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Betrayal of Innocence-A Tattered Flag

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(“les image de l’innocence,” image courtesy of sylisa.centerblog.net)

Poem written and submitted for Silent One's Poetic Expression Poetry Contest 4/14/2024

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Skies enameled with black satin silk like a flag that represented yesterday tattered and torn, flapping in the wind buffeted violently, shredded by today. A child's innocence betrayed, missing in action magic's veil is closed to adult's eyes painted over in this unbelieving world hidden behind all the deceit and lies. If only we could find that secret door and repair the frayed bridge between youthful days we still dared to dream and this cold picture that's now seen. The stars call to us with their twinkling offering innocence as a viable choice before the satin canopy withers away silencing the last true believer's voice.

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Paige Hind

Date: 4/17/2024 12:31:00 PM

A fav- such breathtaking rhyming, Sara, truly

Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 4/17/2024 6:17:00 PM

awww, thank you, Paige. I'm humbly grateful for the fave! Means a great deal to me. Have a wonderful evening, Sara

Tom Cunningham

Date: 4/15/2024 4:05:00 AM

Brilliant writing Sara, I share Victor's comment. Good luck in the contest. Just heading off to the beach. Tom

Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 4/15/2024 4:21:00 AM

thanks, Tom, for stopping by before heading to the beach. I am grateful for your enthusiasm for my poem. Have fun at the beach. I'm 'officially' jealous now :-) Sara

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 4/15/2024 2:35:00 AM

If this does not get a high placement then I don't know what's wrong with sponsors. Such an exquisite poem, a portrayal of innocence.

Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 4/15/2024 4:20:00 AM

thanks, Victor, for your enthusiasm for my poem. I appreciate you. Have a 'marvelous' Monday, Sara

Vijay Pandit

Date: 4/14/2024 1:07:00 PM

Your photo tugs the heart, Sara. Powerful write: --If only we could find that secret door and repair the frayed bridge between youthful days we still dared to dream and this cold picture that's now seen---

Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 4/14/2024 6:38:00 PM

I know what you mean, Vijay...if only we could find that secret door....the world would be a much more content place. Thanks for visiting...glad the photo struck you the way it did me. Enjoy your evening, sara

Sotto Poet

Date: 4/14/2024 11:30:00 AM

Dear Sara, in a world filled with cynicism and dishonesty, your moving poetry explores the issue of lost innocence and the want to reawaken the magic and purity of youth. The text highlights the contrast between the romanticized past and the harsh reality of the present, highlighting the desire to bring the two together. Your use of imagery and detail creates a world that is at once lovely and weathered, evoking feelings of loss and yearning. Imagine a world that is both magical and worn out, with "skies enameled with black satin silk" and a "flag that represented yesterday" painting a vivid picture. Use words like "shredded," "tattered," and "frayed" to describe things that are in a state of decay or degradation. This stark contrast between the "youthful days we still dared to dream" and "this cold picture that's now seen" emphasizes the erosion of youth and the fight for optimism.

Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 4/14/2024 6:39:00 PM

I do so appreciate your visit, dear Sotto. Your analysis of my poem is spot on and validating in a number of ways. I'm grateful for your insightful words and your patience in both reading my poem and in writing your comments. Grateful for you. Your poetess friend in Texas, Sara

Regina Mcintosh

Date: 4/14/2024 11:24:00 AM

Wonderfully done! God bless you. Love, gina

Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 4/14/2024 6:37:00 PM

thanks for visiting, Gina. Appreciate you and your comments. Have a lovely evening, Sara

Joseph May

Date: 4/14/2024 7:38:00 AM

A powerful and poignant write Sara, Well written

Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 4/14/2024 6:36:00 PM

Wow, thank you, Joseph! I appreciate your enthusiastic response and am humbly grateful for the fave. Have a great week ahead, Sara

John Lawless

Date: 4/14/2024 7:20:00 AM

A FAVE.....A DOUBLE FAVE....first line to last a "goose bump" ride masterfully done Sara

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 4/14/2024 7:04:00 AM

Powerful. You had me from “Skies enameled with black satin silk”. A brilliant way to start.

Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 4/14/2024 6:36:00 PM

awww, thank you, Richard. Glad my initial words drew you into my poem. Have a splendid evening, Sara

Suzanne Delaney

Date: 4/14/2024 6:54:00 AM

So true, Sara: For some it is impossible to find that inner child again. So much sadness when children lose that innocence to soon . SuZ

Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 4/14/2024 6:35:00 PM

I agree with you, Suzanne. Some never find their inner child, lost in the ruins of dysfunctionalism. Appreciate your visit and comments this evening, hugs, Sara

Tom Woody

Date: 4/14/2024 6:17:00 AM

Touching, sad poem Sara. All children deserve a warm, nurturing upbringing. Not all get one... and many become dysfunctional adults as a result

Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 4/14/2024 6:35:00 PM

thanks for your visit, Tom, and for sharing your thoughts. I agree...not all get nurturing upbringings resulting in dysfunctional adults...repeating the cycle.