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You crushed my heart then walked away I broke down, begging you to stay My eyes were filled with bitter tears That you’d leave after all these years You said our love had had its day I’ve got bills that I have to pay Gifts to buy for our son’s birthday How will I cope, I have such fears You crushed my heart Not another roll in the hay … My best friend Sue got in the way She stole your heart so it appears I pray one day my sadness clears My whole life is in disarray You crushed my heart Contest Best Rondeau Poem Sponsored by Laura Loo Checked with How many syllables Rondeau Rhyme Scheme: AABBA-AABC-AABBAC 07~10~16

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Larry Bradfield

Date: 7/19/2016 1:01:00 PM

WOW...Congrats on the win! You really laid one out of the park!..Larry

Jan Allison
Date: 8/26/2016 6:26:00 PM

Thanks for dropping by Larry sorry I missed replying sooner:-( hugs jan xx

Teddy Kimathi

Date: 7/15/2016 5:20:00 AM

Congrats Jan, for your WIN in the contest!! ;-)

Jan Allison
Date: 7/15/2016 5:39:00 AM

Thanks Teddy:-) hugs Jan xx

Joanna Daniel

Date: 7/15/2016 3:30:00 AM

Congratulations on your wonderful win, Jan:) Lovely write on heart break:)

Jan Allison
Date: 7/15/2016 5:39:00 AM

Thanks so much Jo:-) Hugs Jan x

Alexis Y.

Date: 7/14/2016 12:18:00 PM

Hi Jan, I had a feeling I would see you in the winner's circle with this amazing piece. Congrats on your win. It was well deserved:-) Alexis

Jan Allison
Date: 7/14/2016 2:27:00 PM

Thanks Alexis I'm delighted as I've never written this form before:-) hugs Jan xx

Sandra Haight

Date: 7/14/2016 11:46:00 AM

Heart-wrenching write, Jan, and glad it is fiction. Nicely written Rondeau and congrats on your nice placement in the contest! Hugs, Sandra

Jan Allison
Date: 7/14/2016 11:50:00 AM

Thanks Sandra I am so pleased to place with my first attempt at this form:-) hugs jan xx

Lu Loo

Date: 7/14/2016 11:45:00 AM

Jan, a wonderful poem and so touching lady, anything you write is so real...congrats on your placement and thank you for being a part of my contest :)-luloo

Jan Allison
Date: 7/14/2016 11:48:00 AM

I was delighted to place so well with my first attempt at this form am so glad you liked it:-) hugs Jan xx

Arthur Vaso

Date: 7/11/2016 6:04:00 PM

If all it takes is for me to drop a 1000 hats, then consider it done, I look forward to another 1000 beautiful poems as this one! oh wait 999 hats, I stuck a brick in one and dropped it on Sues head! :)

Jan Allison
Date: 7/11/2016 6:09:00 PM

LOL:-) I'm pleased with the way the poem panned out as its my first attempt at this form:-)hugs Jan xx

Caycay Jennings

Date: 7/10/2016 12:45:00 PM

Well done! So glad it isn't true and I don't need to hire a hit man. Great flow pops this drama right along and I enjoyed it very much. Best of luck in contest and all else ... CayCay

Jan Allison
Date: 7/10/2016 12:49:00 PM

Thanks CayCay I can write happy and sad at the drop of a hat and thankfully this is a fictional write but I'm sure some people can relate to the betrayal by a 'friend':-( hugs Jan xx

Matthew Anish

Date: 7/10/2016 11:24:00 AM

Sounds like you had a tough time. Get your son to teach you to play chess. It is so complex you almost forget your sorrows. I beat the computer yesterday! Matthew Anish

Jan Allison
Date: 7/10/2016 11:56:00 AM

Pure fiction write for the contest:-) I play scrabble with my son I think chess is beyond me :-) hugs jan xx

Sneha Nair

Date: 7/10/2016 10:33:00 AM

jan...this poem really touched my soul.wonderful read.

Jan Allison
Date: 7/10/2016 10:40:00 AM

Thanks so much Sneha:-) hugs Jan xx

Judy Ball

Date: 7/10/2016 9:36:00 AM

WoW! What a poignant piece this is. Very well thought out and well expressed. Lots of emotion. Wonderful read. God Bless, JB

Jan Allison
Date: 7/10/2016 9:50:00 AM

Thanks Judy its my first attempt at this form I do hope Laura likes it:-) hugs Jan xx

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 7/10/2016 1:23:00 AM

Excellent Jan...you are on a winning roll and I think this is a poem you can add to your wins too! You crushed my heart! Brilliant line to repeat! 7 ; )

Jan Allison
Date: 7/10/2016 5:27:00 AM

Thanks Connie its my first attempt at the form I do hope Laura likes it:-) hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper

Date: 7/9/2016 7:35:00 PM

Jan, you are getting awfully good at writing this style. Good luck in the contest :-)

Jan Allison
Date: 7/9/2016 7:41:00 PM

Its actually my first attempt at the form Eve I do hope I've got it right - I've written similar themes on breaking up in other forms :-) hugs Jan xx

Alexis Y.

Date: 7/9/2016 6:42:00 PM

Hi Jan, This is a good entry. You expressed a broken heart very well in this piece. Best of luck in the. Contest. A Big seven:-) Alexis

Jan Allison
Date: 7/9/2016 6:59:00 PM

Thanks Alexis - I haven't been active on soup much recently - hopefully I am back to full strength now:-) hugs Jan xx