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Beyond the Counterpane

With the gentle sound of rainy days I do recall the games I played, while home from school, and when fevers brewed when I was sick, and clouds ensued to turn my stay in bed for days Hands soothed my brow, and beads of dew grew pearls of moisture, in rainbow hues The window dripped, and I was sick, but I didn't seem to mind a bit! Sometimes I still can see it all... the tiny dolls, and toys were strewn upon the bed, around the room where I was mending from the flu Dampness on a counterpane, thermometers and sounds of rain will take me there......back home again... The memory of childhood, lie beneath a quilt of prose stirs longing for that healing grace, that comes again upon the page... A mother's touch with vapor-rub Some toasted bread, a tender face A playground out beyond the dew.. The lonely swing, a misty view.. A shadow was my childhood friend, those afternoons of sick-bed games Imagination flew so high, a carpet ride to magic lands I could look beyond the counterpane Watch the sun come after rain A tattered book of childhood poems, still holds me by the hand ................................................. My first introduction to poetry...Robert Louis Stevenson's Childhood Garden of Verses "The Land Of Counterpane" (A sick-bed keepsake that kept me company) For the contest: "Prose vs Poetry" sponsored by Jerry T Curtis

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Date: 8/4/2014 6:02:00 PM
Carrie, this was a lovely write on something that has guided you through thick and thin. Congrats for recounting it with beautiful emotions and winning as well. Mohan
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Date: 7/30/2014 3:33:00 PM
you know I am sure I have read this poem that you referenced, but now I can't remember how the other one was. anyway, this definitely captured its essence. Congrats in the contest, You did really well.
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Date: 7/30/2014 2:53:00 PM
I love your 'abridged' interpretation of the original, even though without rhyme. Congratulations on your deserved win. // paul
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Date: 7/30/2014 12:15:00 AM
Great thoughtful splendid write Carrie! Loved much ,, congrats on big win!
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Date: 7/29/2014 10:14:00 PM
aww that is the right way to have a sick day! grats on your winner, you did fabulous!! :)
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Date: 7/29/2014 8:06:00 PM
Oh my Carrie, your verse rivals the first and that's no lie! I can't count the times a 'faked sick' to stay out of school (shame on me) I listened to my pop's radio station all day and Uncle Remus often came on...There was a gentleman who was a genius voice imitator and he told the stories...when brer crow was disgusted he always said "Caw-caw-CAW-caw-caw"...Hilarious! And how the heck did I get off the subject? Anyway, congrats...
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Date: 7/29/2014 6:08:00 PM
That is deep Carrie,,, congrats..PD
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Date: 7/3/2014 5:38:00 PM
wonderful imagery Carrie this is a delightful poem. I hope this does really well in the contest - good luck:-) Hugs Jan xxx
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Date: 7/3/2014 5:08:00 PM
I had to go read the original and found you nailed the spirit of his poem with a worthy one of your own...well done
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Date: 7/3/2014 4:49:00 PM
beautifully written, carrie - the vapor-rub is what nailed it for me!
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