Autum Stroll

Crisp crunch Musical feet Wind whistles, musty beat Swirling and rustling of the leaves Golden Rustic Falling to ground More notes to make the sound Feet sample tunes as we stroll Trees mime

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Smita Kulkarni

Date: 8/7/2019 10:35:00 PM

Short and sweet but very unique Laura! -Smita

Eric Ashford

Date: 8/4/2019 3:05:00 PM

Nice Fall poem. Tactile musical tones throughout. Well done.

Sarban Bhattacharya

Date: 9/17/2016 9:25:00 AM

A nice portrayal of relationship between man and nature, Laura.

Laura Hay
Date: 9/20/2016 4:55:00 AM

Thank you for stopping by Sarban and for your kind feedback. Warm regards, Laura.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/25/2016 3:59:00 PM

this is REALLY creative work. One of the best little poems I read this afternoon!!

Laura Hay
Date: 1/29/2016 4:10:00 AM

Thank you so much Andrea, i've not done anything lately, i've still got a few i could share, i need more time, work and home live is hectic just now! x

Sara Kendrick

Date: 11/5/2015 11:32:00 AM

Enjoyed reading your creative and expressive work..I am glad that I chose this one to read today..Thanks for stopping by..Your comments were uplifting,,Sara

Laura Hay
Date: 11/6/2015 12:06:00 PM

Thanks for stopping to read this Sara, i'm happy that you enjoyed this, warm regards, Laura.

Skat A

Date: 10/29/2015 9:10:00 PM

Laura, Congratulations on your "Autumn Stroll win." Love SKAT

Laura Hay
Date: 11/1/2015 3:02:00 PM

Thank you for taking the time to drop by SKAT! Much appreciated, Kind Regards, Laura.

Kim Merryman

Date: 10/29/2015 1:23:00 PM

I like the way you incorporated rhyme in your cinquain, Laura! Great rhythm! Congrats on your win! Love, Kim

Laura Hay
Date: 11/1/2015 3:00:00 PM

Thank you for dropping by Kim and for your kind comments, much appreciated, kind regards, Laura.

James Inman

Date: 10/27/2015 10:22:00 AM

Nicely written Laura, lovely poem.

Laura Hay
Date: 11/1/2015 3:00:00 PM

Thank you very much James ;)

Emile Pinet

Date: 10/26/2015 6:43:00 PM

The words are magical and beautifully expressed in a sea of swirling phrases that dance upon the tongue. Emile.

Laura Hay
Date: 11/1/2015 3:00:00 PM

Thank you for your support Emile, much appreciated, kind regards, Laura.

Paul Callus

Date: 10/24/2015 5:28:00 PM

Very beautiful, Laura...sound and sight being the main ingredients. An autumn stroll becomes a musical poem. Well done! ~ Warm regards // paul

Laura Hay
Date: 11/1/2015 2:59:00 PM

Thank you for both your encouraging comments Paul! I'm shocked i managed to get a place on both my recent contest entries, warm regards, Laura.

Paul Callus
Date: 10/27/2015 2:40:00 PM

..and back again with merited congratulations!! A most worthy win, Laura:) ~ Regards // paul

Laura Leiser

Date: 10/23/2015 11:45:00 PM

I love how you weave the senses into your poem, Laura! I definitely hear the crunching of the leaves :) Good luck in the contest from another Laura!

Laura Hay
Date: 10/24/2015 4:26:00 AM

Thank you for your kind comments Laura!! Warm rgds :)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/23/2015 9:12:00 PM

very nice, Laura!

Laura Hay
Date: 10/24/2015 4:25:00 AM

Thank you!! :)

Jan Allison

Date: 10/23/2015 2:36:00 PM

beautifully penned Laura I can almost hear the crunch of the leaves with every footstep - good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx

Laura Hay
Date: 10/23/2015 2:49:00 PM

Thank you very much Jan, your comments are much appreciated, warm regards Laura :)