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Out of the darkness star-lanterns’ beam finds an awakening dream - a strewn snowy stream gracing the depths of the black swan night Earthbound from the realm of the pulsing Polaris ..traveling through time zones of timeless inspiration to timeworn emotions.. snowdrops aquiver with her purity and fluidity waft down in a shiver of night glow with the pale softness of the first pearly plumage through the ripening plum of a twilight turn rich in intuitive fertility where points of illumination germinate on the Cusp of Prophecy and cultivate in the star-dusted zenith of Capricorn Inspirited by the steadfast fire of the North’s guiding gold her solstice soul of innate sparkle ..a whorl of Oneness in sky-dancing swirl ever enchanting the chilled expanse.. lifts the sinking sun and celebrates in a Winter festival of cosmic love tilting the axis of polar points re-balancing the swoon of the sun and the moon - whispered gifts cast adrift like white-winged echos lilt with the lightness of vesper hymns resurrecting the youth in December’s dawning bloom with renewed petals passion-dipped in rebirth; flared fingers of narcissus light lengthen - bestirring dying embers in heartened hope’s hearths and delaying the daily dim of scarlet-scarfed sunsets radiant with lifeblood-promises of warming tomorrows Unifying luminous energy within and without plush in the lush phenomena of Spirit and Nature she comes to nest and rest on maternal sandy shores destined to glide fluid circles fluent in her transcendent love E a r t h b o r n Susan Ashley December 20, 2018 ~ Seventh Place ~ Contest: Premiere Choice No 1188 Sponsor: Brian Strand *Birth Of A Swan is dedicated to my beloved mother, Alice. Her birthday was on the winter solstice, December 21, 1936. She embodied all that is revered in the symbolism of both the swan and the winter solstice, and will always be loved, cherished and missed by those of us fortunate enough to call her mother, wife, sister, aunt and friend. *black swan night: until their discovery, it was presumed that black swans did not exist and that all swans were white; hence the expression, a black swan, referring to something impossibly fantastic, or a phenomenon that occurs even though it had been thought to be impossible. In the context of this poem, "black swan night" represents the unique nature of this rare night as an extreme event of good fortune.* *the paper white narcissus flower is the birth flower of December and represents youthful innocence, faith and new beginnings*

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Date: 2/18/2023 7:45:00 PM
An amazing write, Susan. I’m fortunate to have come across this outstanding work. ‘a whorl of Oneness in sky-dancing swirl’ , ‘resurrecting the youth in December’s dawning bloom with renewed petals passion-dipped in rebirth’ and ‘luminous energy within and without’ are the expressions I liked most, blended of course, with the entire poem. Warmest congratulations on your inevitable win in Brian’s contest.
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Date: 2/23/2023 9:14:00 AM
Dear US, your precious thoughts are so wonderful to receive, and they are received within a heart filled with gratitude for your shining presence gracing my poem's page. It is an honor to feel your appreciation through the expressive beauty of your thoughtful words. Thank you for your inspiring comments and heartwarming congrats. Warmest wishes, my friend.. ~Susan
Date: 2/18/2023 12:15:00 PM
I'm overjoyed to have discovered such wonderful poems, Susan. The poem creates vivid and fascinating imagery, making it a truly exceptional piece of art. I think you did an excellent job of capturing the essence of free verse. I just wanted to say how lovely your mother's eulogy was. I know, without a doubt, that she is overjoyed in heaven at her adored daughter's amazing writing. Congratulations on your contest win.
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Date: 2/23/2023 9:07:00 AM
Dear Lasaad, I am humbled, honored and gratified by the depth and breadth of your cherished comments and kind congrats. The beauty of your heart shines in your expressive words and I truly appreciate the feelings they bestow, especially, your last thought which touches my heart so very deeply. Thank you, my inspiring friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Date: 11/13/2020 6:12:00 PM
Very glad to find this exceptional poem dear Susan. The rich imagery of this poem is so much enchanting. I love the lines, "whispered gifts cast adrift like white-winged echos lilt with the lightness of vesper hymns resurrecting the youth in December’s dawning bloom". So magical!
