Bantu

A nun skydiving in a thunderstorm Frogs tapdancing on lily pads written 25th March for Suzanne's Bantu contest

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Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 4/10/2023 3:47:00 AM

A great vivid fun imagination driven 2 liner, both lines clever to let people understand how silly some people talk or think, definitely fantasy, but get this, some could fall into the trap, not speaking of poetry soup readers merely others reading this outside soup. HAVE A RELATION WHO SWEARS WAS A JET PILOT YET IF A LIFT MISSES 13 AND GOES TO 14TH FLOOR GETS OUT. SAYS IN FRONT OF US TO OTHERS AND THEY BELIEVE HIM, THEY SHOULD TRY TAKING HIM INTO A LIFT HIGHER THAN 12 FLOORS. Hugs Jennifer.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/27/2023 1:18:00 PM

haha. Both are quite silly and pretty much impossible.

John Loving Iii

Date: 3/26/2023 2:00:00 PM

The last thing in the world I expect.

Joe Maverick

Date: 3/26/2023 12:04:00 PM

A very zany write James, yet it elicits a smile From me...God bless; all the best, my Sympathy regarding your mother James.'

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 3/26/2023 8:34:00 AM

Your lines sound like fairy tales and magic moments in time - unbelievable, yet magic moments we would long to be true and see them happening or even experience them. Fantastic imagery. Hugs and blessings, Jennifer.

Janice Canerdy

Date: 3/26/2023 5:40:00 AM

Sounds like some of my out-there dreams! Seriously, it is WELL DONE--thought-provoking and creative, Jack. Janice

Juliet Ligon

Date: 3/25/2023 9:06:00 PM

Interesting juxtaposition.

Joseph May

Date: 3/25/2023 2:10:00 PM

I like the images depicted here, Nicely done

Sara Kendrick

Date: 3/25/2023 1:48:00 PM

I like this one. I got a much needed chuckle out of it. Reads like a good contender for the contest to me. Way to go. Thanks for sharing and for dropping by my pages. Sara

Paul Callus

Date: 3/25/2023 10:48:00 AM

Love your creativity, Jack! I was wondering if a nun would skydive out of habit!! ~ Regards // paul

Sara Kendrick
Date: 3/25/2023 1:48:00 PM

Ha!! Ha!!..Got a chuckle out of your comment. SK

Susan Ashley

Date: 3/25/2023 9:48:00 AM

Oh, dearest Jack, I love the dynamic and dramatic imagery.. On the surface it's delightfully whimsical with vivid visuals, but beneath the surface, a Catholic could have fun unpacking the metaphorical layers lol! Wonderful writing, my inspiring friend. Best wishes for a win and warmest wishes for you.. ~Susan

Unseeking Seeker

Date: 3/25/2023 7:48:00 AM

Beautiful!