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Awaking From Stupor Premiere Contest Winner

When the enchanted jailors of life, siezed my soul and those sepals unfurling manipulative manuscripts ceased to script a twinkle above screams, I became a slave to my own silence, chained by granite wings of masked butterflies, who have been bewitched by the first rays of the maleficent moon. Kneeling as an effigy of failure, in front of the Dark Emperor, I never realised that those depressive tunes of the broken piano have carved a caged victim within me~ and perhaps, the chord of crimson chronicles was cut too soon. Chastised by a lonesome vista, I've arched myself, along those lunar ruins of misty melancholy. But, in the cavernous caves, this heart of lead, bearing guns, has searched for its essence and reminisced how it has always been a carnival of acrylic lanterns, wherein flamingo flames flicker, scented with peony lifelines. Muted by an ivory irony, when karma crowned me as a renowned culprit of my own desperate desolation, I've realised how the sun was sabotaged within my hazy pulsations~ for, somewhere, I chained the harbinger of my own egyptian dawn, with eagle rays of ravenous reigns. Perhaps, one day, the tryst of torment shall be broken, as the destiny will bleed in a revolution of truths, midst rising of a 'Marionette of miracles' singing in her spiritual awakening, and swinging upon ruby ribbons of a magnificent mantra, echoing ~ "Dear Lord, bestow mercy in misery, purity in plight, love in lachrymose tears, and hope in hateful sighs... " As I'll float on colourless pages, like the last drop of divine ink, nevermore, clinging to grief and stifling the spirit, rather, enlivening the silence that shall adhere feathers of liberty, to my winged heartbeats. 'Timeless Trinity' breathes in me, harnessing healing through textures of poetry, encompassing myriad secrets, as I search for my sunrise within icy halos of the third eye. For, seeds of rage can never reep rainbows amidst a watercolor halcyon of fleeting faith. "Tie my soul to a kite and stare me soar across the skies, as I kiss that fiery orange star, spreading honeysuckle furs upon lavish lawns, 'Oh, but don't break the string too soon - darling, breeze!' And there, I float like the last fickle leaf lost in a soothing lull, where lethal lilacs no longer mourn in the misery of murdered mirth..."

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Date: 2/1/2024 2:30:00 PM
Sorry for taking so long to congratulate you on this beautiful work
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Date: 1/31/2024 1:26:00 AM
My God(dess)! A veritable kaleidoscope of imagery and emotion. So many turns of phrase. A couple that stand out to me: "ceased to script a twinkle above screams" "karma crowned me as a renowned culprit of my own desperate desolation" A really amazing write. Congratulations on your win!
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Date: 1/30/2024 8:48:00 PM
I can see why this beautiful poem of yours was awarded first place dear Hiya. Not to be taken lightly, I see you have laid out your Soul in this wondrous writing. I feel a deep connection with these words of yours Muted by an ivory irony, when karma crowned me as a renowned culprit of my own desperate desolation. I totally agree with it. Far too often we are victims of our own making. Congratulations once again on your wondrous write...Hugs
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Date: 1/25/2024 12:25:00 PM
?? for the lilac season here in Minnesota Hiya...very much loved immersive journey amongst your enchanting lines; leaping,twisting,surprising, such fun! Jamesy
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James Marshall Goff
Date: 1/25/2024 12:26:00 PM
Lol praying hands non-transferable!
Date: 1/25/2024 7:13:00 AM
Congratulations on your first place finish. Wonderful expression!
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Date: 1/24/2024 6:10:00 PM
Way to go Hiya Congrats xo
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Date: 1/24/2024 11:55:00 AM
Congratulations on another trophy win dear... well done..
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Date: 1/24/2024 10:07:00 AM
So nice to see it a winner. Back with congratulations on your trophy win! :D
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Date: 1/24/2024 6:39:00 AM
Back with hearty congratulations on your well--deserved win dear, Hiya
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Date: 1/24/2024 3:30:00 AM
A winner, a great poem with so much imagery and emotions. How can you achieve such high standards, especially in the poetic vein?
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Date: 1/23/2024 9:43:00 PM
Wow! Congrats. Thanks for sharing your talent. God bless you.
