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Beg To Have

I ask for your help I have never been too proud to beg Beg your pardon Beg for a morsel of your time Time to write a different script Time undertakes my logic Logic has never been my strongest point Logic lacks what I need Need bounces off my equilibrium Need feeds off yesterday's mistakes Mistakes I repeat Mistakes you never seemed to make Make like a bird and fly away Make your waves on a different ocean Ocean line yourself out of here Ocean spray your inconsistancies Inconsistancies with a capital C Inconsistancies I can't see See me walk See me run Run past forward Run further away Away from the thing I was Away from your simple Simple pleasures Simple mind Mind playing tricks on me Mind over your matter Matter of facts I didn't understand Matter converted to energy Energy that cost too much Energy we both wasted Wasted on yesterday Wasted on nothing Nothing ever really lasts Nothing is nothing but a whisper Whisper insanity in my ear Whisper until my mind erases you You have consumed me for too long You who drip from your empty Empty cup Empty promises Promises I hung my hat on Promises you never meant to keep Keep away from me Keep what I can't have Have my dreams Have a cup of my broken Broken Dreams I read Debbie Guzzi's poem and thought I would give the form a try.

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Date: 1/13/2015 12:52:00 PM
Nicely written and well expressed, cheri
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Date: 9/8/2014 7:10:00 AM
Awesome!! I too like to try this form but I dint yet arrive to what topic I must move round..:) I read twice to get the full effect..
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/8/2014 9:03:00 AM
Thanks, that makes my day Olive.
Date: 8/7/2014 11:57:00 PM
Nicely done Rick... I like the form. Done well... Verlena
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 8/8/2014 8:38:00 AM
I find it very interesting. I'm off to visit you Verlena.
Date: 8/3/2014 6:42:00 PM
You did great with this form my friend. Yes, it is great to have those old memories to draw from when writing. I am unluckily blessed with so many of the sad ones to write about..
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 8/3/2014 6:48:00 PM
Myself as well but the good ones are piling up nicely.
Date: 8/2/2014 7:28:00 AM
Wow, How many cups of coffee did this take ? OH maybe that was me, I was reading really fast, lol. Extremely well done Richard.......and I shall read it again, perhaps a little slower.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 8/2/2014 8:41:00 AM
Thanks for the smile Jerry!
Date: 8/1/2014 10:32:00 AM
Dear Richard,your blitz is fast like a thunder,warm like sunshine & soft like a pillow! yes ! but a special pillow,the one which when you put your head on,you'll experience the most splendid dreams... Best wishes, your fan Moein :)))
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Date: 8/1/2014 9:39:00 AM
Richard, you managed to portray your thoughts and feelings in a vivid and powerful way. Well done!
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 8/1/2014 10:06:00 AM
Thanks Ndaba, I appreciate the kind comment and visit.
Date: 7/31/2014 2:41:00 PM
Richard well done with this form...David
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 8/1/2014 9:19:00 AM
Thanks David.
Date: 7/30/2014 2:48:00 AM
Everything that's ever done is everything that ever is Richard. I appreciate the passionate hopelessness in this poem. I respect how you do not evade your pain. The ending is bitter sweet. J.A.B.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/30/2014 7:20:00 AM
Thanks Justin, sometimes having someone leave is the best thing even though a the time it feels like they are ripping your heart out. I drew on a very old memory for this poem.
Date: 7/29/2014 8:15:00 AM
You are amazing! So many great lines. I will just have to fav the whole thing. Might have to try this form myself.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/29/2014 8:32:00 AM
I think this form would suit you nicely Monterey, thanks for faving it.
Date: 7/29/2014 3:44:00 AM
Smooth..... so smooth. Love it.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/29/2014 8:33:00 AM
Thanks Eileen.
Date: 7/28/2014 5:18:00 PM
Hello back to you Richard, I really love the concept of your blitz poem,I really like the way it flows too.I started writin a blitz poem but stopped half through.Maybe I will try again when I get inspired..But Wow,you did it,and its fantastic!!!
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/29/2014 8:35:00 AM
Thanks Charmaine, I took two runs at it, still not sure if I got it right. Either way I found it fun to write.
Date: 7/28/2014 3:19:00 PM
hey, this form is really catching on.If it were not quite such a long form, I think it would make a great contest challenge! well done, my friend.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/29/2014 8:36:00 AM
Thanks Andrea.
Date: 7/28/2014 10:50:00 AM
Very expressive work that is filled with emotion..Enjoyed reading your work.."Nothing ever really lasts Nothing is nothing but a whisper"..There is One Who loves with an everlasting love where man or woman can't do that all by themselves God can..Thanks for the visit to my page..Your encouraging comments were uplifting..Sara
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/28/2014 11:12:00 AM
My pleasure, I share your view on what is permanent, the A and the Z. Thanks for your visit Sara.
Date: 7/28/2014 7:33:00 AM
Richard...I loved what you did with this...Yes, YES..it was coherent. :) I could never pull this off! ;) I'm going to check out Debbie's blog. By the way...I have a funny blog up today..if you've got time. Hugs
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/28/2014 9:31:00 AM
Hi Eileen, on my way. Have another read of this one, it is now finished.
Date: 7/27/2014 9:34:00 PM
did you get to 50 lines hon? It seems short? good but short read my blog. HUGS Light & Love
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/28/2014 9:33:00 AM
I didn't know the rules, I wrote it based on what I got from reading yours. I have now added to it, I know the title doesn't follow the rules but hopefully the overall form is somewhat on track.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/28/2014 1:00:00 AM
Ok will check it out.
Date: 7/27/2014 7:54:00 PM
WHAT A WONDERFUL poem... I feel like running fast forward..lol .. hugs
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/28/2014 9:34:00 AM
Hi Brooke, have another look I have added to the piece.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/27/2014 8:11:00 PM
Thanks Brooke, just playing around with this one. I'm not sure if it is very Coherant.

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