Black Friday In the Mall

Walking wounded 
in the mall,
so many, so joyless,
grimly marching from 
store to store.
So few with a dance
in their step.
Buying and not needing,
hoping things will change
their life.
Looking and wanting,
this really is Cibola,
a golden illusion,
all you could want, yet
you still age searching
for streets paved
with rubies
and a temple given
over to greed and foolishness,
and a child to work,
and a woman to sweat, 
and a father to die,
thousands of miles
from home.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2009


Post Comments

Poetrysoup is an environment of encouragement and growth so only provide specific positive comments that indicate what you appreciate about the poem. Negative comments will result your account being banned.

Please Login to post a comment

Date: 1/9/2016 3:41:00 PM
I just love this poem. I love the way you write because it's so different than the way I do.
Login to Reply
Date: 2/22/2010 4:10:00 PM
powerfull words of the state of the world today; grim. john
Login to Reply
Date: 12/11/2009 12:48:00 PM
Powerful writing here, Ahellas !! Hope 2010 is a good year for you and your loved ones and that you return with lots more of your talent!!
Login to Reply
Date: 11/30/2009 4:48:00 AM
Its seems we are never happy with what we owe,it seems its never enough,grees is the answer,foolishness is the key,life is too short not to lov what is ours,,excellent message,-Charma
Login to Reply
Date: 11/29/2009 6:37:00 PM
so sad, I don't do the craziness, because I am afraid I will go postal on someone. LOL
Login to Reply
Date: 11/29/2009 12:41:00 PM
we heard a story about shopping in a mall today in church and someone god trampled in a stampeed of people trying to get in first for the bargains for christmas, it is sad people get hurt and buying things they dont need with money they dont have and resort to credit cards it is so hard now times are hard and credit crunch big time,. God bles you from diane
Login to Reply
Date: 11/28/2009 9:04:00 PM
How absoluety true, every single word, buying and not needing, its what most people do... you penned this well
Login to Reply
Date: 11/28/2009 6:37:00 PM
excellent blank verse, Ahellas. When I have a subject and gather some courage, I shall try that. Nice job.like especially the last 12 lines. Thanks for sharing. -Robert
Login to Reply
Get a Premium Membership
Get more exposure for your poetry and more features with a Premium Membership.
Book: Radiant Verses: A Journey Through Inspiring Poetry

Member Area

My Admin
Profile and Settings
Edit My Poems
Edit My Quotes
Edit My Short Stories
Edit My Articles
My Comments Inboxes
My Comments Outboxes
Soup Mail
Poetry Contests
Contest Results/Status
Followers
Poems of Poets I Follow
Friend Builder

Soup Social

Poetry Forum
New/Upcoming Features
The Wall
Soup Facebook Page
Who is Online
Link to Us

Member Poems

Poems - Top 100 New
Poems - Top 100 All-Time
Poems - Best
Poems - by Topic
Poems - New (All)
Poems - New (PM)
Poems - New by Poet
Poems - Read
Poems - Unread

Member Poets

Poets - Best New
Poets - New
Poets - Top 100 Most Poems
Poets - Top 100 Most Poems Recent
Poets - Top 100 Community
Poets - Top 100 Contest

Famous Poems

Famous Poems - African American
Famous Poems - Best
Famous Poems - Classical
Famous Poems - English
Famous Poems - Haiku
Famous Poems - Love
Famous Poems - Short
Famous Poems - Top 100

Famous Poets

Famous Poets - Living
Famous Poets - Most Popular
Famous Poets - Top 100
Famous Poets - Best
Famous Poets - Women
Famous Poets - African American
Famous Poets - Beat
Famous Poets - Cinquain
Famous Poets - Classical
Famous Poets - English
Famous Poets - Haiku
Famous Poets - Hindi
Famous Poets - Jewish
Famous Poets - Love
Famous Poets - Metaphysical
Famous Poets - Modern
Famous Poets - Punjabi
Famous Poets - Romantic
Famous Poets - Spanish
Famous Poets - Suicidal
Famous Poets - Urdu
Famous Poets - War

Poetry Resources

Anagrams
Bible
Book Store
Character Counter
Cliché Finder
Poetry Clichés
Common Words
Copyright Information
Grammar
Grammar Checker
Homonym
Homophones
How to Write a Poem
Lyrics
Love Poem Generator
New Poetic Forms
Plagiarism Checker
Poetry Art
Publishing
Random Word Generator
Spell Checker
What is Good Poetry?
Word Counter