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In a derelict farmhouse, it's early dawn She counts the apples spread like marbles on the floor Amber sun streams in, forming prisms on the walls There's a prison in her mind that locks a door The orchards are the center of her world She lifts the apples to her lips and tastes the bitterness of tears The sustenance of suffering is fear She lives in a world that has no shore Only apples to fill the void And a silent voice within she can't ignore There are walls she cannot climb There is nothing she can find to break the chain that binds her to the floor A journal left behind is written in her hand, but elements of life will disappear A season will unfold to makes the reader cold as if one's fragile reason has no core _______________________________________________________ 6/2/17 God Knows Where I Am : Contest sponsored by Craig Cornish

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Date: 6/13/2017 10:33:00 AM
Bravo Carrie, I loved you take on this story and your clever use of "core" to tie everything together.
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Date: 6/12/2017 9:39:00 PM
Congratulations Carrie, I knew this would do well...such a sad story
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Date: 6/12/2017 9:08:00 PM
congrats Carrie...I feel you have captured the essence of the story here.
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Date: 6/11/2017 8:00:00 AM
Love the flow and beauty of this sad write. Congrats, Carrie!
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Date: 6/3/2017 12:58:00 PM
such a sad story you have caught the essence of her last days well..really love the stanza that starts with...There are no walls she cannot climb...beautiful writing...good luck
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Date: 6/3/2017 6:33:00 AM
This is one of the best I've read so far, Carrie:) amazing work:)
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Date: 6/2/2017 10:00:00 PM
So beautifully expressed, Carrie! I think you hit the "core" of the message of this subject quite well! Good luck in the contest :)
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