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Date: 1/23/2024 8:55:00 PM
Hearty Congratulations dear Hiya ! In a brief span of time, how many trophies you have bagged. Each time I read your poems, I am filled with a sense of pride for you uphold the name of our country! :) :)
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Date: 1/23/2024 3:17:00 PM
Wowsa ! This is glorious. Every word, exacty as it ought to be. Pieces of thoughts, completed-Masterpiece. A lavish colour in on painting..." darling, breeze!' And there, I float like the last fickle leaf lost in a soothing lull,... "
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Date: 1/23/2024 11:54:00 AM
Hiya, the first part of the epic piece to me a playwright. I'm thinking dramatic/theatre. I see a young woman pouring her heart out to the audience. You know your inner self so well, secrets "encompassing myriad secrets, as I search for my sunrise within icy halos of the third eye" so specific! "Dear Lord, bestow mercy in misery, purity in plight, love in lachrymose tears, and hope in hateful sighs... " I loved it, powerful my dear. Bol in the contest ~Anaya
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Date: 1/23/2024 10:49:00 AM
Too long for a blinding vision. Must be a good poem.
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Date: 1/23/2024 10:30:00 AM
There are so many lines that I liked! I loved your invocation to the Lord, mercy in misery, purity in plight, love in lachrymose tears, hope in hateful sighs...how beautiful. I can see your kite soaring too. You are a beautiful soul- keep writing and shining. <3
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Date: 1/23/2024 10:30:00 AM
There are so many lines that I liked! I loved your invocation to the Lord, mercy in misery, purity in plight, love in lachrymose tears, hope in hateful sighs...how beautiful. I can see your kite soaring too. You are a beautiful soul- keep writing and shining. <3
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Date: 1/23/2024 10:17:00 AM
The pain described is heartfelt. The way you describe it is detailed and sad, which you do so artfully. I’m thinking that everything has a duality of sadness and happiness. For example, we love to see our children become independent, but we also cry when they leave. Someone told me this today….
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Duke Beaufort
Date: 1/23/2024 10:18:00 AM
The shortest way home involves taking the long way.
Date: 1/23/2024 10:00:00 AM
Dear Hiyaaaa... well done dear.. This poem is a vivid and emotionally charged journey through your inner struggles, capturing the impact of pain, self-discovery, and a yearning for liberation. The language and imagery are evocative, creating a powerful and immersive experience for the reader. The opening lines immediately draw the reader into a metaphorical imprisonment, with the "enchanted jailors of life" seizing the soul.
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Silent One
Date: 1/23/2024 10:01:00 AM
The personification of sepals unfurling manipulative manuscripts adds a layer of complexity, suggesting the insidious nature of external forces controlling the speaker's narrative.. The metaphor of being a slave to one's own silence, chained by granite wings of masked butterflies bewitched by the maleficent moon, creates a striking and haunting image. The juxtaposition of enchantment and imprisonment sets the tone for the internal struggle you are facing. Best of luck in the contest..
Date: 1/23/2024 9:55:00 AM
Your poem revolves around the themes of inner turmoil, self-reflection, and the hope for spiritual awakening, dear Hiya. The language of the poem is rich with vivid imagery, using metaphor and symbolism to convey the emotional and psychological state. The word choice is evocative and impactful, creating a sense of intensity and depth. I love these lines "masked butterflies" and "cavernous caves" "carnival of acrylic lanterns"), and alliteration" chained by granite wings"). BOL with the contest
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Date: 1/23/2024 7:07:00 AM
Omg!! This is an absolute masterpiece!! I am in awe with your writing. A Fave for me. ! :)
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Date: 1/23/2024 6:50:00 AM
Wonderfully articulate poetry, Hiya. Superb vocabulary as always throughout.--'Timeless Trinity' breathes in me, harnessing healing--- As I'll float on colourless pages, like the last drop of divine ink, nevermore, clinging to grief and stifling the spirit, rather, enlivening the silence---WOW! A FAVE!!
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Date: 1/23/2024 6:44:00 AM
What a soulful masterpiece, dear Hiya! It stirred my heart and spoke to my soul. These lines at the beginning captured my interest "I became a slave to my own silence, chained by granite wings of masked butterflies" Your imagery is artistically woven together (especially liked "Oh, but don't break the string too soon - darling, breeze!' How often I've felt that way...anyway your poem was sheer delight. hugs, Sara
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Date: 1/23/2024 6:40:00 AM
"As I'll float on colourless pages, like the last drop of divine ink, nevermore, clinging to grief and stifling the spirit, rather, enlivening the silence that shall adhere feathers of liberty, to my winged heartbeats"., Beautifully penned Hiya
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Date: 1/23/2024 4:49:00 AM
Love and love the last part !What a soulful prayer to the Lord and what an ardent wish to soar into seamless heights like a kite and your request to the breeze not to break the string too soon. The relentless flow of captivating images with a touch of melancholy is so heart stirring and mind blogging! May you float in a soothing lull "where lethal lilacs no longer mourn in the misery of murdered mirth..." You are great sweet young Hiya !
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