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Becoming Autumn

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If I were to become Autumn you would see me transform all around me in mid fall leaves suspended a freeze frame of rustic life my dress of quilted, rusty leaves splattered in warm shades sunset painted in my hair, and everywhere it seems red-red-red If I became Autumn would you love me in Spring with all the pastel beauties parading every where. they are so temporary soft beauty fades and dies remember I’ll be yours - Forever Autumn. Still in progress......not sure about the second stanza.

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Jennifer Fenn

Date: 12/4/2020 7:27:00 PM

Great new slant on autumn! I think the second stanza is fine as is.

L. J. Carber

Date: 11/27/2020 8:01:00 AM

My favorite season--and the 2nd stanza is just fine, Suz

Suzanne Delaney
Date: 11/28/2020 6:53:00 AM

Thanks Len: It is. All but gone here. Waved a golden goodbye. SuZ

Lindsay Laurie

Date: 11/15/2020 3:47:00 PM

Hello Suzanne … There is something about autumn that demands respect for the offerings of bounty, rustic beauty, and the most calming season. I really did enjoy your poem Suzanne - Lindsay

Suzanne Delaney
Date: 11/15/2020 6:06:00 PM

You know, Lindsay: You really nailed it with your description. I really do find Autumn very calming. Thanks for the idea for another Haiku. Thanks always for your friendship. SuZ

Regina Mcintosh

Date: 11/11/2020 3:55:00 AM

I love autumn too... it's a gentle season filled with serenity. I love your poem so far. Let me know when you add to it. God bless you

Suzanne Delaney
Date: 11/15/2020 6:09:00 PM

Hi Regina: I love your description of Autumn as being a gentle season. I feel the serenity too. Thanks for looking in on me. Most appreciated. SuZ

Harry Horsman

Date: 11/1/2020 11:09:00 PM

LOve this Suzanne, Autumn exists so spring becomes reborn again and again. I think you would look lovely all gold rusty and fiery red. love the poem, and its creation, different way to write on this subject, that's what makes it so special...

Suzanne Delaney
Date: 11/15/2020 5:58:00 PM

Thanks you Harry. Your replies mean so much.

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 10/26/2020 7:36:00 AM

- It's beautiful ... from beginning to end, SuZ :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Silent One

Date: 10/25/2020 12:21:00 PM

If you became Autumn it would mean part of you would die and if you are not evergreen, you may not return.... Second stanza seems fine... Soft beauty does fade and die... You are right.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/24/2020 5:18:00 PM

I love that second stanza. I love it all. It's so great to see you here, Suz!

Tom Cunningham

Date: 10/24/2020 8:20:00 AM

I'd say yes because I love autumn, second stanza looks fine to me Suze. Hope your weekend going well. Tom