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August 23rd

" I remember that day As clear as the crystal springs in June" only it wasn't June, It was August the morning air was thick like smoke it choked me awake the first blush of day flushed across the sky blood red clouds colored her path I lay still like the air without a hint of summer's wind the clock on the wall tormented me with the tick, tock, tick, tock, its bony hands seemed to skip along until I arose from bed I sipped on coffee as I took in the news unsure what my day would bring ...and then I could hear a buzz as if a fly was making circles beside the bed, then a ring, ring, ring echoed within my purse I stared at the clock my heart began to beat faster then time was it my father did something happen I worried as I listened the voice was indistinct as if being choked I struggled with my ears to make sense of the words that fell ...and then silence fell all around as if deaf and mute unable to process and conceive the message my brother, who turned 49 just the day before was breathless like the august wind no more jokes or laughter or candles atop cake his wick had burned out within that last breath of air and it burns, slow as the years pass still to this day yet I'll remember that day forever more.... pick a line contest Mustapha Mohammed "Reflections when the summer breathes" Sandy Adams 8-22-2013

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Date: 9/18/2013 2:02:00 PM
well deserved win............ luv ~SKAT~
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Date: 9/14/2013 6:23:00 PM
Congrad's on your win! Light & Love
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Date: 9/14/2013 9:13:00 AM
a very moving write Sandra....congrats on your win
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Date: 9/13/2013 8:22:00 PM
Sandra, --A beautiful poem and line... congratulations :-)...xox~ LINDA
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Sandra Adams
Date: 9/14/2013 7:00:00 AM
Thank you Linda...I read his poem and that line jumped out at me...had no idea where my muse was going to take me....have a great weekend! Hugs
Date: 9/13/2013 12:25:00 PM
Wow......what a heart-felt poem, it takes the breath away. An honor to share this spot with you, Sandy. Congratulations. :)
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Sandra Adams
Date: 9/14/2013 6:58:00 AM
Thank you so much Carrie...I am honored to have my poem stand with yours....hugs :)
Date: 9/13/2013 10:30:00 AM
Congratulations on your winning place Sandra xx
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Sandra Adams
Date: 9/14/2013 6:56:00 AM
Thank you Mandy ...hugs
Date: 9/13/2013 8:43:00 AM
Congrats on the first place win, Sandra
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Sandra Adams
Date: 9/14/2013 6:56:00 AM
Thank you so much :)
Date: 9/13/2013 8:13:00 AM
I was moved the first time I read this one. Your words are exceptional! Thanks for entering my contest. Congratulations.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/16/2013 8:44:00 PM
It was my honor to have you enter this piece. This day holds significance for me as well, my step dad passed away two years ago on August 23rd.
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Sandra Adams
Date: 9/14/2013 6:50:00 AM
Wow thank you Rick for feeling my poem was worthy of a first place win...and thank you for hosting the contest! Have a great weekend! Hugs :)
Date: 9/13/2013 7:04:00 AM
hi Sandy an outstanding poem of great sadness. congrats on win Shadow x smile
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Sandra Adams
Date: 9/14/2013 6:55:00 AM
Thank you so much Shadow....have a great weekend! hugs
Date: 8/23/2013 9:28:00 PM
Such a moving and bittersweet sentiment. This tugs at the heartstrings while expressing the loss of your brother ... I imagine it must be one of the most difficult things to process... :)
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Sandra Adams
Date: 9/14/2013 6:55:00 AM
Thank you Karen...my sister and I are the only ones left in "our family" now..so much death around us in our life that you kind of become numb... Have a great weekend!
Date: 8/23/2013 3:05:00 PM
Hi Sandra, A moving and heartfelt composition...Well penned... Regards, Ken...
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Sandra Adams
Date: 9/14/2013 6:51:00 AM
thank you for your kind comment Ken :)
Date: 8/23/2013 12:22:00 PM
Creative work that you have penned...Reads like winners' list to me..Enjoyed reading this one today...Thanks for stopping by..Sara
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Sandra Adams
Date: 8/23/2013 12:29:00 PM
thank you Sara...this one has much deep rooted meaning for me...yesterday was my brother;s birthday, today the day he died, but also my mom-mom's bday and the day my mother thought she was going to pass! Have a great Friday...hugs
Date: 8/23/2013 8:29:00 AM
An emotive and moving piece Sandra. Enjoyed this one from you.
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Mustapha Mohammed
Date: 8/23/2013 1:49:00 PM
Yes I saw it. Glad you liked that line...xoxo
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Sandra Adams
Date: 8/23/2013 10:19:00 AM
thank you very much...if you noticed the opening line came from your beautiful poem :)
Date: 8/22/2013 8:47:00 PM
Raw ....real..healing ...life...write on! Sandra! jimbo
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Sandra Adams
Date: 8/22/2013 8:52:00 PM
Thank you Jim...writing is good therapy in my opinion* Have a great night :)
Date: 8/22/2013 8:09:00 PM
This is to impactful not to comment. You moved me with your words. My emotions are caught in my throat.
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Sandra Adams
Date: 8/22/2013 8:25:00 PM
thank you...this time of year is a little rough...i'll have to share this date and why it has such power...sometimes it's the emotions that control the muse :) Hugs

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