborn, asleep in the crib

He drives an old pickup,  with a paycheck so slim
He has sweat on his brow, and grit on his chin
He is bringing home flowers, his heart and his grin
There is smoke in the horizon, from a fire within...
Not far, where the crows fly, where reason begins





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  1. Date: 8/8/2014 11:22:00 PM
    Exquisite verse Carrie, congratulations! "They dapple the rain clouds, like bats out of hell " - loved this line!

  1. Date: 8/8/2014 8:32:00 PM
    I just LOVE this. I bet I must have seen it before too since it is an oldie and I bet it won in other contests!! BIG congrats, Carrie. wEll deserved. I remember doing this theme myself last year but in a rhyming poem. Can't even think of its name now, but it was not as good as this one.

  1. Date: 8/7/2014 7:58:00 PM
    Carrie, absolutely lovely reading...should be read aloud. Congratulations.

  1. Date: 8/7/2014 7:20:00 PM
    What a beautiful picture you have drawn. Takes me back to wonder days. Love, Joyce

  1. Date: 8/7/2014 5:01:00 PM
    Great descriptive show that takes us back in time, Carrie! A worthy winner. Congratulations! and a 7 rating to go with it. // paul

  1. Date: 8/7/2014 6:45:00 AM
    Wow, now that is deep... Carrie... enjoyed..linda

  1. Date: 8/7/2014 6:30:00 AM
    I had a feeling this one was yours, carrie, it's a unique hybrid of free verse/rhyme/lyric, as so many of your poems are - they need to invent a new form especially for you! beautiful descriptions, but slightly unsettling at the same time - I like that ending trailing off into nothingness, leaving questions in the reader's mind...(perhaps consider changing 'in the horizon' to 'on'?) congrats on your win in my contest! :)

  1. Date: 2/4/2014 1:41:00 PM
    Conhratulations Carrie on the great winning spot with this love filled write..'

  1. Date: 2/3/2014 2:28:00 PM
    Congratulations on the win, Carrie!!! :0)

  1. Date: 2/3/2014 9:45:00 AM
    Wow this is so deeply beautiful and poignant...Congratulations on the win!!!

  1. Date: 2/2/2014 9:20:00 AM
    Stunning! You expressed this so well, you are an artist. Congratulations.

  1. Date: 2/2/2014 3:44:00 AM
    Worth winning piece.................... congratulations Carrie.

  1. Date: 2/1/2014 6:18:00 PM
    Very nice descriptions. I love the heartfelt happy ending. Congrats, Carrie!

  1. Date: 2/1/2014 6:08:00 AM
    Thanks for entering my contest and congrats on your fine win, Carrie

  1. Date: 2/1/2014 5:56:00 AM
    A universal poem in a universal theme. Pickups, doves, Marlboros, slim paychecks. That tugs my heartstrings! Well deserved win. Cheers, Roy

  1. Date: 10/30/2013 12:24:00 PM
    Carrie, , enjoyed your GROOVE IT win............. ~LOVE SKAT~

  1. Date: 10/28/2013 10:09:00 PM
    Carrie. My words cannot properly convey how much I truly love your words...the picture you've painted...brings back memories of my childhood and people I've known growing up in the rural areas of lower Michigan where the crows fill the sky with their wings and their voices. Much love and respect ~CTB

  1. Date: 10/28/2013 6:30:00 PM
    This is a beautifully written poem, Carrie. The imagery is so vivid, that I could see the entire picture, as I was reading this. Excellent work, Carrie! Congratulations on your well deserved win!...Thank you very much for the great comments. I am so happy that you enjoyed my poem! :)

  1. Date: 10/28/2013 5:24:00 PM
    Now look here Carrie, I KNOW you love classical, opera, movie scores, broadway music, etc. but COUNTRY too? I should have known...Once again you have me speechless - Tim

    Ryerson Avatar Tim Ryerson
    Date: 10/28/2013 5:27:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    This kinda reminds me of '18 Wheels and a Dozen Roses' by Kathy Mattea (One of my favorites)
  1. Date: 10/28/2013 11:51:00 AM
    nice win PD

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