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Battered Shells

Battered Shells Standing lonely in a crowd Feelings severed, screaming loud; Heart rejected, growing cold Trusting ways begin to fold Waking eyes find life revealed, Wonder when the dirge was pealed; Love was captured, tears ran wild From the young but learning child Finding life like solitaire Some that need but none that care, Most that take but none that give All that die and none that live Reaching out to no one there Leaving all your feelings bare; Soon to nothing they will grind Leaving but a shell behind Looking ’round this empty sea Battered shells stand facing me, Standing near but none in reach Each alone on private beach

Copyright © | Year Posted 2012




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Date: 8/5/2013 5:21:00 PM
What a captivating poem! Loved the comparison of a lost soul to a battered shell on a private beach. -Patrick Farley IV
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Date: 7/5/2013 5:01:00 PM
awesome write, my friend - your poems are always a pleasure to read and then read again
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Date: 9/26/2012 10:17:00 PM
Amazing poem. My favorite line by far is the second line of the second stanza. Wow, You know how much I love word play and your choice of the word "pealed" is once again genius. I absolutely love how you can find the right word. i.e. ...........pealed - brings visions of the melancholy sounds of a funeral hymn ..........peeled - brings visions of a bitter fruit opened to release a funeral hymn. Great work!
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Date: 7/18/2012 4:09:00 AM
congratulations on a well-deserved win. this poem is filled with feelings and i like your use of rhyme. great final couplet!
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Date: 7/17/2012 11:51:00 AM
Terry just a quick congrats on your win..David
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Date: 7/16/2012 4:12:00 PM
Oh Terry, this is so disheartening. "Finding life like solitaire" Glad it got a win. love, Kathy
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Date: 7/16/2012 2:08:00 PM
Heart wrenching! Congrad's on your win. Light & Love
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Date: 7/16/2012 2:04:00 PM
Whoa Terry, This is ...this is heartbreaking. Loneliness at its best - trust standing in a crowd to remind you how alone you really feel! Very nice rhyme Terry! Congrats!
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Date: 7/16/2012 10:29:00 AM
Terry, I feel it, I know it, I live it.....Congrats on win....very very nice!!
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Date: 7/16/2012 9:45:00 AM
Congratulations on the win in the new poet (Only) 2012 contest Terry. Love, Carol
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Date: 7/16/2012 8:19:00 AM
Congratulations on your fine poem winning.
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Date: 7/16/2012 7:23:00 AM
Terry congrats. Good work.
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Date: 7/16/2012 2:15:00 AM
Terry, lol... Carol beat me here...congratulations with your win in my contest...pd
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Date: 6/14/2012 12:28:00 PM
Congratulations on your win in P.D.'s "Simple Poems" contest Terry. Love, Carol
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Date: 6/13/2012 5:16:00 PM
congrats on your win in the contest, this lovely poem has great rhyme and flow :-)
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Date: 6/13/2012 7:41:00 AM
Terry congrats on your win..David
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Date: 6/12/2012 5:44:00 PM
deep and intense..enjoyed..Congrats on the win, ..:) Jag
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Date: 6/12/2012 4:34:00 PM
Very nice! Congrats!
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Date: 6/12/2012 2:26:00 PM
Congrats ,Terry.Great write..Wonderful rhyme..
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Date: 6/12/2012 10:13:00 AM
Fantastic rhythm and rhyme in this wonderful verse. Congratulations are in order for your win! :)
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Date: 6/12/2012 9:22:00 AM
TERRY.. A wonderful congratulations with your awesome deep poem,... God bless~ XOX*PD
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Date: 5/19/2012 5:58:00 PM
very profound write..yet we must remember we can grasp the out thrust hand of another too ;) Light & Love
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Date: 5/14/2012 8:16:00 AM
Such profoundness, Terry. wonderful to read, enjoyed. harry
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Date: 5/8/2012 3:17:00 PM
The sea an endless source of poetry! Light & Love
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Date: 5/6/2012 7:03:00 AM
Terry - Such a longing in your words. "Finding life like solitaire" is brilliant. Please write more. love, Kathy
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