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Behind Closed Doors

On their wedding day Carried across the threshold Now nursery door is closed Mother softly sobbing Her newborn baby was stillborn Such a sad sad sight Peeling paint, broken hinges Couldn’t bear the memories They had to move away Crumbling relics of times gone by Jan Allison 16th July 2014 Written for Door to a Wayra Contest Sponsored By Nette Onclaud ~Awarded 4th Place ~

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Poet Destroyer A

Date: 8/20/2014 10:11:00 AM

Thank you

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 8/6/2014 10:46:00 PM

ALWAYS, ENJOY HEARING FROM YOU

Jan Allison
Date: 8/7/2014 3:09:00 AM

Likewise Linda it is always a pleasure to see your beautiful smile:-) Hugs Jan xx

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 7/29/2014 12:44:00 PM

Jan, Congratulations, on making Nette's winning list. She's a tough judge. Take Care, LINDA :)

Jan Allison
Date: 7/29/2014 7:28:00 PM

I adore Nette's contests and always strive to do my best in them Linda:-) hugs jan xx

Nette Onclaud

Date: 7/25/2014 2:23:00 PM

a most sensitive write that takes me there, jan.. your fabulous win in my contest gladdens me.. congrats and huggs

Jan Allison
Date: 7/25/2014 3:36:00 PM

Nette I am always so glad when i get placed in your contests - the new forms you find for us are always a challenge and I try my best to get it right. i was so pleased to be placed with this poem it means a lot to me. Jan xx

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 7/25/2014 5:56:00 AM

And back again wid huge congrats Jan on this winsome write !

Jan Allison
Date: 7/25/2014 5:59:00 AM

Hi Dr Sharma thanks so much for the lovely comment. Hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/24/2014 7:23:00 PM

Poignant is a good word for this gem. Congrats on your fine win, Jan.

Jan Allison
Date: 7/25/2014 2:00:00 AM

Thanks Andrea even now i can still see the picture in my mind it was superb inspiration. Hugs jan xxx

David Mohn

Date: 7/24/2014 4:00:00 PM

Very well written and poignant Jan, wonderful...I entered as well but forgot the date...I must be getting old :)

Jan Allison
Date: 7/24/2014 4:02:00 PM

Thanks for dropping by David - i enter the contests then forget about it and get a shock when congrats mails appear and Ive been placed which is always a great boost. Hugs jan xx

Casarah Nance

Date: 7/24/2014 4:00:00 PM

Wohoo way to go on your sweeet win sweetheart :)

Jan Allison
Date: 7/24/2014 4:01:00 PM

Thanks Casarah for dropping by. Hugs jan xx

Reason A. Poteet

Date: 7/24/2014 11:39:00 AM

You added a great variety to Nette's wayra challenge with this sad piece. Congratulations on your win. PS thanks for the read and recognition of my own entry. I appreciate your time.

Jan Allison
Date: 7/24/2014 12:16:00 PM

Thanks for dropping by and commenting on my peom. i do try and comment on all the winning poems :-) Hugs Jan xx

Barbara Gorelick

Date: 7/24/2014 11:15:00 AM

Good for you! A nice placement with this sad poem. BG

Jan Allison
Date: 7/24/2014 12:16:00 PM

Thanks for dropping by Barbara. Hugs jan xx

Robert Lindley

Date: 7/24/2014 9:53:00 AM

A great write, a sad message. All so finely written in a very short poem!! You touch the reader's heart deeply with this fine write my friend! BBBBBBBRRRAAVVVOOOO!!!!!!!

Jan Allison
Date: 7/24/2014 9:55:00 AM

Thanks so much for the lovely comment Robert. Hugs Jan xxx

Sara Kendrick

Date: 7/24/2014 9:44:00 AM

I may copy and paste congrats but I have read your work and find its quality very good..Sara

Jan Allison
Date: 7/24/2014 9:54:00 AM

Thanks so much for the personal comment Sara it is much appreciated! Hugs Jan xxx

Carrie Richards

Date: 7/24/2014 9:38:00 AM

Wow......you have told a complete story, in so few lines, and such a sad twist to this contest. Well done, Jan!