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Date: 11/14/2020 6:45:00 PM
Thank you for going back to view one of my older poems. This poem is especially dear to me as it is about my beloved Mother. I am so happy that you found it enchanting and magical.. I was really hoping that would be the feeling one would have when reading this poem.. Dear JCB, your lovely spirit and beautiful insight touches my heart. Warmest wishes and hugs, my friend.. ~Susan
Date: 1/9/2019 10:04:00 AM
Hello Susan, swans are beautiful birds. They are gliding in the water with their young. They look gentle. Have a nice day my friend.
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Date: 1/10/2019 6:31:00 PM
Your wonderful visit and kindhearted comments bring me joy, Darlene. I agree with you, swans are beautiful birds and are protective parents as well. Warmest wishes always my friend.. ~Susan
Date: 1/6/2019 5:17:00 PM
wow, this is amazing work, Susan. I think you have exhibited very well what free verse is all about as well given us a most beautiful tribute to your beloved Mom. a FAVE
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Date: 1/8/2019 2:55:00 PM
I am honored by your touching and uplifting comments, Andrea, and I'm so pleased that you enjoyed my poem. My mother was and still is an inspiration to me. Thank you for your precious words and for the fave, both are deeply appreciated. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan
Date: 1/3/2019 7:14:00 PM
Every word here is crafted with loving care and inspiration. The imagery is suffused with an ethereal grace. A captivating tribute to your mother and a breathtaking poem, Susan. Wonderful!
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Date: 1/3/2019 9:22:00 PM
Your gracious visit and precious comments warm my heart on this cold January night, Bernard. Thank you for the delight your wonderful presence brings. Warmest wishes always, my dear friend.. ~Susan
Date: 12/26/2018 1:15:00 AM
Susan, Susan, I became lost in the ethereal effervescence of this lovely tribute to your beloved mother. My mother loved swans. We only have black swans here in Hawaii as far as I know. One day I counted 26 at the waters at Ko'Olina golf course near where my daughter works. Both colors are beautiful. Your poem is a breathtaking jewel! I loved it! Merry Christmas dear friend! : ) xxoo
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Date: 12/27/2018 8:29:00 PM
Dear Connie, your meaningful and inspiring comments touch my heart and bring me joy. I'm so pleased that you were lost in my poem's tender sentiments. Thank you for sharing your precious thoughts with me... and seeing so many black swans in one place must have been a breathtaking sight. Warmest wishes for a very happy new year, my lovely friend.. ~Susan
Date: 12/25/2018 3:29:00 AM
How could I miss wishing you Merry Christmas dear Susan, soul sister.. have a great time in the beauty of loving and loveable souls that cherish you for who YOU are! Love, hugs and kisses. God bless you.
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Date: 12/27/2018 8:05:00 PM
May the new year, bring to you and your loved ones, many many blessings and much happiness, my dearest friend and soul sister, Besma. Enjoy being cherished by those that love you as I know you cherish them with all your love as well. Love, hugs and kisses.. God bless you, dear one. ~Susan
Date: 12/25/2018 3:26:00 AM
Birth of a human nature from the womb of Nature with an energetic passion and pride to be a part of a cherished and precious mother, Alice, may her soul rest in peace.. Dear Susan, these are just humble impressions and feelings.. I can't meet your great Gem.. I can't give enough credit to the powerful, expressive and impressive diction and imagery.. Your masterpiece is worthy not only of reread but also of the honour and recognition of your avid readers.. Deep into my heart and FAV list.
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Date: 12/27/2018 7:58:00 PM
I am deeply moved and honored by the emotional beauty of your heartfel sentiments and by your fav, dearest Besma. Your precious comments are held close within the chambers of my grateful heart and I'm so happy that you could share in the love I have for my dearly departed Mother. My appreciation for our fellowship overflows the brim of my being and I cherish your presence felt even across the many many miles..
