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Elder jays roam the tainted winds in herds, Alighting upstream like most holy birds Into the threshold of an inky night, And journey forth with brave rafters, onwards For lofty a view, their sweet rest’s delight. Although clouds withdraw from a hued backdrop This avian route, dismal, nary a flop Under bloodstained gust surviving a dodge; Before piteous age taints life , non-stop With hopes to reach their own destiny’s lodge. Yet, the valiant flock abandons a cry Invoking hymns droning a lullaby Through morn hours, the conception of new birth Sends angel wings on gates of heaven’s sky… Enshrining old jays’ flight with endless mirth! ................................ Rhyme Time With 5 Contest: For Laura Loo 10/6/2017 Checked via howmanysyllables.com, rhymezone.com

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Date: 11/2/2017 12:06:00 PM
Rather enjoyed this one, Nette. As always: chock-full of beautiful lines that bear the hallmark of your unique and individual style of poetry. Lovely writing! My very warmest regards. :) john
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Date: 10/8/2017 9:12:00 PM
Beautiful as always, Nette. Laura will love it. I do!!
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Date: 10/8/2017 10:13:00 AM
Beautiful Nette, a winner for sure, URGENT soupie sent !!!!
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Date: 10/7/2017 8:51:00 AM
A beautiful write..
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Date: 10/6/2017 7:00:00 PM
It isn't just about birds, is it, Nette! It is just wonderful. I will fav it.
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Date: 10/6/2017 7:01:00 PM
P.S. That is a perfect quote at the beginning.
Date: 10/6/2017 9:18:00 AM
This is beautiful.
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Date: 10/6/2017 8:44:00 AM
Your skills at writing an emotional poem is evident within this write! Your imagery is so powerful my friend you can't escape the words without a grand view! I loved this incredible piece this morning, Great Work!!
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Date: 10/6/2017 4:55:00 AM
A beautiful poem Nette, I see a winner already and a fav...Maria xx
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Date: 10/6/2017 4:19:00 AM
- Enjoy this beautiful poem Nette ... love the end - Best wishes in the contest - Happy weekend :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 10/5/2017 9:07:00 PM
Very beautiful nette, as alway! :)
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Date: 10/5/2017 5:36:00 PM
One thing is for sure-- your depth, expressive language, and literary presence make this poem incomparable!! Fly on!
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Date: 10/5/2017 5:10:00 PM
Written in creative style--the rhymes work well and the story flies like the birds it depicts--high into the winning zone!
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