Be Quiet

Be quiet my Pumpkin, it's not your turn. "But Daddy, why not?" Her look filled with desire. Hair aflame and golden eyes the roller coaster beckoning. She shows no fear, she is only five , daddy's little girl, so eager to please. My only desire is to see her smile, the love I have for her always there, as time moves on and days go by I watch her grow and live life. Friends come and go, tears too! Days pass by quickly, soccer practice, the school play, (Faustus) gone. Now, she looks around her to tomorrow, her future awaits. My only hope is to help her through a bit longer. How proud I am of who she is as today we watch her graduate. Eighteen now, eagerly spreading her wings. Sticky are the tears welling in my eyes, as I watch her walk off of the stage. A kiss for her accomplishment, congratulations I say. Be quiet now Pumpkin as I wipe her face. You'll be OK finally, it's your turn. 8/23/2015

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Alexia Rowell

Date: 8/10/2015 12:17:00 AM

Your etheree poem is amazing great Job on writing this! ??????????.

James Inman
Date: 8/10/2015 6:52:00 AM

Thank you so much for reading my poem and leaving such a wonderful comment, Alexia.

Estela Canama

Date: 8/3/2015 4:29:00 AM

Great and inspiring poem! Congrats, James.

James Inman
Date: 8/3/2015 7:35:00 AM

Happy you enjoyed it, Estela. Thanks for the visit.

Aiyah Torres

Date: 7/31/2015 10:20:00 AM

Hi James, congrats on your win!! :O)

James Inman
Date: 7/31/2015 11:23:00 AM

Thank you Aiyah, and to you as well.

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 7/31/2015 8:40:00 AM

This is beautiful! Congratulations.

James Inman
Date: 7/31/2015 8:56:00 AM

Thanks for the nice comment Richard.

Casarah Nance

Date: 7/31/2015 7:37:00 AM

Well done! a different form than the norm, your quiet captured my attention! Nicely done!

James Inman
Date: 7/31/2015 9:02:00 AM

Casarah, wonderful contest, thank you for sponsoring it. Also, thank you for the nice words.

Skat A

Date: 7/31/2015 1:25:00 AM

James, Congratulations... SKAT

James Inman
Date: 7/31/2015 9:05:00 AM

Thanks for the visit SKAT

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 7/30/2015 11:21:00 PM

Congrats on ur brilliant winning poem James! Great work!

James Inman
Date: 7/31/2015 11:20:00 AM

Thank you for the kind words, though brilliant? Flattered!

Alexis Y.

Date: 7/30/2015 9:30:00 PM

Viv, this is a well piece. Congrats on your win:-) Alexis

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/30/2015 3:51:00 PM

how lovely!! and you did a quadruple etheree. I have one of those too!!! good luck in the contest.

James Inman
Date: 7/31/2015 9:25:00 AM

Andrea, I love your visits. I was actually intending a double until someone who I will not name (the woman I live with and have been married to for many years, sshhhh don't tell anyone) pointed out to me, "I don't understand a word of it."-rewrite! Can't wait to read yours. Thanks for the kind words.

Harry Horsman

Date: 7/29/2015 5:59:00 AM

Truly a wonderful sincere poem, I also love the shape of this, where the words seem to harmonize and flow all, filled with so much love.

James Inman
Date: 7/29/2015 7:13:00 AM

Thank you, Harry. One of those writes that started much shorter but just kept coming out.

Viv Wigley

Date: 7/27/2015 11:38:00 PM

This is a great little loving journey, James, will do well. No luck required. regards, Viv

James Inman
Date: 7/28/2015 9:27:00 AM

Thanks for the vote of confidence.

Jan Allison

Date: 7/27/2015 4:07:00 PM

what a charming write and I really like the form you have used - made me smile I used to call my son pumpkin lol- good luck in the contest:-) hugs jan xx

James Inman
Date: 7/28/2015 9:26:00 AM

There are a lot of Pumpkins in the pumpkin patch. Thanks Jan

Laura Leiser

Date: 7/27/2015 3:46:00 PM

Such a sweet poem of love to your daughter, James. Very nicely written! Good luck in the contest :)

James Inman
Date: 7/28/2015 9:24:00 AM

Laura, thank you. I think she liked it too.