Date: 12/25/2018 3:19:00 AM
Birth of a star scattering beaming light along our path.. Birth of a traveler, explorer awakening every ounce of the soul, beautifying the inward and outward.. Birth of a pearl, rich in colour, taste and refinement, cultivated and polished to illuminate.. Birth of a soul at its peak with the highest of beauty, enchanted and enchanting.. Birth of a "resurrected youth", the "passion of rebirth" a never ending hope of "promises" and "warming tomorrows"..
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Date: 12/27/2018 7:44:00 PM
The wondrous depth and breadth of your light and insight inspires my spirit, dearest Besma. You feel my words within the passion of your being, like a sister would.. I'm so pleased and blessed to have a soul sister who shares her exalted thoughts with me, a poetess of sublime talents who finds value in my humble works.. your soulful comments enrich and embolden my artistry, my dear friend and sister..
Date: 12/23/2018 5:38:00 PM
What a beautiful tribute to your Mother, my friend. I am sure that she is beaming down from Heaven at the talented pen of her beloved daughter... Tears form at the corner of my eyes. Simply beautiful, Susan. May you know only happiness. Best always, Gershon
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Date: 12/27/2018 7:31:00 PM
My dear friend, Gershon, I am truly humbled and honored by your touching sentiments. I'm so pleased that you enjoyed my heartfelt poem. Thank you for your gracious visit and inspiring comments, your friendship is appreciated. My warmest holiday wishes to you and your family.. ~Susan
Date: 12/22/2018 3:45:00 PM
Consider yourself a classic poet Susan, the dedication, the journey, the joy not only in this poem, but all of....all the best for Christmas, and 2019..Harry
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Date: 12/27/2018 7:28:00 PM
Thank you, Harry, I am truly humbled and honored by your touching sentiments. I'm so pleased that you enjoyed my poem, my friend. Thank you for your gracious visit and uplifting comments. May the new year bring you many blessings and much happiness.. ~Susan
Date: 12/22/2018 12:56:00 PM
what a captivating homage to your mother, susan... your heartfelt word choices and symbolism truly reflect your love for her!...may your christmas be a joyous one!...huggs
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Date: 12/27/2018 5:10:00 PM
Nette, your meaningful and inspiring comments touch my heart and bring me joy. I'm so pleased that you enjoyed my heartfelt poem. My warmest wishes to you for a blessed and happy new year.. ~Susan
Date: 12/22/2018 8:52:00 AM
A lovely verse Susan and a beautiful dedication to your mother. I hope you have a wonderful Christmas. Tom
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Date: 12/23/2018 9:10:00 PM
Thank you, Tom, for your gracious visit and heartwarming words. My warmest wishes to you and your family for a wonderful and merry Christmas.. ~Susan
Date: 12/22/2018 8:15:00 AM
Thank you for yet again a very lovely poem, Susan. I see that the main content of the end notes is reflected in these lines which exalt the power of your pen. This is a wonderful tribute to a loving mother, one of a kind! ~ Warm regards & hugs, my friend. // paul
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Date: 12/27/2018 7:25:00 PM
My dear friend, your insightful comments truly touch my heart and bring me joy. I am so pleased you enjoyed my heartfelt poem. Thank you for your generous appreciation, Paul, my warmed heart is grateful for your wonderful words and for your inspiring friendship. Warmest wishes and hugs always.. ~Susan
Date: 12/21/2018 11:23:00 PM
Wow great n sweet how u compared your mommy to a swan. Your word choice is top notch and phrasing brilliant. Very poetic a tribute. Kudos. And merry Xmas. Soo nice to read from your ink again, Pleez do check out my newest poem too, The way to greet each other as poets
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Date: 12/23/2018 9:13:00 PM
Thank you, Zaynab, I am truly humbled and honored by your touching sentiments. I'm so pleased that you enjoyed my poem, my friend. Thank you for your gracious visit and uplifting comments. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan
Date: 12/21/2018 4:56:00 PM
Hi Susan, this is such a wonderful tribute, dedication, to your mother. Your tender, heartfelt words do so gently touch the soul of this reader. I read in wonder and awe at your poetic grace. My emotions flow so gently as I read this amazing work. These words sing straight from a loving heart. Exceptional write Susan. Have a wonderful saturday. Hugs....MIke. XX
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Date: 12/27/2018 5:05:00 PM
My dear friend, your meaningful and inspiring comments touch my heart and bring me joy. I'm so pleased that you heard the song of my heart and that my poem's tender sentiments touched your spirit, Mike. Thank you for sharing your precious thoughts with me. Warmest wishes for a happy new year, my wonderful friend.. ~Susan
Date: 12/21/2018 2:48:00 PM
A beautiful poem to dedicate to your mother. Have a wonderful holiday season Susan.
