Bather

BATHER She’s naked Well? – perception naked Existing with them all In an obscure, spray-saturated atmosphere An almost steamy dimension. The poly-synthetic, strained drip Along her streaming, rubber thighs A chemical blue become plunge Become weird, relaxed intensity And those shouts! Lay about Shout! Play Display

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Michelle Mac Donald

Date: 8/14/2012 3:33:00 PM

Wow, I'm trying to figure out what this write is about, Daver. Not about a tree, for sure...I'm afraid to give an "emperor's new clothes" response! You've tailored quite an interesting write here, Daver!:) Best wishes, Love, Mikki

Daver Austin
Date: 8/14/2012 3:54:00 PM

It's strictly an impression inspired by a sexy female bather, and how the surroundings affect the senses of the observer. Actually, no explanation is necessary. The impression is left up to the reader. Love, daver

Mohammad Yamin

Date: 8/14/2012 3:04:00 PM

Very vivid and enticing description of bather. Well done. Amazing work. Thanks for your kind remarks on my poem Let There Be Light. I admire your judgement. Regards

Krystal Cochrane

Date: 8/14/2012 2:14:00 PM

Love this line: "An almost steamy dimension."

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/13/2012 7:40:00 PM

david, I like the imagery in this one but it's kind of hard for me to understand a few of the lines. Anyway, she sounds like a very interesting bather.