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Away At a Picnic

Away at a picnic No spoons, forks nor plates Some rich people panic They think of their fate. But the poor ones keep calm No whines nor complain Wash their hands, on their palms- Big leaves, green and plain Away at a picnic A huge boodle fight All seafoods for your pick For great meal delight A long table of foods On banana leaves Rich and poor feel so good To care, love and give.

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Kim Merryman

Date: 8/1/2023 6:39:00 PM

Nicely done, Len! Congrats on your win! Blessings, Kim M

Len Gasun
Date: 8/8/2023 1:52:00 AM

Thank you so much my dear poet friend Kim for reading my poem, your uplifting comments and your congratulatory greetings. God bless you always and your writings. Hugs...

Jan Allison

Date: 7/31/2023 8:30:00 AM

Fabulous poem Len, I had to dock you a point as leaves and give dont rhyme. Many congrats on your placement and thanks for taking time to enter the contest:-) hugs Jan xx

Jan Allison
Date: 8/8/2023 4:15:00 AM

I found once I started with the 'away in' theme i couldnt stop lol. I think i wrote about 4 in the end:-) keep the second one as I may re run the contest again xx hugs jan xx

Len Gasun
Date: 8/8/2023 1:51:00 AM

Thank you so much for acknowledging my poem in your contest through my win my dear poet friend Jan. I appreciated it so much. It means a lot to me. Thanks for the inspiration too. I even wrote 2 poems from your contest challenge. God bless you always and your writings. Hugs

Susan Ashley

Date: 7/23/2023 8:52:00 AM

My dear poet friend, Len, the beautiful spirit of your poem is uplifting. I enjoyed the contrast drawn between the rich and poor, and the circumstances which brings them together. Your poetic verse, so rich in imagery, brings me to this picnic with ease and finesse. I especially enjoyed the last stanza for a grand finale to a superb poem. The use of the word "boodle" is delightful! Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Len Gasun
Date: 7/29/2023 3:32:00 AM

Thank you so much for reading my poem, your uplifting comments and your warm wishes my dear poet friend Susan. Thank you thank you so much especially for the inspiration. I will come and visit you again soon if you don't mind. You're an amazing poet. Blessings to you always. Hugs

Len Gasun

Date: 7/22/2023 9:29:00 AM

Written Poem: July 22,2023 11.28pm

Len Gasun
Date: 8/8/2023 1:55:00 AM

Away in a Manger Contest Re run Contest Judged: 7/31/2023 8:58:00 AM Sponsored by: JAN ALLISON Place 2 ( up to 1-5 multi-w & 1 hm)