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Date: 12/23/2018 6:46:00 PM
Thank you, Wren, for your gracious visit and heartwarming comments. Warmest wishes to you and your family for a merry Christmas and a happy new year.. ~Susan
Date: 12/21/2018 1:07:00 PM
What an amazing tribute to your mother, Susan. The imagery is literally out of this world with the references to the night sky and Polaris. A very moving poem, dear. I know you miss her and hope you can still have a happy holiday. (I actually looked further into the Black Swan Theory after reading your words. Very interesting.) Hugs, Carolyn
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Date: 12/23/2018 6:38:00 PM
Dear Carolyn, your meaningful and inspiring comments touch my heart and bring me joy. After reading your comments, I realized I had forgotten to edit my poet's note to reflect my intentions in the use of 'black swan' in the context of my poem.. The Black Swan Theory was part of my research but not my sole definition of 'black swan night'. You are certainly welcome to re-read my edited poet's note if you wish, my wonderful friend. Your presence is cherished. Warmest wishes for a joyous holiday season, Carolyn.. ~Susan
Date: 12/21/2018 12:01:00 PM
Hi Susan, The dedication that you penned for your dear mother is a masterpiece. Your talent and heart is amazing. I am blessed to partake of your gift. PS, Happy Holidays to you and your loved ones:-) Alexis
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Date: 12/23/2018 6:42:00 PM
Dear Alexis, I am truly humbled and honored by your touching sentiments. I'm so pleased that you enjoyed my poem, my friend. Thank you for your gracious visit and uplifting comments, your friendship is appreciated. My warmest holiday wishes to you and your family.. ~Susan
Date: 12/21/2018 11:51:00 AM
Stunningly beautiful dedication. Very nice :)
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Date: 12/22/2018 8:04:00 PM
I relish your wonderful visit and your lovely comments, Heidi. Thank you for your heartwarming sentiments. Warmest holiday wishes.. ~Susan
Date: 12/21/2018 9:35:00 AM
My dear friend, this is yet again truly awe inspiring poetry! Your free verse poetry yields such great and delicious fruits, if the reader has a poetic eye, an appreciative and yearning heart for deep thoughts, strong message, tender longings, life's many blessings and exceptional verse! A fav, a true gem..
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Date: 12/22/2018 8:18:00 PM
My dear friend, your meaningful and insightful comments truly touch my heart and bring such joy. I am so pleased you enjoyed this poem. Your generous appreciation does honor my poem as only an esteemed poet, like you, can do, Robert. I am humbled and my heart is grateful for your heartwarming words, your friendship and your fav. Thank you, Robert, and warmest wishes always.. ~Susan
Date: 12/21/2018 6:35:00 AM
Wishing you a Merry Christmas full of love, peace and health. Also, thank you for always commenting on my poems. Love xo
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Date: 12/21/2018 10:33:00 AM
Thank you, Pixie, for your gracious visit and heartwarming words. My warmest wishes to you and your family for a wonderful and merry Christmas. Love and hugs, my dear friend.. ~Susan

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