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Black Sky Days

I like black sky days when rain stains pages ink smears tissue blots you say unbroken promises aren't real and hearts are darned fools if they break twice I think we are a collection of bottle caps memories confined in a box screw you you think you have proof but fake ID's hold more truth than birth certificates and government seals I don't think you know me steal pages of unwritten books you never liked history anyways we say we like dry canvas

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Kika Ayala

Date: 8/20/2014 12:55:00 AM

Beautiful write! Congratulations on a well-deserved win! Regards, Kika

Kabuteng P.Ink K.

Date: 8/16/2014 11:23:00 AM

I found this to be so interesting and I like the tone that you took here-- you say it as it is. Congrats on your win, Alexandra!

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 8/16/2014 1:41:00 AM

Congrats on ur winning awesome write Alexandra!

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 8/15/2014 8:53:00 PM

Alexandra, love the win...PD

Faye Gibson

Date: 8/15/2014 1:55:00 PM

Congratulations on your winning placement, Alexandra.

Charlotte Puddifoot

Date: 8/15/2014 7:00:00 AM

something about this little piece captured and intrigued me...I see worthy things in it, that first stanza particularly strong, and I liked the wordplay with bottle caps and screw (not sure if it was intentional)! I was a little unsure of that last line, and I actually think the poem would finish very well after the word 'anyways' (consider losing the 's') it's an interesting piece - congrats on your win in my contest :)

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 8/15/2014 6:08:00 AM

Congratulations on a fine win, Alexander

Jan Allison

Date: 8/8/2014 7:17:00 PM

this is very deep and dark Alexandra I think you need a clean canvas and start again, Hugs jan x