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Bittersweet

so this is the way the night tastes... looking back I couldn't tell, in pencil at the beginning worn flights of steps, from before the war smaller, until they were gone but in the mirror, my hands gold rims, bare here and there out of an echo, knowing not long after flecked with red, blue in the depths, and polished... I see clearly all the pieces of the flower it was late when we started plates stacked on shelves next to the questions one at a time once there was a horizon no color except for gray at a perfect distance from each other almost a thousand years later almost in plain sight in the summer fields waiting it would climb up as a shadow we planned to wait and to whatever is still standing the eggshell of light before dark what was there before remained closed on its own along the ridge of the barn roof only she had forgotten her name a dried branch of bittersweet lace on drop-leaf tables I could not remember part memory, part distance leading me to the lake shore invisible under the hood
_______________________________________________________ Inspired By Charlotte's Contest: "Cut-up/Collage Poems" and randomly "snipped" from a book by W.S. Merwin 2/27/14

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Date: 3/26/2014 6:03:00 PM
Wow, what a brilliant write. You've connected the words so masterly. I can see why it won first place. Congratulations Carrie - Connie
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Date: 3/26/2014 12:36:00 PM
Congratulations Carrie!!! ...a very well penned poem... this is brilliant !!! you deserved a place on the top list!! ... :")
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Date: 3/26/2014 6:12:00 AM
Very creative to pen a collage poem and congrats on the win, carrie
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Date: 3/26/2014 12:26:00 AM
Nice poem. Congrats on win.
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Date: 3/25/2014 10:11:00 PM
Congratulations Carrie..well done
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Date: 3/25/2014 9:04:00 PM
Congrats on win Carrie... Verlena
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Date: 3/25/2014 7:50:00 PM
Congrats on win Carrie
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Date: 3/25/2014 5:24:00 PM
carrie, I was so impressed with this one, and from the first time I read it I knew it would probably be a first place...for me, it conjured up the feeling of sorting through the house/possessions of an elderly relative, and reminiscing about the person's life, recalling fond memories...not sure if that was what you had in mind when you pieced it together, but that's what it brought to mind for me - congrats on your win in my contest :)
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Charlotte Puddifoot
Date: 3/25/2014 8:46:00 PM
that's exactly what I saw, and the fact that I saw it is testimony to your great skill as a writer, carrie
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Carrie Richards
Date: 3/25/2014 5:54:00 PM
I am so thrilled Charlotte.....not only for my win, ...but that you recognized what I was trying to say! At first when I first picked through this book by Merwin, I randomly chose a few lines that appealed to me, and then laying them out, somehow I could feel myself in this old house,sorting through belongings of someone dear, old, who had passed or in the stages of dementia. I am so pleased that you saw these same things.Thank you so much! What a fun contest this was..hope to try this cut and past method again!
Date: 3/25/2014 5:01:00 PM
Congrats on your win Carrie, cleverly constructed. All the best Theresa xx
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Date: 2/28/2014 10:49:00 AM
Absolutely brilliant. Thanks for making my day. I have found it pleasurable to always begin the weekend with Poetrysoup because poets like you and poems like this do not disappoint. Have a lovely weekend
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