Jan Allison
Date: 7/24/2014 9:41:00 AM

Thanks Carrie. Hugs Jan xxx

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 7/24/2014 6:11:00 AM

Very sad and tragic theme, congrats on the win, Jan

Jan Allison
Date: 7/24/2014 6:17:00 AM

Thanks for the lovely comment Dr Mehta. Hugs Jan xx

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

Date: 7/24/2014 5:51:00 AM

Tragic and so sad Jan however despite such we must move on and gang on.. Congratulations ! Hugs,.:)

Jan Allison
Date: 7/24/2014 6:17:00 AM

Oh I didn't know it had been judged! Thanks for the lovely comment. Hugs Jan xx

Robert Nehls

Date: 7/19/2014 5:05:00 AM

Very well expressed, Jan, and so sad. Sometimes I guess the best thing to do is to remove ourselves from such vivid reminders that are causing so much sadness. masterfully written and I agree that this is a 7. Bless you my dear... Robert.

Jan Allison
Date: 7/19/2014 7:00:00 AM

Thanks for the lovely understanding comment Robert. Hugs Jan xxx

Vera Duggan

Date: 7/16/2014 7:32:00 PM

Love this one Jan, good luck in the contest, take care my friend.............Vera......

Jan Allison
Date: 7/16/2014 11:09:00 PM

Thanks Vera o am overwhelmed by the positive comments I've had Hugs Jan xxx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/16/2014 5:21:00 PM

wow, I really like where you took THIS one. You have given me an idea what I might do for mine, but I will have to check out the form. this one was poignantly described.

Jan Allison
Date: 7/16/2014 5:32:00 PM

Thank you so much Andrea for those lovely words of encouragement:-) I feel I am growing as a poet with every write. Hugs Jan xxx

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 7/16/2014 11:33:00 AM

Wow that's emotional Jan! Well penned,, gl in contest!

Jan Allison
Date: 7/16/2014 11:35:00 AM

Thank you so much for the lovely comment. It is not my normal type of poem and I am thrilled at the comments I am getting:-) Hugs Jan xx

Sara Kendrick

Date: 7/16/2014 7:55:00 AM

I can feel the pain of emotion in this one..Reads like top of the list to me..Way to go for the contest..Thanks for the visit to my page..Sara

Jan Allison
Date: 7/16/2014 10:13:00 AM

thanks for the lovely comment:-) hugs Jan xx

Priyanshi Dass

Date: 7/16/2014 7:23:00 AM

This is absolutely beautiful penning. In few words you conveyed such sorrow that it's heart breaking. Very well written. Loved this.

Jan Allison
Date: 7/16/2014 7:25:00 AM

Thank you so much for your lovely comment:-) Hugs Jan xx

Arlene Smith

Date: 7/16/2014 7:00:00 AM

Wow! Jan! Hats off to you girl! Such a moving story told in such few words.. Good luck in the contest dear.. Hugs.. Arlene

Jan Allison
Date: 7/16/2014 7:03:00 AM

Thanks Arlene I am so touched with the wonderful comments I've had:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Regina Mcintosh

Date: 7/16/2014 6:55:00 AM

I hope you win. This is wonderful. I enjoyed reading it. Happy writing and God bless you.

Jan Allison
Date: 7/16/2014 6:59:00 AM

Thank you so much Regina - its amazing how something as simple as a closed door can bring back such a sad memory and a poem flows.

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 7/16/2014 5:19:00 AM

A poignant and powerful piece Jan. Wow, what a great entry for the contest!

Jan Allison
Date: 7/16/2014 6:39:00 AM

Thank you so much for the lovely comment Connie:-) Hugs Jan xx

David Williams

Date: 7/16/2014 4:11:00 AM

Jan, an unusual topic for verse...David

Jan Allison
Date: 7/16/2014 4:15:00 AM

Yes I agree David it is a very emotive subject but it was written from the heart. Hugs Jan xx