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Before The Sun's Pieces

Before the sun's pieces, Shine on brim's, coffee mug; And with my prepping airs— It's all jeopardy to Roll frost in bed somewhere. Before the sun's pieces, Rain in a golden chain. I pine at streaked window. How bitter is the fog From where night morn dreams go. Before the sun's pieces, Ice below the outside, In a bristling gesture— God, now I see in you Past my bleak reflections. Before the sun's pieces, While dawn is watched by moon, Sun has the grace to gleam— He'll come in the long fade, For his Moon maiden, seen.

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Date: 1/13/2024 6:05:00 AM
Your poem beautifully captures the ethereal moments preceding the sunrise, each stanza painted with vivid imagery and a sense of anticipation. The repetition of 'Before the sun's pieces' creates a rhythmic cadence, anchoring the reader in the tranquil atmosphere of the dawn...
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Date: 1/13/2024 3:36:00 AM
Gosh, this poem is instantly going in my FAVs, one of the best I've read from you, with meticulous metaphors, myriad flow with delicate details and especially I love how you've personified the bond of Sun for his Moon Maiden.. That made me awestruck! That refrain line is absolutely evocative "Before the sun's pieces, rain in a golden chain" Ahh, such gorgeous descriptions that reflect deep emotions.. That third stanza conveys a lot too..Love this, beautifully crafted, dear Paige. Sending love :)
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Date: 1/13/2024 1:04:00 AM
really enjoyed, .quel vers saisissant ( it is french, it means extraordinary verse) God, now I see in you My own bleak reflections. talking to the sun or someone it means a lot have a sweet week end poet
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Date: 1/12/2024 10:53:00 PM
I really like this. Soupmail
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Date: 1/12/2024 9:42:00 PM
just some beautiful word weaving in this - thoughtfully composed, a pleasure to read
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Date: 1/12/2024 8:39:00 PM
This is one of my fave poems written by you dear paige. The wordplay metaphors and depth of what you’ve conveyed here is soulful and so very creative and well articulated. I especially love “ Rain in a golden chain“ “ While dawn is watched by moon, Sun has the grace to gleam—“ just impeccable! You’ve woven a poetically pleasing and heartfelt poem. Pleasure reading you always! Sending you light
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Date: 1/12/2024 7:10:00 PM
Great poem about the anticipation of the sunrise and the emotions and thoughts that come with it, Hilda. I like your use of words such as "brim," "prepping airs," "frost," "rain," "golden chain," "bitter fog," and "ice" to create a vivid picture of the morning atmosphere.
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